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Vinyl_Wubs


There are a lot of things this show has taught me. When I started watching, I never expected it to affect me as much as it has. But now that I'm here, I don't know what I'd do without you all!

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short threesome? but there's only 2 character tags....

4834709 Well... she's not the main character :scootangel:

Comment posted by MIKEANTHONY321 deleted Feb 1st, 2022
Comment posted by MIKEANTHONY321 deleted Feb 1st, 2022

4834904 hateful snuggle wuggles

Comment posted by MIKEANTHONY321 deleted Feb 1st, 2022

Its so awkwardly adorible:rainbowkiss:

How do you get your writing so epic?!

Despite one thing that annoyed me, I enjoyed this fic.

What annoyed me? It felt like I was reading someone's online dirty roleplay logs or something

buttmunch69: Big Mac smiled a little more. “There was somethin else I did to cheer my lil’ sister up when she was scared.” He said.

brony4life20000001: "Wha-” Fluttershy was cut off by her own laughter as Big Mac started to tickle her.

buttmunch69: Big Mac laughed a little as he continued to lightly tickle every inch of her stomach.

brony4life20000001: Fluttershy squirmed around and giggled loudly.

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Just saying.

y'all better stay out of that shed. :fluttershysad:

That's some nice stuff ya got there. :eeyup:

Probably the billionth comment on the topic, but y'all better not come in Fluttershy's shed now. She gon cum for u. :flutterrage:

First off, a question; is this anthro or not? I mean, she's got breasts and they both have hands, yet he has a massive horsecock. Is it like a hybrid thingy? I'm confused.

Another thing; this, among other things, bothered the hell out of me as I read this:

Fluttershy blushed intensely and smiled back. Her eyes wandered back down to his shaft, “C… could you… please… use a… condom?” She asked quietly.

then later...

Big Mac grunted, his balls slapping noisily against her ass only to be silenced each time she landed on them. His pre leaked profusely from her slit, more and more sloshing out and onto the bed with each thrust.

Isn't this kind of a contradiction? Pre goes in the condom just like cum...so was he wearing a condom or not? if so, how did the pre leak out? if not, why did you say he put one on?:facehoof:

I mean, I KNOW this is porn about magical (anthro?) ponies, and there's supposed to be a suspension of disbelief and all that, but...

Another minor complaint is that this is just a massive wall of text. It'd be better if it had been divided into two chapters (I see a perfectly good place where the story could be split into chapters: right after session one and before she wakes up.)

Overall, the clop was pretty well written (except the GLARING issue above), and the characters were fairly loyal to the show's depictions... but the writing was kind of disjointed and quite inconsistent. Not that it matters, nor anyone cares,but my rating for it is.... a 5/10: fairly average, but good nuff to clop to.

I loved it all it was awesome beyond awesome they all would make a cute herd .:rainbowkiss::yay::eeyup:it was a beautiful and sweet fic I hope that there will be a sequel where they all become a herd.It was a awesome read I can't wait to see what happens next between them all and what happens next to them all.

4840466 Anthro should pretty much cover that first part... Second part I fixed. Thirdly, I think you need to refresh your definition of 'Anthro'

Comment posted by vuplink2142 deleted Aug 16th, 2014

That was so hot. Keep going!

Comment posted by AlbinoWaffle deleted Aug 23rd, 2014

“Uhh.” He started, pointing past me to the shower.

You might want to fix that, m8.

4834776 stop making me HUNGRY !!! .. rofl

"Short threesome"? That struck me more as "short rape."

Pinkie’s giggling voice was heard as she came down the stairs with a puppy on her head. And her arms… and… everywhere.

Puppies have a habit of swarming you if you let them.

“Oh!” Fluttershy walked up to him and took the hammer out of his mouth.

:eeyup:

“So ya wanted a shed or something?” Big Mac asked, scratching his head.

:moustache:I distinctly remember Fluttershy saying we are always welcome in her shed.

Big Mac took a shovel and started digging a foundation.
...She was startled from her fantasy by a loud banging as she realized he was already done with the floor and was now starting to hammer in a few nails.

So he dug the foundation, poured the concrete, smoothed it, measured out boards for the walls and is hammering them together? He's fast, or she's a slow dreamer.
The pacing is pretty start and stop.

“Wha-” Fluttershy was cut off by her own laughter as Big Mac started to tickle her.

Tickling her? They might as well get naked now, nothing can stop them.
The clop suffers a lot of Then X happened, then Y happened, then Z happened.

pulling a condom out of one of the back pockets.

Keeping one at body temperature is going to ruin it. Keep it cool, or at least room temperature.

love pillows

They have not been called breasts this whole story.

5201940 glad I'm not the only one. It was kinda....Well lemme put it this way: if Dash hadn't consented, this story would involve more jail time and less sexy time.

5261862 evry single one its a Sin

4979901 Just about to put that as well!:twilightsmile:

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