As they neared Ponyville Library, Fluttershy stopped them for a moment.
"Um...I'll be right back...there's someone I need to go talk to." She said, hurrying off towards a pair that looked somewhat familiar.
Octavia squinted slightly to see who she was going to go see, and felt anger welling within her. "Ugh...of all ponies...it had to be her." Octavia muttered.
"Who is it, Octy?" Vinyl asked, confused. She raised a hoof over her eyes, and squinted into the distance. "Oh hey, it's Bonbon and that mare she's dating. What's her name again, Octy?" When Vinyl received no answer, she turned to where her marefriend had been standing only a moment before.
"Octy?"
Octavia had cantered right over to where Fluttershy was talking to Lyra. Ugh, of all ponies, Fluttershy knows Lyra? What a shame...I was just starting to like this town. Octavia thought as she closed the distance.
"Is Mister Feathers feeling any better? I hope the medicine I gave him helped." Fluttershy asked, worried for the little mockingbird that Lyra and Bonbon had trusted to her care.
"Oh, he's doing MUCH better now, Miss Fluttershy. Thank you so much for-" Lyra stopped dead when she noticed a familiar face trudging towards her. Bonbon looked over, and sighed. "Lyra, please don't-"
"Well well well, I honestly thought that Ponyville did a much better job of cleaning up trash." Lyra said with a mocking smile.
"So did I, but I guess I never expected to see a roach the size and shape of a unicorn in my life, now did I?" Octavia returned, Lyra's mocking smile disappearing quickly at the insult.
Fluttershy shrunk away from the both of them. "O-Oh my...I hate confrontation..." She mumbled, hiding behind Bonbon.
"So what brings you here, Octavia? Did the Canterlot Guard finally realize that your music sounds like cats trying to kill each other and kick you out for disturbing the peace?" Lyra spat.
"Not at all. I would not be so quick to judge, seeing as you are no cherub Lyra...well, maybe in stature, but not in musical ability." Octavia fired back.
"Well, I can hardly see that wooden box you call an instrument doing anything for anypony other than making them want to cut their ears off." Lyra laughed.
"So you say, but I find it quite comical when I look at the lyre. The lyre was most commonly used by cherubs...and guess what? Cherubs are nonexistent...much like your talent." Octavia smirked.
As Octavia and Lyra continued to fight, Vinyl finally caught up, and took her place next to Bonbon, as she usually did when Octavia and Lyra tried to proverbially rip each other's throats out.
"Hey, Bonbon." Vinyl greeted.
"Hi Vinyl." Bonbon returned the greeting sheepishly.
"You think they'll ever stop fighting?" Vinyl asked with a sigh.
"Probably not...so what brings you two to Ponyville?" Bonbon asked, trying to steer the conversation in a different direction. "Have you and Octavia finally settled down?" She questioned, raising a suggestive eyebrow.
Vinyl blushed brightly at this, and rubbed the back of her head with a hoof. "Yeah, we did...we're in Ponyville because...well...Octy's pregnant."
"Aww, what a cute petname for her-" Bonbon stopped mid-sentence. "Wait, what?"
"Yeah...um...we're having a foal." Vinyl said again, blushing an even darker shade of red.
"Oh my goodness! Congratulations, Vinyl!" Bonbon said, hugging her. "Wait...how is that possible?" She asked.
Vinyl shrugged. "Uh...chances are it had something to do with my horn." Vinyl turned an impossibly dark shade of red, and averted her eyes when she saw Bonbon blush as realization set in.
"Oh my..." Bonbon said. She then looked at Lyra, and began to wonder. Could that mean...we could also...?
"Um...Bonbon? Are you okay?" Vinyl asked, waving a hoof in front of her face. Bonbon snapped out of it a moment later.
"Huh? Oh, I'm fine...I just realized I have something to do at home." She said, quickly moving over towards Lyra. "Hello, Octavia! So good to see you again, sorry we can't stay we have things to do bye!" She said in one breath as she dragged Lyra away.
