A good chapter as usual though kinda wishing it had more plot instead of a fair amount being sex dreams, not saying the sex dreams are not great they are just kinda more interested in the confusing and vexing situation Rarity is in getting played out. -yep my desire for hot pony action has been overcame by my curiosity about how the drama will work out-
I really like how you use these fantasies in this story. For one, they provide us all with our clop fix (which we of course can't do without) without interfering with the drama of the main plot. For another, they give us a great look into Rarity's mind; we can understand her frustrations and her conflict, because we're seeing for ourselves the fantasies and plans she built for herself. Thirdly, they give Fluttershy more "screentime" than she would otherwise have in this story, allowing her to do things other than simply react to Rarity's actions.
I am very impressed with the way this fic is going. It feels much deeper than your average clop/ship, and it blends the emotional elements very nicely with the more explicit elements. I always look forward to seeing this one update.
Congrats on another fantastic chapter. I think it's safe to say that we all have our suspicions now as to who the imposter is (at least for those of us whose minds didn't jump there after the first letter from the other admirer), and now I REALLY want to know what's going to happen......Curse you and your cliffhangers!
This is really well done! It is really sad to see Rarity give up on her dreams of being with Fluttershy. I just hope good things happen before this story ends because I would hate to see Rarity end like this. You have written a magnificent story here. I can't wait for the next chapter to come! Keep up the good work!
The only thing I don't like from this story is that the clop points are a little too long maybe shorten a little if there's next time? Great story with another chapter over all though
937671 I thought so too but I'm just sayin' no need to mae them soooo lengthy I mean c'mon sumtimes there's just TOO MUCH clop lawl (never enuff also xD)
And, then, the moment you get to a certain part in the story, you will feel like an idiot for being bored by it. And you will not be able to stop laughing.
This is the first clopfic, I have ever read. EVER. And I must say the bar has been set pretty high with this one. As I only really starting reading fanfiction a few days ago, I'm really surprised at the talent that I see being posted her.
This story is so beautifully sad and... emotional. I love how she puts herself down and doubts herself. I've said it before, but this is still probably my favourite RariShy.
I'm impressed by Rarity. Tradition usually has someone in her position destroy the original "culprit" as the original lingerie is for her, whether or not it belongs to a client who ordered and paid for it. But she managed to turn her rage away from it before she got herself in trouble and destroy the personal set. I'm immensely impressed.
938355 Not that I'm aware of. They just went to the spa, wrote a letter to Celestia, and came to terms regarding how much dirt is acceptable in the pursuit of having fun together.
Friendship is Witchcraft has completely corrupted my memory of this episode. I keep expecting Sweetie to break into Botspeak, and Rarity to declare that they are a rattlesnake!
And, I so very much want to forget said insight. Sadly, that is not a simple task. I am not willing to resort to bashing my head in with my desk. And you cannot reach through the computer to do so.
938439 But wait I meant this "And, then, the moment you get to a certain part in the story, you will feel like an idiot for being bored by it. And you will not be able to stop laughing." cuz I'm always stupid and getting wrong ideas of wats going on (no not that kind of wrong!)
938448 What the fuck does that have to do with anything? The Mane Six were asked to arrange a royal wedding, so those such as had sisters (or stalkers) invited them to attend the historic occasion. How does that indicate that Sweetie lives at Carousel Boutique?
I can't wait for chapter 9, I've had 20bits on Rainbow Dash being the copycat since that plot line was itroduced, yet its starting to feel a little too convenient...
938490 Oh! Well, I'm sure the wedding organizers could get invites sent to whoever they wanted. But anyway, none of the others technically got invitations either. The CMCs were acting as flower girls, so they weren't guests, but part of the proceedings.
If that theory proves that Sweetie Belle lives with Rarity, on any level, then please explain Scootaloo's presence. In a manner that would not invalidate your theory if we applied it to Sweetie Belle.
