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An ancient evil is about to rise from a third alicorn, and our only hope lies in the claws of a young dragon. Will he be able to stop this evil? Or will he die without telling the one he loves how he truly feels.
This story was originally started by spikethed, and I have been given permission by him to continue writing it.
the next one should be up within the next 3 to 5 days, i have other things to do, another stroy to write and stuff like that.
CH 2 is about a third done, and i need to edit it as well, cause some people think i need to an editor not to mention any names....
so all i can say for sure is it'll be soon. this story has become quite popular and i have no plans to cancel it.
Sparity forever!!! 
So the site went down for awhile....... that kinda blows.
but what doesn't blow is the fact that it gave me a lot of free time to type instead of read
so i guess we all win or something.....
anyways i hope you enjoyed the chapter. please rate, comment, fav, and all that good stuff
now excuse me........ i've been typing for 6 hours straight and i have to snap my fingers back in place
Tried and want to go to bed. Go to Fimfiction one last time for any updates. Find this. FUCK SLEEP IM READING POINES.
Bring us another ASAP.
Also, Spike has his pimp swag again.
This is so extreamly diffrent then a very special some pony and i love it.
This is written much....... bolder and it works so amazingly you can actualy feel how much more spike has grown, his combat prowes, sexuality, and everything just feels extreamly solid and for once i feel like spike is being portrayed as the fire breathing bad ass that most people attempt to do and largely fail at (seriosuly how do so many authors put spike in combat situations and completely ignore the fire breath). Rage inspired strength was a great touch, though it seems that spike needs to learn to channel it a bit better (not that im complaning about the joker style moment of insanity mind you), and easily visualized combat is hard to really pull off but you nailed it across the board.
Nice to see a change in style between storys and how you work both into their respecitve stories perfectly keep it up can't wait for more.
Don't you love misunderstandings? they're soooooooooo cool!! 
anyways i hope y'all like this chapter, i know i did.
so leave a comment, favorite it, track it most definitly so.
and for those ponies without Fimfiction accounts, please make one
thank you and good night!!!
I enjoy these kind of romances. that being i do hope that it doesn't go too far from kisses and nudges. Like someone said before, it takes a special kind of skill to get a story like this.
though i can't believe i'm saying, don't rush the chapters, keep the story and writing a top priority, i can't tell ow sad it is to see a great plot go down the pan because the writer feels he needs to keep updating as fast as possible. An excellent read none the less
... (WHAT HAVE I DONE!!! I WANT THE NEXT CHAPTER NOW! WAAAHHH!!)
WHAT? another chapter already? Somepony has too much time on his hands......
No in all seriousness the second i got the draft for this chapter i was glued to my keyboard. i hope its editied a bit better, still looking for a pony to proofread so i usually do it myself.
anyways i hope that this chapter pleases you in a matter only this story can 
same deal as always: plase rate, track and comment. ecespecally comment, they're what keep me going through all this
also it's my Birthday so ~yay. 
Live long and Tolerate
P.S. Wet Rarity Is Best Rarity
First off that was the most d'awww inducing thing I've read all week. There are a few of my thoughts of this chapter.
_ "He's a jackass"- thankfully no donkeys heard that racist joke. It made me laugh.
_Best line in the whole fic: "I’m just the janitor for an OCD unicorn who’s fallen asleep and drooled on half the books in the library." 
_ Bon Bon and Lyra were great and I loved Spike's bad ass retelling of what happened to The Diamond Dog.
_The show and fan fiction writers need to introduce Eastern dragons because while in Western culture they are symbols of greed, destruction and chaos, the opposite is true in Eastern mythology: luck, virtue and peace There is also Kirins (horse dragon hybrid) as well, just saiyan.
_Great use of that image in your fic.
This was just a well made chapter of a great fic. This chapter was well paced, the jokes were funny and the emotional parts were emotional. I always wanted a fic that balances d'awww, action and comedy and this comes really close to those requirements.
"So J Jonah Jameson what did you think of this chapter?"
My other reaction:
Peace Out.
Happy birthday.
Happy birthday! It's funny that on your birthday you treat us to such a well-paced chapter. I was glad to see you didn't let the misunderstanding last too terribly long just to keep the tension up. The passion and care between the two is unmistakeable and you did a very good job of portraying that love that finally comes bursting at the seams.
“Spike, if you feel that way about her, you should go tell her that.”
She batted her eyes and gave him a sexy little grin.
Ok thats it for errors on my end now to my usual rant. That was some chapter, i may be drooling a bit at the tastyness of that awsomesauce, very emotional. You really set the mood for each part extramly well the sorrow was heartbreaking, Spikes story telling was enthralling and fantasticaly dark, and that ending /shiver perfect.
One thing though with the whole diamond dog part and the added part in this chapter im wondering if this should be getting a dark tag or even raised to a mature rating neither of which are bad things they allow you to do more with the story certainly, but still something i felt needed to be pointed out.
Anywho keep writing more cause the world can't handel not having this awsomeness in it now that its been presented.
P.S. Happy B-day
Rant time.