"B-Bonbon! What's gotten into you?!" Lyra protested as Bonbon dragged her away. "Just be quiet and follow me. We have things to...discuss..." She said with a blush as they entered their home and locked the door.
"Well that was weird." Vinyl said. She looked around and saw Fluttershy cowering in a small ball behind her. "Relax, 'Shy. They're not fighting anymore."
Fluttershy peeked out from behind her hooves, and gave an audible sigh of relief. "Oh thank goodness...I just don't handle confrontation well..."
"It is quite alright, Fluttershy. Ponies like Lyra are better off left alone." Octavia huffed as she continued on her way towards the Library, Vinyl and Fluttershy in tow.
Fluttershy then gasped. "Oh dear! I just remembered I have to go take care of a vixen that just had a litter." She said. "I'm so sorry for leaving so quickly, but one of the pups is really little, and he needs extra care." She said softly, taking to the air.
"That is quite alright, Fluttershy. We will see you later." Octavia said.
"See ya later, 'Shy!" Vinyl said, watching the pegasus take off back towards her home.
When they arrived at the library's door, Octavia knocked three times.
"Coming." A voice said from behind the door. When the door opened, a blue unicorn with a white mane poked her head out the door, looking very much bothered. "What is it? What do you want from Trixie?" She asked rather rudely.
"Trixie! That isn't how you greet ponies!" A voice said from inside the library.
"Trixie is sorry. What do you want from me?" She said in the exact same tone of voice.
"This mare's kinda funny." Vinyl chuckled. Octavia raised a hoof. "We are here to see Twilight Sparkle."
"...Enter." Trixie commanded, opening the door for them. The library was surprisingly large for a tree that didn't seem so big. To Vinyl's delight, a certain small baby dragon was keeping track of all the books flying off the shelf. Vinyl immediately walked over to him.
"Hey there, cutie. What's your name?" She asked, running a hoof on the spines on his head.
"Heh, I am pretty cute. The name's Spike." The dragon said, puffing his chest out. "Can I help you with something?" He asked, trying to keep his voice suave and smooth.
"Any idea where Twilight is? We've gotta talk to her about something." Vinyl said.
"Oh..." He said, feeling somewhat dejected. "Twilight! There's someone here to see you!" He called out. At the top of the library, a lavender unicorn looked through book after book for something to read. She came across a book with a green cover, coated in a fine layer of dust. She used her magic and pulled it out.
"Using the Aether for Fun and Profit? Ugh. I'm not one to judge a book by it's cover, but this one is awful. Ponies really should care a bit more about the fragility of the fabrics of time and space, not traveling instantaneously because they're lazy." She said, putting it back. She slid down the ladder, and turned to face the two ponies that had entered her library.
"I apologize if Trixie was a bit rude...we're working on her manners." Twilight chuckled, to which Trixie huffed.
"The Great and Powerful Trixie needs not show politeness to anypony but Twilight." She muttered under her breath.
Twilight looked at Octavia, and recognized her almost in an instant. "I know you! You're Octavia Philharmonica! It's been a long time since we've last spoken!"
Octavia looked puzzled. "It has?"
Twilight nodded. "Of course! I used to go to all your performances when I was still living with the Princess. She and I are big fans."
Octavia blushed. "I am grateful...is it alright if we take up a moment of your time?"
"Of course! What can I help you with?" She asked, the five of them taking a seat at her table.
"Well...as it turns out...I am pregnant. With my marefriend's foal...the only thing I am confused about, is how. We came to you because we felt you would be able to give us the answer." Octavia said.
"I'm flattered, Octavia. Wait here, I think I know just the book. Spike, you're on book-catching duty!" Twilight said, rushing back up the ladder.
"Why can't Trixie be on book-catching duty?" Spike muttered, displeased with his job.
"Because The Great and Powerful Trixie answers to nopony." She said haughtily. Twilight cleared her throat audibly. "...Except her Kind and Ever-Loving marefriend..." She chuckled sheepishly.