938551 Y u speak in fancy talk? just kidding, Like I said "invite"? I meant like the crusaders invited each other or somthing like Sweetie and AB invited Scoots?
939461 Well I think she does but she might not but considering she hangs out with the crusaders that would mean either she IS stayin with Rares or the timline for like the two seasons took ONE WEEK? so maybe she just visits really often?(sorry for not replying earlier had to brb)
Considering that she was going to school in Ponyville long before the episode in question, I think it's safe to say that Rarity's parents live in the town too. Sweetie Belle dropping by (or being dropped off by her parents) would be no more unusual than any of the mane six doing the same.
939499 Her parents live in Fillydelphia however what I forgot to mention last time was that we don't know how close that is it could be next city cause they act just the same not like in manhatten
Where did you hear that? I don't think that's canon. In fact, I went and checked and apparently Lauren Faust herself has said that Sweetie does not live with Rarity. Couldn't find any mention of Fillydelphia.
A good chapter as usual though kinda wishing it had more plot instead of a fair amount being sex dreams, not saying the sex dreams are not great they are just kinda more interested in the confusing and vexing situation Rarity is in getting played out. -yep my desire for hot pony action has been overcame by my curiosity about how the drama will work out-
937008
Believe me, I've been eager to get to Ch. 9, too!
...I FIGURED IT OUT! The imitator is actually *transmission interrupted*
I really like how you use these fantasies in this story. For one, they provide us all with our clop fix (which we of course can't do without) without interfering with the drama of the main plot. For another, they give us a great look into Rarity's mind; we can understand her frustrations and her conflict, because we're seeing for ourselves the fantasies and plans she built for herself. Thirdly, they give Fluttershy more "screentime" than she would otherwise have in this story, allowing her to do things other than simply react to Rarity's actions.
I am very impressed with the way this fic is going. It feels much deeper than your average clop/ship, and it blends the emotional elements very nicely with the more explicit elements. I always look forward to seeing this one update.
Congrats on another fantastic chapter. I think it's safe to say that we all have our suspicions now as to who the imposter is (at least for those of us whose minds didn't jump there after the first letter from the other admirer), and now I REALLY want to know what's going to happen......Curse you and your cliffhangers!
This is really well done! It is really sad to see Rarity give up on her dreams of being with Fluttershy. I just hope good things happen before this story ends because I would hate to see Rarity end like this. You have written a magnificent story here. I can't wait for the next chapter to come! Keep up the good work!
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
We obviously know who the other secret admirer is, it's--*HNNGACKKK*
[OH NO YOU DON'T]
Welp, good story. Rarity will have to deal with unspoken rejection. Life lesson learned. The end.
This has me very interested. The possibility of contrasting fantasy and reality. Interesting...
The only thing I don't like from this story is that the clop points are a little too long maybe shorten a little if there's next time?
Great story with another chapter over all though
937637
I have a feeling that they may be used for contrast later on. If that is so, they are the right length.
937671
I thought so too but I'm just sayin' no need to mae them soooo lengthy I mean c'mon sumtimes there's just TOO MUCH clop lawl
(never enuff also xD)
937802
See, you never know when you have too much or not enough when it comes to sex scenes.
937825
Yup it's just a little boring after so much lovemaking in her fantasies
937844
And, then, the moment you get to a certain part in the story, you will feel like an idiot for being bored by it. And you will not be able to stop laughing.
This is the first clopfic, I have ever read. EVER. And I must say the bar has been set pretty high with this one. As I only really starting reading fanfiction a few days ago, I'm really surprised at the talent that I see being posted her.
937858
Uh huh story of my life
937960
That is a very weird insight into your life.
Don't you dare tell me that the other secret admirer is rainbow dash
ONLY
This story is so beautifully sad and... emotional. I love how she puts herself down and doubts herself. I've said it before, but this is still probably my favourite RariShy.
... and fluttershy comes out wearing the red ribbon.
