Perfection. The amount of feels in this chapter is amazing. And it should be amazing, we finally, for the first time in 8 chapters, have the couple talking to one another and confronting the fact that one of them has feelings for the other. Breathtaking work Jot.
1126299 There seems to be something going on with it. It's showing a ton of classic stories. My guess is that after the site reset from all the 502/504 errors, the site started putting all the stories that had ever been up there, back up there, as if they were new stories. It seems to be normal now, but if your likes and/or favorites re-enter the criteria after being on it once, you get back on it for a time. It'll make people realize you're writing this again though, so yay.
I was wondering how much the secrecy was going to come back and bite her in the end, and you really delivered well on that. An impressive and delightfully crushing chapter well worth the wait.
Wow, just heart wrenching. Can't say I disagree with Flutters, but Rarity can't help being a coward in this, they are both justified in their hurt feelings. Well it'll make the makeup chapters all the sweeter.
1126565 You're referring to The Secret of My Excess? Okay, granted, she did acknowledge that she was aware of his feelings, but I still don't think that makes Spikity canon by any means. When you get right down to it, he's still a child, and not someone Rarity would seriously consider for a romantic partner. In a situation like SleeplessBrony's "Like Fine Wine"? Sure. I'll buy that. But in the show's time period, no. And also ew.
I'm not exactly "ignoring" season 2, but I will note this fic was over a year in the making and didn't specifically incorporate S2 eps in its concept. I sketched out the thoughts that would form the backbone of chapter 1 and 2 a month or so after the Gala episode. Because of that, its location in the timeline is deliberately vague.
1126696 M'kay, I've described this before. I should just start copy-pasting it. Spike had been starved of good birthday prezzies his entire life, and after he spent months caring for and anticipating a delicious treat, he gave it to Rarity just to make her happy. That's not a decision made by a child with a crush (especially since his crush has lasted two or three years). If a fanfic such as this acknowledges season 2 but barely mentions Spike, that basically means Rarity is ignoring his devotion to her like it means nothing. Kinda cold if you ask me.
And as for age, Twilight was about six when she hatched Spike, so there's a maximum of six or seven years between himself and Rarity. Not an unconquerable age gap. Factoring in that Spike is more mature than his age suggests, it's not hard to believe that she would picture him as a potential romantic partner, specifically let him grow up to become such. Especially considering that, if she let him, he would treat her like a princess for the rest of her life. That at least is canon.
But I'm not here to criticize, just deciding whether or not I'm interested in reading.
I knew fluttershy would do that but it's still made me teary eyed. I feel bad for rarity now, damn love, you scary. Anyways, it's been a long time since you've updated it but this chapter makes up for it.
Can't say that I didn't see this coming, what with how Rarity only assumed that things would go right for her throughout this chapter (which is a very impressive length by the way, congrats!). The build up made the sadistic part of me enjoy the confrontation even more, though.
I'm not sure how you plan to end this story, to be honest, but part of me wants to see the two of them salvage their friendship, and part of me wants the story to end just like this chapter did. I happily await your conclusion!
Dude, DO. NOT. Let this idle for an entire week. I don't think this is something you should let idle. The emotions are so strong! We just HAVE to see this story be concluded!
Seriously, that was gut-wrenching. Heartbreaking. After nine chapters of build-up, nine chapters of emotional rollercoasters, you manage to turn it all into pain in the space of just a handful of paragraphs. I would take my hat off to you, but I believe I am bleeding too profusely to do so.
On a lighter note, this chapter also contains one of the best lines I have ever read in the history of ever: >>"Do you want to verb you-know-who's adjective noun?" ...Wordsmithery at its finest.
Wow, that was a serious gut puncher. I couldn't breathe for awhile there. With every single line Fluttershy said, each one was a magnifying blow to the stomach. That was really magnificent, but I want to be alive for the next chapter. Also good job for the feature box thing again.
It's so hard to find good shipfics I haven't read already, but you have not dissapointed!