Spike stuck his tongue out at her, and did his job as books flew off the shelf. Eventually, Twilight found just what she was looking for. “Arcane Magicks and the Gift of a New Life” She said as she pulled the violet book from the shelf. She moved back over to the table, and opened it up. She breezed through the chapters until she found something relevant.
"I see...it says here, that 'If a unicorn where to unite with a female in an act of pure love, the unicorn can summon a magic so ancient that it is not bound by the laws of nature...the magic of the unicorn melds with the soul of its mate, and from it sprouts a new thread; a new life, created in the beauty of passion and love between them" Twilight read. "The fruit of their efforts will grow like any other nurtured by love, beautiful and free."
Octavia was breathless. If what Twilight said was true, Vinyl loved her more than she could ever imagine. Vinyl was blushing wildly. Even she could understand what was being said, and she wasn't sure how Octavia was going to handle it. Much to her relief, Octavia gently held her hoof and smiled.
Trixie was speechless. "Trixie...Trixie never knew such magic was possible..."
Spike was impressed as well. "Woah...I don't get it." He said, scratching his head with a claw. Twilight giggled. "You're still too young to understand, Spike. You will one day." She said. "Well girls, I hope that helped."
"Yes, it did Twilight. Thank you." Octavia said softly.
Twilight blinked in surprise when Trixie reached across the table and began to read through the passage as well. "You've never been this interested in reading much of anything, Trixie. What's on your mind?"
"The Great and Powerful Trixie does not need a reason to read! She is simply interested in what this book has to say." She said, hiding a blush behind her white mane. Twilight shrugged. "Are you girls hungry? I haven't had lunch yet."
Vinyl looked at Octavia, who shrugged. "We could eat."
"Great! Trixie, Spike, watch the library, please. I'll be back in a little while." Twilight said, the three making their way towards the door. Trixie ignored her, but Spike saluted.
The three then left the library, looking for somewhere to eat so they could continue their conversation.
Ohgod. In before pregnancies, pregnancies everywhere.
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Fixed. My bad.
violatin the laws of nature all up in this bitch
Yeah what clonetrooperkev said. Either way still an awesome story as always. keep up the good work
LOL! first Bonbon, and now Trixie! and leave it to Twilight to now see whats going on! I love it!! I hope. I wonder if Lyra will think or yell at Octavia for this new info?
Great stuff keep it up!
Awww, very cute. And I just adore how the idea is catching momentum here. I wonder how Twi's foal would look.
Keep up the good work, you don't see such masterpieces slammed out in such short succession very often.
Abortion!!!
*insert annoying troulfaic here*
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I when Twixe went "Trixie is sorry." oh hey and is there ANYWAYS POSSIBLE you could add this angel in here ??? Pwease I must see scoots in at least ONE chapter I beg of you! I will do anything you want!....
Another excellent chapter. I hope you do start a twixie fic, as I am a sucker for anything twixie since they're my favorite pair and the fact that CoffeeGrunt and you would be writing it.
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there are is a story already which gave Twiligth and Trixie a foal
The Name of the foal is Midnight
"Using the Aether for Fun and Profit?"
Now i remember why i'm reading this fic. the awesomeness. X3
Un grand nombre de grossesses
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Uhm... oookay...?
Twilight nodded. "Of course! I used to go to all your performances when I was still living with the Princess. She and I are a big fan."
I believe it should be "...She and I are big fans."
This still won't explain how a Y chromosome will get in here if it does!
a bit rushed with the dialogue, but otherwise a pretty good chapter.
It's definitely interesting, and it's pretty well written. My only complaint is the rating; I feel it should be rated AT LEAST teen, if not mature.
Also: you should remember that whenever a new person talks, you should split it into a new paragraph. Coffeegrunt has this same problem.
31212 it doesn't need to. The Y chromosome only has genetic info for making male organs and the like. So it's going to be a filly definately. If it isn't, I'm going to raise hell about the genetic impossibilities. I suppose that's why my ponysona has a strand of DNA for a cutie mark, but still anyways, it's really good! I can't wait to see more!
You know, not all relationships have to end in kids. Just saying, since it seems now all your couples wanna make babies. Lots of people enter into a relationship for the sake just being with the other person, not because they want to reproduce.
