Was an excellent read. Keep up the good work

I am watchiiiiiiiiiing this.

>>2110221102

Thank you soooo much! I plan to have Chapter Two up soon!

Could use a bit more to tie the story together.  I feel lost in all the text.

as Eclipse stated, excellent read. But 655 words is a little to short for a chapter imo.

>>2110721107

Oh? Do tell. I welcome any and all criticism!

>>2110821108

I intend to lengthen it when I get home from work tonight, and possibly start work on the next update!

>>2110921109

I was just trying to be a smart-ass about the THIS IS NOT A CHAPTER chapter is all.

I'm looking forward to read more of this.

Can't wait for the rest of this story. seems like it will be a very fun read. :)

Too long, didn't read.

Color me interested.

Very nice story, nice dynamic between the characters and a great humour.

Well done!

need moar!

This story is so awesome! Your writing skills are amazing! Keep up the good work!

I think this could besplit into at least three different chapters. There is just to much going on in it right now.

>>2222422224

OH U

I just finished reading (not because a slow reader but I'm at school). It is very well written and the whole Octavia been pregnant was very well alluded to. Please keep writing it is very funny.

man this story is too interesting for the chapters to be this short. Can't wait for the rest.

HNNNNNNNNNG!

I love it! moar please. :D

MY EARS BLEED FROM ALL THE NOISE!

JK, It's awesome and I can't wait for the rest!

>>2110421104 I'll new to the fic world, so I'm taking a look at what style suits me. Though my best works are like this story, I think you did a better job than I could. Keep writing this

I'm on the floor too, rolling around laughing.

Sir, you are great. Can't wait for more, though longer chapters would be appreciated in light of the inherent awesomeness.

It is very good but I still think you could divide up these chapters a little. Don't they just seem to long.

Now that I've satisfied my inner troll great work. I would say make the chapters longer but I think this style may be working for you. Most importantly stick to your guns and keep writing.

Insta tracked and 5-starred.

Im rather Impresssed at your portrayal of feminine emotions especially in a business/serious type mare like octavia, the touching scene at the end with octavia and vinyl both coming to terms and being able to mutually accept it(more so with octavia coming to terms and not murdering vinyl) was beautiful.

While there was some cliche, the worst of that being using nurse redheart as having to explain that octy was pregnant because the doctor "conviently forget" it was an excusable cliche for plot. The least of the two cliches is Octy thinking her bandmates would be unsupportive and ending up to be super supportive. That one was barely noticable. Back on the good side, I especially loved the random bits of humour, from the Loud tuba player, to nurse redhearts "they dont pay me enough for this" to the doctors "HAHAHA that will show my dad up" added a realistic feature to the fic..that honestly im kinda jelly of :P.

I was just listening to Ghosts n stuff when i read this >.< What a coincidence...

Vinyl is hilarious! Awesome chapter!

Very nice story! I will gladly read the next chapters!  

A real joy to read! Simple, cute and positive. A very welcome change after the "heavyweight" grimdarks. Well-deserved 5 stars!

Wat.

4.5/5, but only because you don't have [sad] and [grimdark].

As usual, a great read. And now that Vinyls past is revealed, I feel you are going somewhere heavy...

Looking forward to more!

Cliffhanger!

Very nice... I can feel a bit of tension but i don't think its going to go far enought to become (grimdark) or (sad)... hope you keep me laughing!

Ooooh boy meetin the parents....fun times will be had!

Ah, magical lesbian spawn. One of my favorite subcategories of pregnancy fics. I look forward to more.

TL;DR

too short; read

ha ha ha ha pony sex pfftchh

rolling around laughing now.

Sorry, but Trevor just got lost with everything that's going on in this chapter. You REALLY need to slow things down. Right now, this chapter is just... REALLY confusing! Still, Trevor is willing to try to muddle through and understand by reading the next chapter...

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

.... XD ... O.O WHAT IS THIS I DON'T EVEN?! EVERYPONY KNOWS that it takes Luna to allow two mares to have a foal! LJKGNPUIREHVBUDHBVCUQEBIPGBOADSCHNRPBGIPUDSA:BCNPIUSRGH:LAEFKMC!?!?!?!?!

(XD Seriously though, it will be fun reading your take on what happened, explaining it, ect. Anyhoof, now the story makes a lot more sense! XD Trevor means, a THIRD roommate?! That wouldn't have made much sense, but that's what intrigued one to read this to begin with! XD Anyhoof, onto the next chapter, now that this has Trevor's attention!)

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

i got lost so many words ARRGGAHH

Poor Tavi! Poor Scratch! *Looking forward to seeing whai Tavi is so upset...*

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

CONFOUND THESE PONIES! THEY DRIVE ME TO FIND AWESOME MUSICZ! GAH! *Keeps reading avidly*

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

Vincenza Staccato... That... Is an AWESOME name! Ugh... One wishes he had need of a musical pony, so that he would steal that na... Err, one means ASK NICELY if one could use that name, of course... ^^; (XD I don't really want/need it. It's just an AWESOME name! Seriously, congrats on it!)

*Tries one's best to wait patiently for the next chapter*

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

short chapters in my opinion other then that well done. I approve

>>2326923269 hizzzza i agree lol

The Game. We have all lost it. Well played sir.