Eagerly awaiting the conclusion, of course
EDIT: Just thought of this, I wonder if the mane six will be divided based on what happened. It would be interesting to see which two would side with Rarity or Fluttershy
Sounds like Rarity needs some more Hate and Rage. They make the cold go away! People say Hate won't keep you warm at night but when I hear that I'm all like " Thats not true! Hate TOTALLY can do that!!". Hate, is there anything you can't do?!
1126885 Excuse me for my interjection, but I think it is important to just throw this out there. You did happen to mention that a child wouldn't give away something precious to them to someone they like. I really don't know what kind of children you have seen, but I have seen plenty of little kids do that. Also, need I mention, Rarity used such parenting tactics to get Spike to give her the gem. If you are unaware of my notion, Parents, when ever buy something for their children, would 'convince' children to get the cheapest item over the more expensive one the child is asking for. I have seen this in action plenty of times, and this is a technique Rarity used on Spike. Then, further into the episode, he became greedy (like a child) and started keeping everything to himself. He, then, later learns that it is not nice to take things that weren't intentionally given to him, and appreciate the gifts that he got from the people that love him (a lesson you teach your children at a young age). I could also mention how he said he would stop, but he didn't is also another thing children tend to do, but I will avoid going in depth with that one.
Age is but an important fact to the equation. Based of your opinion on their ages, I will use that to make this point. Yes, Spike may be 7-8 years younger than Rarity. Yes, he is definitely intelligent for his age. Then you have to consider, he lives with a bookworm in a library. I would say a lot of his knowledge came from all the books he has read, which is what makes him smarter than your average bear. Another thing that must be considered: race. Unlike ponies, dragons' life expectancy is a lot long than ponies. With such information, it is easily considered that they remain in a more 'childish' state longer than ponies do. As explained above, Spike still shows the natural born qualities of being a child, but I do have to admit, he does act mature at times in the show.
I'm sorry, but Spike is still very much a child and acts as so. I don't mind the Sparity ships, personally, but I don't believe that is a well suited ship because of these reasons. That's really all I wanted to say. I didn't want to comment on your last sentence because I know the way I would say it would come across as mean, and I am not that type of person. I should, however, include that this does acknowledge season 2, but just without some characters (Spike being one of them). Though, I am sure there is Jot Jiggety Jog's reason on why he wouldn't put Spike in there. Whether it be conflicting to the plot or just to avoid extra characterization. That is all his choice, and should simply be left at that. Thanks for understanding, but if you don't, then oh well.
I knew, as soon as Rarity was acting like she had already won, I knew. Like my mother once told me, "Assumption is the mother of all fuck ups." She should have worried at least a little. If she had, she might have planned out what to say. This continuation is ten times more satisfying than just "getting the girl." Instant success in romance is heartwarming, but cliched. The continued contention leaves room for more reading by us, which I whole heartedly approve of, and for the author to increase the complexity and value of the story. That said, I still hope they end up dating.
1127371 Interjection excused. Yeah, I don't even like kids. But had I been coaxed into giving away something that precious to me at that age, just because my parents had raised me with a set of ethics, I still would've felt that I'd been cheated. I would not have been as happy and content as Spike was in SoME, even after being kissed by a magical talking pony. Besides, the possibility that Rarity manipulated him into giving up his Fire Ruby on his birthday is pretty upsetting for obvious reasons.
Sure, in the show Spike behaves like the child that he is, but part of my reasoning was that he still has some growing up to do if Rarity is willing to wait for him. Considering how special they both are to one another, I'd like to think she would be (though it wouldn't hurt to pass the time with an occasional companion). There are all kinds of ways to make it an acceptable ship: the writers have not specifically stated that Spike's lifespan will be so long, just that one dragon's will. Spike is almost definitely a different species from that dragon; perhaps a species that reaches sexual, if not mental, maturity earlier than a pony does. Basically, there are ways around it.
"...conflicting to the plot or just to avoid extra characterization." I agree, if JJJ prefers to write a story without letting certain things getting in the way and mucking up the narrative, that's perfectly fine. But to me, it's still a huge factor that I would want to see dealt with at length, and fanfics that focus on Rarity's romantic exploits while simply disregarding Spike's involvement do kinda put me off. As I've said before, Spike is the character I relate to the most, so that reaction is inevitable.