938019
But she moved in with Rarity
937991
Wait.FUCK.
I'm impressed by Rarity. Tradition usually has someone in her position destroy the original "culprit" as the original lingerie is for her, whether or not it belongs to a client who ordered and paid for it. But she managed to turn her rage away from it before she got herself in trouble and destroy the personal set. I'm immensely impressed.
938072
Uh... yeah, for a week... as in "seven whole days."
"And six nights, I know! Such a short time to spend with your little sis."
938339
Oh right..... But wait didn't she end up just moving in? Oh watever you can change fic facts anywho
938355
Not that I'm aware of. They just went to the spa, wrote a letter to Celestia, and came to terms regarding how much dirt is acceptable in the pursuit of having fun together.
Friendship is Witchcraft has completely corrupted my memory of this episode. I keep expecting Sweetie to break into Botspeak, and Rarity to declare that they are a rattlesnake!
938076
And, I so very much want to forget said insight. Sadly, that is not a simple task. I am not willing to resort to bashing my head in with my desk. And you cannot reach through the computer to do so.
938404
Hah yeah...But then why was she with the crusaders at the wedding?INVITE MUCH? "!" New canon discovery = possible
938439
But wait I meant this "And, then, the moment you get to a certain part in the story, you will feel like an idiot for being bored by it. And you will not be able to stop laughing." cuz I'm always stupid and getting wrong ideas of wats going on (no not that kind of wrong!)
938448
What the fuck does that have to do with anything? The Mane Six were asked to arrange a royal wedding, so those such as had sisters (or stalkers) invited them to attend the historic occasion. How does that indicate that Sweetie lives at Carousel Boutique?
I can't wait for chapter 9, I've had 20bits on Rainbow Dash being the copycat since that plot line was itroduced, yet its starting to feel a little too convenient...
938469
No I meant "invite" she must've gotten one right?
938490
Oh! Well, I'm sure the wedding organizers could get invites sent to whoever they wanted. But anyway, none of the others technically got invitations either. The CMCs were acting as flower girls, so they weren't guests, but part of the proceedings.
938490
If that theory proves that Sweetie Belle lives with Rarity, on any level, then please explain Scootaloo's presence. In a manner that would not invalidate your theory if we applied it to Sweetie Belle.
938454
Oh. Okay. Good. Just making sure.
938570
Yea dat wood be weird
938640
Yeah. Yeah, it would.
938551
Y u speak in fancy talk?
just kidding,
Like I said "invite"?
I meant like the crusaders invited each other or somthing like Sweetie and AB invited Scoots?
Shiiiiiiiieeeeeet!!! So excited for chapter 9!!!! Come rarity, you can do it!!!
938648
So, in other words, Applebloom, or even Rarity herself, could have invited Sweetie Belle if she didn't live with Rarity.
938545
Oh right flower girls hadn't thought of that
938950
'nuff said
939442
So Sweetie Belle probably doesn't live with Rarity then. By your own admission.
939461
Well I think she does but she might not but considering she hangs out with the crusaders that would mean either she IS stayin with Rares or the timline for like the two seasons took ONE WEEK? so maybe she just visits really often?(sorry for not replying earlier had to brb)
939473
Considering that she was going to school in Ponyville long before the episode in question, I think it's safe to say that Rarity's parents live in the town too. Sweetie Belle dropping by (or being dropped off by her parents) would be no more unusual than any of the mane six doing the same.
939499
Her parents live in Fillydelphia however what I forgot to mention last time was that we don't know how close that is it could be next city cause they act just the same not like in manhatten
939520
Where did you hear that? I don't think that's canon. In fact, I went and checked and apparently Lauren Faust herself has said that Sweetie does not live with Rarity. Couldn't find any mention of Fillydelphia.
939547
Really? I thought they did maybe that fic lied to me.... Naw I'm just a little ignorant you're right
939607
No problem. I've mistaken fanon for canon a few times myself. It happens pretty often actually.