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After receiving endorsements from both Fancypants and Hoity Toity, Rarity’s business has taken off. It isn’t fair to Applejack, because there’s no such thing as a famous apple critic. Who else could endorse the Apple family business? Who is beloved by all, and could put Sweet Apple Acres on the map?
Why, Princess Celestia, of course! There’s just one, tiny, little problem…
Celestia… um… dislikes apples.
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I hope Applejack brought an umbrella
omg that is a funny mental image. SEQUEL lol
Applejack, I don't think you understand how 'advertising' works.
Hello! I am part of a reviewing group. We review as the background mane six! I am Vinyl Scratch!
This story is very clever! I have never seen another like it!
Your detail was pretty good, but I would suggest describing how Celestia feels when Applejack comes up to the throne and offers her an apple.
Grammar was good!
Originality: 5/5
Detail: 4/5
Grammar: 5/5
Over-all: 4.5/5
Keep writing, man!
Apple are worst fruit.
Oranges for the win!
//runs away!
In another physical form, Celestia hated pears...
(Celestia was REALLY the Doctor all along! Doc Hooves was a red herring!)
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I don't know about a sequel, but how about a few more chapters? This story isn't fully posted yet, however, It IS finished. I don't normally post a story until it's finished. I plan to post one chapter per-week. How does that sound?
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I didn't request a review, but I appreciate it nonetheless.
I'll keep in mind that first-person stories allow for a more intimate look into a character's feelings. This is the first ever first-person story I've done, and I like how it turned out. I might try it again instead of just defaulting to third-person.
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Celestia (in my headcannon anyway) agrees with you. Doesn't everypony think breakfast at the crack of dawn is the best meal of the day?
They're not the Elements of Harmony anymore
5221499 As far as we know, they still embody the spirits of the Elements, even though the physical Elements had to be returned to the Tree of Harmony. That seems to be enough for most people to be fine with others still calling them the EoH.
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If it's finished, why drag it out that much? 2-3 days between chapters, at most, should be a sufficient buffer between postings. That way there's less lag, less "Oh, what happened again last chapter?" on the part of the reader.
I don't even have to read the beyond the summery to know that this story is completely redundant. Celestia already gave the Apple family her endorsement hundreds of years ago when she GAVE THEM THEIR LAND.
5222348 Now, that's just stupid. They gave them up, so calling them that doesn't make sense
5223074 A hundreds-of-years-old land grant doesn't compare to a modern advertising-type endorsement when it comes to sales.
It's Princess Celestia Hates Tea but with apples.
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This is just an artifact of obfuscation (that makes sense, right?). I couldn't really say exactly who it was at the beginning of the story or that'd give too much away. I could have said "Twilight or one of her friends" or maybe "one of the most important ponies in Equestria," but that lacks 'punch.' So yes, you're technically correct; I'm referring to a character, not a fancy piece of jewelry.
But please, gentle reader, won't you grant this humble author a little slack? It didn't confuse you, did it? If it did, I'm terribly sorry. If not...
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Hmmm... I don't want to post it too fast, but maybe you're right...
Okay, I've decided. How does Wednesday sound?
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I wasn't aware of that story. Well, it's on my read it later list now. Thanks!
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Sounds good to me. I always like when an author has a whole story done before posting and then just parcels it out every few days. That ensures a good internal balance throughout, and allows readers to take it in smaller quantities instead of massive blocks all at once, which can be off-putting to some. It also reassures the reader that a story is DONE, that a conclusion exists, instead of adding to the veritable horde of incomplete stories that litter the site.
Never heard of Princess Celestia Hates Tea and you've been here for 2 years? That's... quite surprising, actually. Well, it's renowned for very good reason, do enjoy.
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A clam facade?
Fire Level Dasher, he sucks.
a clam facade
I cracked up.
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Fack.
Okay, you caught me. Fair enough. That was a pretty bad miss, too.
But hey, nobody's PERFECT.
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Yeah, what are ya gunna do about it?
5226394 Let the author look at the comments and make the change himself, since I can't do it from however many miles away (yeah, MILES, not kilometers).
Also: "I would have gotten away with it, too, if it hadn't been for that meddling moose!"
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Moose: We can be wriiiiiters…
Dasher: We can't do that!
Moose: We can be wriiiiiiters, and that's a fact.
Dasher: No nothing, could make us work together!
Moose: We could always wriiiiiiiite some clop about Dash!
Together: We could be featured, forever and ever
Moose: Just because I~~~~~~ will always love yo—
Oh, wait, MEDDLING Moose.
I have a mental image of Celestia commiserating with her sister after this, and saying the following:
(Watch from 40 seconds, I still can't work ou how to link to the middle of a video on this site)
Great story so far. I like that you've made Fancy Pants to be less of a saint than he's often written as. And as a noble, he's not annoyingly stupid the way they usually are.
Man, if I was a Fillydelphian shipbuilder and I had my daily slice of cake replaced with apples, I would definitely be complaining to my union rep.