1126885 It's pretty common for stories written before season 2 got going to ignore it even if it takes a year to write them. Anything currently in progress now is likely going to ignore season 3 once it gets going as well, because not doing that can create an endless series of revisions and changes that result in not being able to actualy write. Now it turns out this one hasn't been going quite as long as I thought it was, but still. There was an entire season where Spike x Rarity wasn't a thing. Probably also worth mentioning that for many of us, it's *still* not a thing. I just think Rarity's humoring him because she doesn't want to hurt his feelings.
1126299 The feature box is based on traffic, primarily. What's going on is that you have so many followers that when a new chapter comes out, it's getting immediate traffic from all of them and going straight up to the list. Plus the extra slots up there and the recently changed formula are helping out. But you deserve it.
I don't know what troubles me more about this story: how brilliantly sad this chapter is (and how much I want to see the next chapter to hopefully stop being sad), or the fact that it's about to end and I don't want it to!
1127695 Well, Rarity's involvement has so far been completely hidden from her friends. If they had ended up together in this chapter, then as far as Spike is concerned, it would have happened literally overnight. I'm not saying Spike isn't an issue, but he's an issue to be resolved some time down the road. The story's not about him.
Regarding dragon development in general, I'll note that Spike has been in a child state much longer than most dragons due to the set of morals he's been raised with, but that may speak more to the emotional immaturity of dragons in general than Spike's maturity.
1127959 Me being overly critical. A second scan reveals none. Apologies beforehoof for the plethora of comments strewn about... Well, every fricking chapter. On 8 now, determined to finish before I leave work this morning.
1127760 I don't mind you commenting every chapter. Don't mind a bit. I, however, should probably compile my replies into one post...
1127824 Avalanche does have an H in it. I don't know what you're talking about. :liarjack: She was saying "Celestia send that I can live my new dream", in contrast to the other one that she just dismissed as impossible.
And yeah, this fic twisted off in a darker direction than I had actually intended. But I think it's better for it.
Heart. Broken. In the most beautiful, fantastic way one could ever possibly imagine. Absolutely fantastic in every single way, shape, and form. Quite frankly, I cannot wait for the conclusion. You took what I had expected from the ninth chapter of this fic, turned it around, flipped it over, turned it inside out, then changed it's clothes so I was looking at something almost entirely different. And I loved every. Single. Word.
In short, Thank you. Thank you so very much. I eagerly look forward to the conclusion.
Get on late to check my favs and lo I see a new chapter for Ribbons and Lace..........but what did I see over 11,000 words..........-falls to my knees and yells to the heavens- YESS..........OH GOD YES!
Edit after reading-
Oh God......right in the........heart ugh.......that was painful near the end. But I expected as much and can't say much about it, Rarity it is NEVER a good idea to do that when you are right there with the object of your affections. I can only see the letter thing being of use for one that only rarely is seen around the object of affections due to literal 'too damn shy....can't get closer!'
Oh well lets just hope Rarity doesn't do anything well.....DRASTIC if you catch my drift.......don't forget the saying 'three strikes......and you're out.' Cause this would be the third time she has fallen into the sea of despair and unlike the other two times.......she took a very high dive off cloud nine right into it with a belly flop of guilt.
Definitely an awesome chapter! I was totally convinced it was going to go the way Rarity imagined it, but you made it even better! I just hope, by the end of the story, that they do end up together, since I have read a few sadfics where Rarity has feelings for Fluttershy, but they don't start a relationship. You could probably stretch the suspense you've created for a couple more chapters though.
i think first off i have to say that this went as expected it would.. rarity should have seen that her actions would come to this end.. secondly i have to say you are a very evil person for ending the chapter like you did.. the cliffhanger i expected was after the spa (but whatever.. thats the story of my life..) and finally im VERY curios about the conclusion of this story.. hopefully its not like Every Cloud that it ends in the worst possible way imaginable but i guess i just have to wait for it.. i hate waiting btw (everytime i say to myself dont read incompletes.. but do i listen? NO! why would i? )
1126299 The Feature slots for longer running stories is based on number of likes. You will tend to be in there until pushed out of all 3 slots by other fics with a higher number of likes.
