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Pinkie is taking a train ride home and says goodbye to her friends. With her trusty detective’s hat and magnifying glass, can she figure out who done it? Who is serving dinner? Who has her missing rock? Who packed a party cannon into Pinkie’s luggage? Who’s stolen one million bits? Who’s committed murder, and why? You know, just the basics.
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Is it gonna be as long as Murder on the Orient Express? I don't think I could read it if it was that long.
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lol, no. It's about 30k words.
I can totally see Pinkie having that.
Bloody hell this Pinkie is scary.
Oh the plot thickens!
excellent chapter And Quill liking Whistle Stop is cute
You bastard! I need to know how thus ends, god dammit!
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Careful what you wish for...
Time to post the next chapter...
4951473 You're a beautiful person.
it's always the quiet ones they say
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Well you wanted an ending...
How 'bout two?
4956363 Hmmm... not sure which I like better. Very well done either way. Bravo! More Pinkie Mysteries! More I say!
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I'm so glad you liked the ending...
Would you like to know how it REALLY happened?
I think i liked this one the most Slate just seemed like the criminal type lol
very good read you should do more like this. You wrote Pinkie very well.
That was pretty amazing, best of the three endings by far! I still call for a new mystery though. Pinkie is like the Sherlock of MLP.
Okay, all the endings are fantastic, but this is the best.
Murderous ponies are sentenced to death by being devoured by Greedy Spike.
I just knew Felix was being foreshadowed.
Quill was shaking as she slid across the carpet. “It’s okay, Miss may-or-may-not-be-a-murderer! I’m on the case!”
Poor Quill.
(Can you imagine somepony that just might even by more shy than Fluttershy having to deal with a stranger like Pinkie?)
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Well...
Read the whole thing. Quiet Quill might surprise you...
Checks google.
Comes back to story to see Pinkie telling me to check google.
5189692 Checks Google again.
I don't know why this hasn't had more attention, it was featured on Equestria Daily for goodness sake. Very fun story, though I'm not sure about the "three endings" thing. But the feldspar, what the heck was that about? Very Pinkie.
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*takes a bow*
Thank you.
The three endings are a parody (copy?) of the movie "Clue." My first thought for the story would be Pinkie trying to find a rare rock to complete her collection to show to her father, but then I thought, "nahh, it's Pinkie."
Entertaining so far! The characterization is well-written, and the interactions cartoonish enough to fit with the FiM vibe.
Oh good, someone's played and/or watched Clue.
Also good to see she always takes a Sherlock Holmes outfit on train rides.
I find myself oddly fond of Tiny Tinsel. I think it's because she actually started out nice to Whistle Stop before he asked her if she was old enough to travel on her own. That's the kind of question one must tire of hearing and makes her remaining bad mood rather sympathetic.
Presumably because last time she tried to do that, Twilight got herself thrown out of the Wedding Rehearsal.
I feel like this rock will turn out oddly important to the main mystery.
The bit with Hotshot in this chapter was excellent. Very Warner Brothers.
Multiple Ending? You really did watch Clue.
The "What really happened" ending deserves it's place. I had my suspicions about a body switch when the face was destroyed on the corpse and the engineer kept his face hidden. Of course, I was expecting Felix to have murdered the engineer to abscond with the money, not this, but it fits well.
Good job developing all the OCs for this story.
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Thanks, I didn't want any of the suspects/OCs to come across as mary/gary stu, unlikable, or beyond reproach. Plus, they needed to come out as "real" characters when next to Pinkie Pie, which is super-hard because she's so over the top/dynamic.
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You're welcome. I think you managed a fine line there, making them flawed but likeable. I already mentioned how that one introductory scene shaped my opinions on Tiny for example. Same for Quiet Quill, who managed to avoid being too standoffish by passing that note.
The tossed salad bit was wonderful. The forced innuendo was amusing on it's own, but I found Hot Shot's pride in his salad tossing ability – and the impromptu casual salad-tasting session it turned into – really funny.
5354641 Don't you remember MMMystery on the Friendship Express?
Ok... I know this story is 4 years old... but, wut?
Why would you boil asparagus in gasoline... how would you even do that?
5354658 The Boulder did it...
Hmm, before I finish reading, let me guess on the REAL outcome:
Felix beat the engineer to death and took his place so he could skip off with the bond since he's a crook and the businesses are in trouble. He poisoned Whistle because he was the only one who knew what the real engineer looked like.
I've read almost all of the Hercule Poirot stories... and correctly guessed the killer and motive in more than half of them the first time around.
I know well how to utilize the little grey cells, you see.
"Oh," said Hot Shot. "Well since there's no death penalty to worry about..." He then took out an oozie and strafed them all, even Pinkie, because they were anti-Deadpool bullets. Then he went on to slaughter 10 billion more ponies in every sick, twisted manner imaginable. And then he surrendered, laughing because the two dipshit princesses took away the death penalty.
He forgot they could reinstate it, however. That's the advantage of being a monarchy.
Huh... I think my ending makes much more sense, really. A fake body and fake blood? That only works in movies as a prop, NEVER as part of the actual story itself. In the flesh, at the scene? Nobody would be fooled. There's also a smell of a dead body you simply CANNOT duplicate without just the right materials. That's why no one has ever used such a weak ploy in reality.
Besides, all the clues fit neatly with Felix having set up all the company stuff and now trying to make off with the money. How Felix' body disappeared so quickly from the dinner car in the dark. Why the body was so savagely mutilated. Felix was bothering Quiet, he might have seen her take the medicine and, as a career con man and criminal mastermind might have had his hoof in poisonings previously... thus having the knowledge he needed to swap medications and take out Whistle when he feared being recognized. It would explain where the bond was, why the engineer kept hidden when he was interviewed.
But I suppose this really is like "Clue", where the evidence was such that tossing in additional information the audience could not (nor any normal detective for that matter) have beforehand could make the outcome totally different... except for the body. I threw out the notion of the blood and body being fake at the start, because in real life it's too easy to tell the difference. That's the real weak link here. It being fake makes as much sense as the maid being a robot in "Murder By Death". The two things, in reality, just look so radically different that it's implausible anyone would be deceived for more than a moment.
So, you almost had a genuine mystery here, but didn't quite follow your own more obvious trail of clues there and fell into a plausibility trap with the key piece of physical evidence.
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While I find a fake dead body made out of pillows fooling anyone for long implausible, I could buy it fooling people for a very short period, if those people didn't get a close look and had never seen a real dead body, so they didn't know bodies smell.
8845386 Well that's kinda the point. Pinkie was REALLY close. She actually tasted the fake blood. I know it's Pinkie being Pinkie-er than usual, but it rather undermines everything that went on afterward if she already knew what was going on.