Ok if this story is like perfect i mean First Spike grows up around mares so im sure he knows how to behave around them and be a gentledragon. Second almost no guys arond and he always helps anyone who needs it thats kind and he has a big heart. Last dude will die for the poines he loves i mean a dog and pony show he was fighting a losing fight. If anything Spike could get any pony he wants expect lyra and bon bon
Rant over time for pictures.
Spike Swag
WHAT A TWIST!!! although it was kinda obvious.
but man that got intense, i even had to take my shirt off at one point....
I would like to give a shoutout to my new editor, who didn't want credit for this cause and i quote "You wouldn't give the teacher credit for a student's work"
however, i've never listened to a teacher in my entire life, and i sure as buck ain't starting now...... So thank you Busen!!!!
COMMENT. FAV. TRACK. SWAG. COMMENT. FAV. TRACK. SWAG.
will try and get a new chapter out ASAP. Stay classy everypony
I’ve always wondered what pony tasted like........ just wait till Rarity gets the chance im sure you'll find out
Is this a bad time to gloat that i was totally right about Spike not getting any yet and did Lyra just insinuate that Spike was a virgin jeez after going on about his romantic ventures i did not see that coming.
theirs a 3 in front of Dear Spike..... i suspect its not supposed to be their
Fluttershy has just been scared for life, i feel so bad for her and my Celestia our those two kinky, a broom handle good damn.
"He’s so adorable when he’s asleep" now isn't that just the kind of adorableness we expect from Luna.
Damn man very exciting and suspenseful as usual; it really amazes me that you can simultaneously write two absolutely amazing stories at the same time, especially considering the fact neither are short and both have very intricate plots. Its just so good.................
My face when i heard about the broom
when I read “Th-th-th-the things th-th-they did…” she muttered, dry tears rolling down her blood cracked eyes. “I-I-I’ve never seen a horn used that w-w-way before” she mumbled before finally passing out, landing face first on the ground with a thud." I thought i would never stop laughing
OOOooooooOOOOoooooo SSSSSccccaaaaarrrryyyyyy
anyhooves, here is your chapter, enyjoy it, cause it is good, or at least i think it's good 
a big thanks to Bunsen, for editing this even though that pony probably has a million other things to do.
so tell me what you thought of the chapter, mini reviews are great, tell me what you like, what you love, what made one of your organs blow up, that sort of thing
K, now i shall whore myself out for a friend, you should all go check out @bronylogic on twitter, the guy gives out funny little bits of...... well brony logic. he's a friend of mine so i help him out with ideas on occasion, so go check him out
anyways, live long and pony on
y know i kinda exspected him to joke with rarety 
, but it dint help i still lafted my ass of and the funny *“You kissed a colt….. And you liked it!” Conquest sang playfully, amused at the terrified expression on Spike’s face. “Did you like the taste of my cherry chap stick?”* made me cry happy tears, as the therapist carried me off
OH SNAP, CRACKLE, AND SODAPOP!!! even I didn't see that coming (And i wrote this....)
things are getting pretty crazy all up in here.... which reminds me, somepony should make a list of all the things wrong with conquest...
Quick thanks to Bunsen who makes these chapters...... dare i say it....... 20% COOLER
any hoof, if you have any comments, question, concerns, heartaches and the what not, feel free to ask.
have fun reading, and remember: smile smile smile
“Rarity” twilight interrupted, “I don’t think
Twilight needs capped and the paragraph under that needs a enter error wise that's all I saw though.
I love this so much I suppose Spike is the king making all the mares want him Does it bother anyone else their doesn't appear to be a Luna emoticon?
Great fic, but why is everyone in this fic so rape-y? Conquest makes Discord look like Mother Teressa, speaking of which discord is the only one that could have saved Equestria with very little blood shed, It's only a shame that some ponies that couldn't take a joke returned him to his stone prison. I bet Celestia is kicking herself in the ass for that one. Conquest appears Discord turned him into a sofa and Chrysalis into a million ants and has some fun with a magnifying glass. He then grabs Celestia and rides off into the sunset on a motorcycle he conjured up as a rock power ballad plays in the background. The End.
My reaction to Rarity and fluttershy.
I was going to use a pic of two girls but i think i might get in trouble for that one.
Oh crap I see a shit storm coming....
WHY WHY WHY DID YOU DO IT?!
But anyways awesome story plot and chapter, here have my thumbs.
my reaction to the story
my reaction to the kissing
itwould go from that to and after some time there going to date each other and fluttershy would finaly be all but in reality it probably gonna be something like thisWhen rarity said those things about spike right when he woke up to hear them. my reaction can only be explained by the following...
nope still not enough....
getting closer.....
almost....
there we go
This can only lead to disaster
...I support everything that is going on.
Now to go get my chair...
>>609551 - Path_of_cloud
From this guy. http://www.fimfiction.net/user/iloveportalz0r
Oh, things are about to get good! I can tell you that! Though it all depends on your definition of good...
edited by bunsen, who is fantastic!
tell me what y'all think, your feedback is always appericated.
"Also, i made refernce to somepony's comment from last chapter in here, see if you can find it!"
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