11262991126325 the last three spots in the featured box are a completely different metric than the first seven. Basically, if a story with "x" like to dislike ratio updates it is guaranteed to get in that spot until another story pushes it out. It's great for getting stories out there, but no longer as meaningful.
As far as the story goes, I can't say that I didn't see that coming. Rarity weaved a web of lies and deceit and expected it to just go away with the revelation of her feelings. Of course we all hoped it would, but that's not how things really go, is it? Now, I just hope that Fluttershy can, fittingly enough, find the kindness to move past Rarity's folly.
1128505 You beat me to it. It's amazing how many times this has to be explained. Though, I guess not everyone spends as much time here as some of us do.
I've also seen a story (one of my own) pushed completely out of the update slots, just to return about half an hour later and stay in the first slot for most of the day. Not sure what happened there.
Rarity paused for a beat, giving the pegasus a lopsided grin, then said, softly, "We are alone."
Best line. This may just be me but I think that line has got to have been rattling around in your head for so long, its so perfect. I know how I feel when those great scenes come about and you're so glad to finally get it out and to your reader. And now people can finally see what you see and share your creative vision.
If that's not the case I apologize for burdening you with my crazy. But if I'm not hear to appreciate words about ponies then what am I doing?
Perfection. The amount of feels in this chapter is amazing. And it should be amazing, we finally, for the first time in 8 chapters, have the couple talking to one another and confronting the fact that one of them has feelings for the other. Breathtaking work Jot.
Man... this one was a gut punch.
Impressive. Haven't known many writers who are capable of pulling this kind of thing off.
well she fucked up... bad
That was... intense. And Fluttershy just lanced right to the heart of the matter, too.
Congrats on getting the Feature Box AGAIN.
Also, if you end this story with Rarity being miserable, I swear to Celestia...
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I don't know exactly what the criteria for the feature box are, but thanks.
1126299 There seems to be something going on with it. It's showing a ton of classic stories. My guess is that after the site reset from all the 502/504 errors, the site started putting all the stories that had ever been up there, back up there, as if they were new stories. It seems to be normal now, but if your likes and/or favorites re-enter the criteria after being on it once, you get back on it for a time. It'll make people realize you're writing this again though, so yay.
I was wondering how much the secrecy was going to come back and bite her in the end, and you really delivered well on that. An impressive and delightfully crushing chapter well worth the wait.
I had a feeling Fluttershy would feel that way.... Its still sad to see....
Wow... this chapter was especially well done. Can't wait for the next!
I saw it coming, but.......dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_sad.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_gasp.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_unsuresweetie_flip.png
Wow, just heart wrenching. Can't say I disagree with Flutters, but Rarity can't help being a coward in this, they are both justified in their hurt feelings. Well it'll make the makeup chapters all the sweeter.
1126459 Ah, so you're ignoring Season 2 entirely. Okie-doke. I'm gonna need do that myself for an impending MLP/Scream crossover.
simplemente hermoso XD
Oh god...Fluttershy...
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1126565
You're referring to The Secret of My Excess? Okay, granted, she did acknowledge that she was aware of his feelings, but I still don't think that makes Spikity canon by any means. When you get right down to it, he's still a child, and not someone Rarity would seriously consider for a romantic partner. In a situation like SleeplessBrony's "Like Fine Wine"? Sure. I'll buy that. But in the show's time period, no. And also ew.
I'm not exactly "ignoring" season 2, but I will note this fic was over a year in the making and didn't specifically incorporate S2 eps in its concept. I sketched out the thoughts that would form the backbone of chapter 1 and 2 a month or so after the Gala episode. Because of that, its location in the timeline is deliberately vague.
But Rarity meant well...
Artfully written, like a scalple straight to my feels...
Song that comes to mind:
1126696 M'kay, I've described this before. I should just start copy-pasting it. Spike had been starved of good birthday prezzies his entire life, and after he spent months caring for and anticipating a delicious treat, he gave it to Rarity just to make her happy. That's not a decision made by a child with a crush (especially since his crush has lasted two or three years). If a fanfic such as this acknowledges season 2 but barely mentions Spike, that basically means Rarity is ignoring his devotion to her like it means nothing. Kinda cold if you ask me.