ACCURACY RATINGS!!!
Twilight - 80% (higher than most by far, but she seems a bit too commanding. She is only usually that commanding when she is angry.)
Spike - 95% (Because no matter how close you want to be no one is perfect.)
Trixie - UNDEFINED (Can you get a full characterization from a single episode of the show when you only saw her showboating-est side? No you cannot. No one really knows enough about Trixie to tell you what is and isn't accurate other than MAJOR things like if you made her a murderer, or something equally drastic)
HOW MUCH I LIKE DOING ACCURACY RATINGS!!!
Out of 100%? - 63% (I only do them because I have no major criticism, but I feel that I need something to say.)
Your writing continues to make me happy, and is an excellent read. If it was anything other than fanfiction I would recommend that you try to get it published.
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Oh thank god. I am writing a fic and I was wondering if doing this was wrong.
Because, like, I start a new paragraph and everything, and then i would read these great fics and think "Oh god I'm doing this wrong."
THANKS FOR NOTHING, ENGLISH CLASS.
inb4... Umm... Inb4 everything is about to get crazy! XD *Has no better comment other than to keep up the excellent work!*
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
AWSOME! Nearly cried on the book reading T_T
31191hahaa no comment
Do...do you realize what you've done? You've given unicorns the ability to impregnate the same sex.
Equestria's population is going to triple in about three years. Luckily you also added that "true love" clause, I don't think Equestria could handle a 10x boost in population.
...Although, that also begs the question, what happens when Lyra can't knock up Bon-Bon?
"Do I... Do I not love her enough? Did I ever love her?"
I smell sequel...
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True, but if you are in a relationship with someone you love, the idea is going to cross your mind. Survival instincts pretty much make having a kid the 'ultimate' goal of life.
Because The Great and Powerful Trixie answers to nopony." She said haughtily. Twilight cleared her throat audibly. "...Except her Kind and Ever-Loving marefriend..." She chuckled sheepishly.
YES! i'm not the biggest fan of Twixie but this made me just
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I have had a few conversations about English classes with people. I am in a college class with students that didn't know what similes and metaphors are. Some schools work like mine, where if you pay attention you will learn how to use gerund phrases, participles, and most importantly proper comma usage. We learned proper paragraph and page structure. Students in my current class didn't know that you had to separate dialogue from the rest of any paragraph. No one but me in the class knew how to use quotes inside of speech. The English language is suffering due to lack of education and people caring about it.
31467 ture but if no one learns you then the best way is to read as much as you can, and hope that you learn youre english.
Using the Aether for Fun and Profit? Wasn't that book in one of those "Twilight messed up a spell" fics?
Wow. What a bitch:
31369 trevor i just wanted to let you know that you got some sirs swag
if only i could follow in your foot steps
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dude as far as im concerned
teen = mild gore, extreme sexual themes, or very sad/grimdark adventure, and mild language
mature = SERIOUS CLOP with vivid sexual seens and themes, explicit gore, and extremely offencive language, like the f-bomb being drop 1 every 2 sentences
so this is def everyone
Well, if anybody was going to break the laws of nature, it would either be Vinyl Scratch, or Pinkie Pie...
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Yep. It was in "On a Cross and Arrow", I believe.
Don't quote me on that one, though.
-To quote something that has already been said, your story continues to make me happy. Not sure how I feel about pretty much every pony ending up in a lesbian couple, but it's something I can live with (I would have preferred Trixie to be Twilight's new apprentice and only hints at there being more between them, but whatever).
-I have to say I'm a little disappointed about the "truth" about Octavia's pregnancy. I mean, da, they love eachother, we get it. A child of pure love, how nice. I feel it's kinda a waste of Twilight's talents to have her recite sweet verses about true love, though.
I would have liked a revelation along these lines: "Under rare circumstances, a unicorn's magic can transform another mare's eggcell, making it start dividing on its own. It will develop into a perfect clone of the birthmother- with one significant difference: it will always be a unicorn. Genes cannot be transmitted through magic- but magic can."
