The Apple siblings get a visit from somepony they once knew, but he wants to protect his Family a little too much. He never wanted them to get hurt, but he cant stay as a ghost. A death has to be done, but who will die.
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4899673 what?
4899673 i know about the grammar.... Im from Norway and got 3 in english writing
.... Ops
4899686 The first two mistakes I noticed were in the short description.
Should be "Strange activity is going on at Sweet Apple Acres."
The next several were in the long description...
Those are just the ones I found in the story descriptions. I haven't read the actual story yet, but if this is a good "preview" of the meat of the story, then I am somewhat scared to look... Try to use a word processor with a spell-check and at least some grammar-checking capabilities. Your story description is what lures readers into your story. If it's full of errors, then it tells readers that the rest of the work is probably poor quality and lazily done.
Capitalization... ever heard of it??
Wow. Go Honesty. I wonder what that spell would have done to Applebloom and Mac. Great chapter.
4927210 the father need them for something I haven't come up with yeat...
so... But somehow the element protect their bearer... Somehow...
but thanks. I think I will write more about that in the next chapter.... 
4927524 It was because he wasn't being honest.
4927980 yeah, he has planes to *****
Dont want to spoil, but I think everypony know a little of what is going to happend...
So awesome can't wait for the next one hope it comes out soon!!
4928662 you just said the opposite of what I was thinking
but thanks so much
4931057 I don't get it.. which part the
or the
?
4932018 it was a joke...
Im bad at jokes.... But good You like the story
dont take my jokes as They are for real
This is cool!
And wow its awesome how fast the updates are coming! 
4932198 I dont have much to do really... Now I start back on school
so it might come a little later than usual
, and I have two other Storys I want to keep up. One is new, and the other Is almost un touched... Soooo...
4932231 Yep! that's alright I completely understand
that... was... AWESOME!
4948707 thanks, I am trying.... Sooo... :3 Im happy you like it
Really cute awesome job thx for writing the best story ever!!!!!
Wow. Gruesome. Good luck writing the next part.
4949176 thanks... thats kind of you to say
4949372 thanks I really need it
When is the next chap. Out
4962888 as soon as possible
Is aj your fab pony?????????
4963115 maybe... Yesssss!!!!!!!!
That is is.....so awsome
ok it is officially true you are more than just my favorite writer your like my sister!!!!
4963519 thanks
... But what do You mean
I mean since nobody likes aj your like the only peson I know who watches the show and likes aj so ther for we are like sisters
sorry for confusing u
4963698 their is Groups that loves AJ you know?
sorry i didnt notice that
4966803 It fine
Poor granny Smith.
So can you do a human aj story...
Well, Twilight could get the royal guards to come and the Father beats them all up and kills them. Similar could be if they rally the town and when the town comes to kick the father out, he could just use dark magic so the town joins his side. Twilight and the girls could do research and find out the way to defeat the father is to get help from the mother. These are some ideas. Hope they help.
4966950 the one with the mother sound like a good idea
4966940 maybe... Im doing an anthro tough, it will come soon so You can see it
as so awesome!!!!
I can't believe he got away with it though 
Nice story. I wish you success with future stories.
4995783 ... thanks
that's awesome! YAY! loved the story
4996523 thanks... I did my best