And as for age, Twilight was about six when she hatched Spike, so there's a maximum of six or seven years between himself and Rarity. Not an unconquerable age gap. Factoring in that Spike is more mature than his age suggests, it's not hard to believe that she would picture him as a potential romantic partner, specifically let him grow up to become such. Especially considering that, if she let him, he would treat her like a princess for the rest of her life. That at least is canon.
But I'm not here to criticize, just deciding whether or not I'm interested in reading.
I knew fluttershy would do that but it's still made me teary eyed. I feel bad for rarity now, damn love, you scary. Anyways, it's been a long time since you've updated it but this chapter makes up for it.
Can't say that I didn't see this coming, what with how Rarity only assumed that things would go right for her throughout this chapter (which is a very impressive length by the way, congrats!). The build up made the sadistic part of me enjoy the confrontation even more, though.
I'm not sure how you plan to end this story, to be honest, but part of me wants to see the two of them salvage their friendship, and part of me wants the story to end just like this chapter did. I happily await your conclusion!
Dude, DO. NOT. Let this idle for an entire week. I don't think this is something you should let idle. The emotions are so strong! We just HAVE to see this story be concluded!
Sorry, last song. describes Rarity's fantasy for Fluttershy
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titled: just the way you are
Ow. Ow, you hurt me in the feelings.
Seriously, that was gut-wrenching. Heartbreaking. After nine chapters of build-up, nine chapters of emotional rollercoasters, you manage to turn it all into pain in the space of just a handful of paragraphs. I would take my hat off to you, but I believe I am bleeding too profusely to do so.
On a lighter note, this chapter also contains one of the best lines I have ever read in the history of ever: >>"Do you want to verb you-know-who's adjective noun?" ...Wordsmithery at its finest.
Wow, that was a serious gut puncher. I couldn't breathe for awhile there. With every single line Fluttershy said, each one was a magnifying blow to the stomach. That was really magnificent, but I want to be alive for the next chapter. Also good job for the feature box thing again.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
It's so hard to find good shipfics I haven't read already, but you have not dissapointed!
Eagerly awaiting the conclusion, of course
EDIT: Just thought of this, I wonder if the mane six will be divided based on what happened. It would be interesting to see which two would side with Rarity or Fluttershy
Sounds like Rarity needs some more Hate and Rage. They make the cold go away!
People say Hate won't keep you warm at night but when I hear that I'm all like " Thats not true! Hate TOTALLY can do that!!". Hate, is there anything you can't do?!
1126885 Excuse me for my interjection, but I think it is important to just throw this out there. You did happen to mention that a child wouldn't give away something precious to them to someone they like. I really don't know what kind of children you have seen, but I have seen plenty of little kids do that. Also, need I mention, Rarity used such parenting tactics to get Spike to give her the gem. If you are unaware of my notion, Parents, when ever buy something for their children, would 'convince' children to get the cheapest item over the more expensive one the child is asking for. I have seen this in action plenty of times, and this is a technique Rarity used on Spike. Then, further into the episode, he became greedy (like a child) and started keeping everything to himself. He, then, later learns that it is not nice to take things that weren't intentionally given to him, and appreciate the gifts that he got from the people that love him (a lesson you teach your children at a young age). I could also mention how he said he would stop, but he didn't is also another thing children tend to do, but I will avoid going in depth with that one.
Age is but an important fact to the equation. Based of your opinion on their ages, I will use that to make this point. Yes, Spike may be 7-8 years younger than Rarity. Yes, he is definitely intelligent for his age. Then you have to consider, he lives with a bookworm in a library. I would say a lot of his knowledge came from all the books he has read, which is what makes him smarter than your average bear. Another thing that must be considered: race. Unlike ponies, dragons' life expectancy is a lot long than ponies. With such information, it is easily considered that they remain in a more 'childish' state longer than ponies do. As explained above, Spike still shows the natural born qualities of being a child, but I do have to admit, he does act mature at times in the show.