But I guess I'll have to use that in one of my own stories
I love how all the couples are freaking out now. now that they know they can get pregnant ^^
chapter 17...
i... i am really trying hard not to go overboard here. the writing here is really obvious. everyone is explaining exactly what they're doing. it reeks of you telling us exactly what you want us to understand, and not letting us for a moment expand on the possibilities.
you could say that the implications and waiting plot to be unfolded relate to why trixie is where she is and how lyra and octavia learned to hate each other, but there's not much guessing to be had at this point, because they will just tell us without ado. there is absolutely no tension in this entire chapter. all it has is a string of endless "look at this character!!! WOW" moments. i... whabuhffffffff
I mean, this is different from the direct simplicity of the show. With that simplicity was a lot of unspoken motivation that lends itself to the details creating the moments--this is framing. this is a framing technique. you could call it conveyance, if you like.
this is like. this is like a kid's spiral notebook that is absolutely covered in glitter and stickers and too much earnest enthusiasm to be held in check, and NONE of the humility and grace of an adult who readily deals with the fact that these things are trinkets: it honestly looks like you made these writing choices in this chapter in good faith.
if i can't recognize subtlety for an error at ALL, like, not even the smallest hint that you're joyfully playing with the audience and are aware of the self-importance and conducting a grand falsetto of parody and satire, if i can't see that, you made these choices for your characters because you thought that us seeing and experiencing the choices you've made for the characters to be engaging.
but they aren't engaging. nothing in this chapter really gives us any new tension to use as steam for moving forward in the narrative. WE KNEW THAT THEY WERE IN LOVE. i'm fairly certain this audience is aware of harry potter, and most of us have read it. it's similar (if marginally better and thus worth selling to become the phenomenon it is) theme of "LOVE IS THE BEST MAGIC" is something we ALREADY GET.
if you were going to confirm this for us in the story, WHY DID YOU HAVE TWILIGHT READ IT TO US FROM A BOOK? Of all the times you could have used a flashback to indicate through example the power of your theme, this would be it! I just.
This chapter, I want to be so angry at it but I am just shocked.
Another outburst in only three chapters. This isn't looking good.
I'm going to keep going. I'm trying really hard to appreciate the sheer number of people who have devoted themselves to this story. i am really making an effort to get with you, dear author, and your other readers.
but you're making this really hard for me. i am sorry if i sound like i'm trying to be cruel, but i just... yeesh! this chapter did nothing! and i've got some 46 or so more chapters to go???? i don't want to keep skipping passages, but i need something to latch onto!
like, spend time in a chapter if you're stuck there, you know you need to get it done, and you dread it. it looks like you just did this because it allowed an easier segue. At least try to just dig into that tough chewy day-to-day progression and give us some real sense of LOCAL progression.
you know how sitcoms have plots A B and C? A is the big thing, B follows A and really is a different lesson but intimately tied into the details of A, and C is completely out in the middle of nowhere and barely interacts so we have a way to break the tension. I can't find a decent analog here--and if someone read this and said (again), "okay faggot now you're just being a dick, it doesn't have to follow a sitcom format" i would say to them desperately: "well it would be lovely if it followed something!"
maybe i'm thinking too hard here. but. like. more meat please. i'm starving. i need something big here and i feel like i'm gnawing at a dry bone.
Tell me, how many couples do you reckon are gonna get pregnant after these?
92192 What in the hell?
There going to make men invalid in a relationship nooooooos
In a world where everyone is lesbian...there is virtually no mention of dash
seems legit
So many chapters... I shall not stop...
So whats the deal with trixie and how did it happen
Eeeeh kinda cheesy for my tastes however,
Did Lyra and Octavia break up before? That's usually the reason they are mad at each other in other fics
“Arcane Magicks" This is redundant.
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You are indeed correct. And when I saw her throw that book aside I woke my wife up I started laughing so hard (she was really ticked about that too...).
Anyway, fantastic story and all that. I don't really have anything negative to say or ideas of what could have been improved, so have some generic compliments and a .