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Have to agree one hundred percent with this. Everyone makes Fancy Pants out to be a saint, just because of his niceness to Rarity (though I have to wonder, how nice would he be, and how quaint would he find her dresses… if she didn't first mention she was staying at the castle, and knew the Princess.)
Actually, a good look at Fancy Pants outside that setting, the Fluttershy Micro, he's following Praiser Pan, snubbing his nose at the artists there, basically because Praiser is saying so. Then of course, the whole group turn their opinions of Fluttershy's work around when Celestia comes along and says she loves it.
So yeah, Fancy Pants isn't so much the saint of the nobles, more just another schmoozing sycophant.
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Okay, that mistake has been... [deep voice]dealt with[/deep voice] appropriately.
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I always figured Fancy was "better" than the other nobles. And by better, I mean better connected, better financed, and just better at "playing the game." I never bought into the whole: "Canterlot nobles are a bunch of hedonistic bastards," but lets not kid ourselves, they're not saints either.
5228822 Well, I'd say he's their (un)official leader for a reason (I think he's the mayor of Canterlot). He's smart enough to put on that friendly, affable act, like Lord Dowton on Dowton Abby, because it's to his advantage. Whether that is a mask or his true feelings is a matter for debate. I think you're absolutely right about how he was very conscious and deliberate in his treatment of Rarity. What do you want to bet Celestia remembers how nice Fancy Pants was to one of her Elements?
5228877 Yup. It always bugs me to see the Canterlot nobility shown as unable to tie their own shoes, especially in fics where the nobility still holds actual power. The stereotype of nobles as stupid fops comes from British nobles after they lost their power and had nothing better to do than hold parties, not ruling feudal lords. I think I said this elsewhere but, you can base your nobility on Game of Thrones or Dowton Abby, but not both.
Royal
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Other than that there are lots of massive, blocky, near Wall-of-Text chapters that you could break down into more readable paragraphs. This was an interesting start to an interesting looking fic. I'll give you a fav and an upvote.
5228937 Another one?
Well, I'm glad to see people aren't afraid to call me out on my mistakes. At least this one wasn't a fucking clam. 
I WILL DO BETTER.
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*snerk*
It's okay, happens to everyone every now and then.
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Well, I guess if the worst of it is a few switched letters and a missing capital, I should consider myself lucky.
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This is my first shot at a first-person story. It's a bit odd, only being able to show what's going on from a single character's point of view. I think the key is choosing an interesting character to "speak" from. Celestia fit the bill nicely.
I'm glad you like the story so far. How about another chapter... now?
Is mayonnaise a tool for justice?
I vote that Celestia goes for revenge, by replacing everything in Luna's room with mustard jars.
Is this gonna be another 'Celestia is forced to say she likes something she actually hates, and then is forced to be given tons and tons of that food that she hates for all eternity afterwards?
So childish.
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Yep. Good fic so far by the way, I look forward to what you put out next chapter.
Edit:Just saw that next chapter is out and didn't show on my notifications. Can't wait to read Chapter 2. *goes to read*
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This was an interesting chapter. XD "Mayonnaise of Justice" indeed.
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Celestia threw up in Luna's mouth. I think justice has been served.
and that, is why mayo is but a condiment.
...I like mayo
5234581 Celestia was just feeding her young. Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo do it all the time!
Plus, Luna ate her chocolates. never eat the chocolates.
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Um... no?
Is that actually a genre? How many fics are there about torturing poor Celestia by making her eat stuff she hates?
Why can't Luna eat the apple?
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I was rather expecting this as well; have it turn into a royal fruit war, one side with oranges, the other apples. Sure, it would largely be a show, but I could totally see the sisters doing it.
Maybe Celestia could play a sleight-of-hoof/magic thing and discreetly teleport the bites from her mouth into a discreet trash can, pretend to chew and swallow, take another bite, teleport it from her mouth, and repeat until the apple was gone.
Then again, a pony her size can eat an apple with one bite, so it shouldn't be that difficult...
Do they not have some sort of spell to make something stop smelling or deaden a pony's sense of smell? They have spells to turn things into oranges and grow mustaches on creatures without follicles; that seems fairly basic.
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for the love of all things holy never punify paparazzi. One it doesn't need to be punified, and second that just reads horribly. Like washing ones eyes with mace and liquified mustard gas. That and paparazzi are already a gender neutral word meaning "freelance photographer who takes pictures of celebrities for money".
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https://www.fimfiction.net/group/760/the-lunaverse/thread/134351/southern-dialect make sure to look through the comments section. Lots of good stuff for writing southern dialect, and lots of southern bronies giving input.
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Because it was Celestia's blunder that put SAA at risk. Although a sisterly fruit war would be amusing. Although that might spill over to a tea and coffee war as well.
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Ohhh... thanx for the dialect link! That should prove useful I hope. I'd decided to have a secondary narrator in one of my fics have an accent, despite always finding them an utter pain in the butt to read or write. Ah well. If we don't torment ourselves in such ways, who will?
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Exactly, that and the best ways to grow as a writer is to find something to challenge ones creativity from time to time. And best of luck on your story.