I'm sorry, but Spike is still very much a child and acts as so. I don't mind the Sparity ships, personally, but I don't believe that is a well suited ship because of these reasons. That's really all I wanted to say. I didn't want to comment on your last sentence because I know the way I would say it would come across as mean, and I am not that type of person. I should, however, include that this does acknowledge season 2, but just without some characters (Spike being one of them). Though, I am sure there is Jot Jiggety Jog's reason on why he wouldn't put Spike in there. Whether it be conflicting to the plot or just to avoid extra characterization. That is all his choice, and should simply be left at that. Thanks for understanding, but if you don't, then oh well.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
I knew, as soon as Rarity was acting like she had already won, I knew. Like my mother once told me, "Assumption is the mother of all fuck ups."
She should have worried at least a little. If she had, she might have planned out what to say.
This continuation is ten times more satisfying than just "getting the girl." Instant success in romance is heartwarming, but cliched. The continued contention leaves room for more reading by us, which I whole heartedly approve of, and for the author to increase the complexity and value of the story. That said, I still hope they end up dating.
That'd be my heart going pop...
Amazing writing. I do hope it ends with a happy ending ;(
Something tells me Rarity's gonna end up killing herself. Don't know why.
1127371 Interjection excused. Yeah, I don't even like kids. But had I been coaxed into giving away something that precious to me at that age, just because my parents had raised me with a set of ethics, I still would've felt that I'd been cheated. I would not have been as happy and content as Spike was in SoME, even after being kissed by a magical talking pony. Besides, the possibility that Rarity manipulated him into giving up his Fire Ruby on his birthday is pretty upsetting for obvious reasons.
Sure, in the show Spike behaves like the child that he is, but part of my reasoning was that he still has some growing up to do if Rarity is willing to wait for him. Considering how special they both are to one another, I'd like to think she would be (though it wouldn't hurt to pass the time with an occasional companion). There are all kinds of ways to make it an acceptable ship: the writers have not specifically stated that Spike's lifespan will be so long, just that one dragon's will. Spike is almost definitely a different species from that dragon; perhaps a species that reaches sexual, if not mental, maturity earlier than a pony does. Basically, there are ways around it.
"...conflicting to the plot or just to avoid extra characterization." I agree, if JJJ prefers to write a story without letting certain things getting in the way and mucking up the narrative, that's perfectly fine. But to me, it's still a huge factor that I would want to see dealt with at length, and fanfics that focus on Rarity's romantic exploits while simply disregarding Spike's involvement do kinda put me off. As I've said before, Spike is the character I relate to the most, so that reaction is inevitable.
Nice to see you again, Soto.
Ow.
Here's hoping the lack of a Tragedy and/or Sad tag means this story gets a happy ending.
yay new chapter... 11,554 words... only twenty minutes free time... fuck
I hate school, work and girls... time consuming bastards
1126885 It's pretty common for stories written before season 2 got going to ignore it even if it takes a year to write them. Anything currently in progress now is likely going to ignore season 3 once it gets going as well, because not doing that can create an endless series of revisions and changes that result in not being able to actualy write. Now it turns out this one hasn't been going quite as long as I thought it was, but still. There was an entire season where Spike x Rarity wasn't a thing. Probably also worth mentioning that for many of us, it's *still* not a thing. I just think Rarity's humoring him because she doesn't want to hurt his feelings.
1126299 The feature box is based on traffic, primarily. What's going on is that you have so many followers that when a new chapter comes out, it's getting immediate traffic from all of them and going straight up to the list. Plus the extra slots up there and the recently changed formula are helping out. But you deserve it.
I don't know what troubles me more about this story: how brilliantly sad this chapter is (and how much I want to see the next chapter to hopefully stop being sad), or the fact that it's about to end and I don't want it to!
1127695
Well, Rarity's involvement has so far been completely hidden from her friends. If they had ended up together in this chapter, then as far as Spike is concerned, it would have happened literally overnight. I'm not saying Spike isn't an issue, but he's an issue to be resolved some time down the road. The story's not about him.
Regarding dragon development in general, I'll note that Spike has been in a child state much longer than most dragons due to the set of morals he's been raised with, but that may speak more to the emotional immaturity of dragons in general than Spike's maturity.
1127959
Me being overly critical. A second scan reveals none. Apologies beforehoof for the plethora of comments strewn about... Well, every fricking chapter. On 8 now, determined to finish before I leave work this morning.
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I suppose I read it out-of-context. Good catch.
1127760
I don't mind you commenting every chapter. Don't mind a bit.
I, however, should probably compile my replies into one post...
1127824
Avalanche does have an H in it. I don't know what you're talking about. :liarjack:
She was saying "Celestia send that I can live my new dream", in contrast to the other one that she just dismissed as impossible.
And yeah, this fic twisted off in a darker direction than I had actually intended. But I think it's better for it.
Heart. Broken.
In the most beautiful, fantastic way one could ever possibly imagine.
Absolutely fantastic in every single way, shape, and form. Quite frankly, I cannot wait for the conclusion. You took what I had expected from the ninth chapter of this fic, turned it around, flipped it over, turned it inside out, then changed it's clothes so I was looking at something almost entirely different. And I loved every. Single. Word.
In short,
Thank you. Thank you so very much. I eagerly look forward to the conclusion.
Get on late to check my favs and lo I see a new chapter for Ribbons and Lace..........but what did I see over 11,000 words..........-falls to my knees and yells to the heavens- YESS..........OH GOD YES!
Edit after reading-
Oh God......right in the........heart ugh.......that was painful near the end. But I expected as much and can't say much about it, Rarity it is NEVER a good idea to do that when you are right there with the object of your affections. I can only see the letter thing being of use for one that only rarely is seen around the object of affections due to literal 'too damn shy....can't get closer!'
Oh well lets just hope Rarity doesn't do anything well.....DRASTIC if you catch my drift.......don't forget the saying 'three strikes......and you're out.' Cause this would be the third time she has fallen into the sea of despair and unlike the other two times.......she took a very high dive off cloud nine right into it with a belly flop of guilt.
Definitely an awesome chapter! I was totally convinced it was going to go the way Rarity imagined it, but you made it even better! I just hope, by the end of the story, that they do end up together, since I have read a few sadfics where Rarity has feelings for Fluttershy, but they don't start a relationship. You could probably stretch the suspense you've created for a couple more chapters though.
Ah... That ending. Our collective tears must be delicious.
1127695 Indeed, but it has been nice seeing you again too.
hmm.. what to say?
i think first off i have to say that this went as expected it would.. rarity should have seen that her actions would come to this end..
secondly i have to say you are a very evil person for ending the chapter like you did.. the cliffhanger i expected was after the spa (but whatever.. thats the story of my life..)
and finally im VERY curios about the conclusion of this story.. hopefully its not like Every Cloud that it ends in the worst possible way imaginable but i guess i just have to wait for it.. i hate waiting btw (everytime i say to myself dont read incompletes.. but do i listen? NO! why would i? )
great chapter and story so far.. keep it up
1126299 The Feature slots for longer running stories is based on number of likes. You will tend to be in there until pushed out of all 3 slots by other fics with a higher number of likes.
1126299 1126325 the last three spots in the featured box are a completely different metric than the first seven. Basically, if a story with "x" like to dislike ratio updates it is guaranteed to get in that spot until another story pushes it out. It's great for getting stories out there, but no longer as meaningful.
As far as the story goes, I can't say that I didn't see that coming. Rarity weaved a web of lies and deceit and expected it to just go away with the revelation of her feelings. Of course we all hoped it would, but that's not how things really go, is it? Now, I just hope that Fluttershy can, fittingly enough, find the kindness to move past Rarity's folly.
1128505 You beat me to it. It's amazing how many times this has to be explained. Though, I guess not everyone spends as much time here as some of us do.
I've also seen a story (one of my own) pushed completely out of the update slots, just to return about half an hour later and stay in the first slot for most of the day. Not sure what happened there.
Lovely,
Rarity paused for a beat, giving the pegasus a lopsided grin, then said, softly, "We are alone."
Best line. This may just be me but I think that line has got to have been rattling around in your head for so long, its so perfect. I know how I feel when those great scenes come about and you're so glad to finally get it out and to your reader. And now people can finally see what you see and share your creative vision.
If that's not the case I apologize for burdening you with my crazy. But if I'm not hear to appreciate words about ponies then what am I doing?