First!

(Proofreader's privilege)

Also, I pick option 2. I'm trying to imagine Garrus as a pony, but my mind can't fathom that much awesomeness.

Garus and Tali

Mordin and Tali FTW

I AGREE WANDERER D

Oh, this is going to be gooood!

But who to choose, there just seems to be one from each of the choices that I really want to see interacting with ponies (Jack + Ponies = lol). The one I want to see the most is Garrus but I'm not that interested in Thane, but Mordin and Tali...

Edit post after addition of Garrus and Tali Option (Don't know if I should change this post or make another, but going to change this one):

Changing choice from "Let's see what we can learn" to "I need people who I trust"  Garrus and Tali is the best possible combo.  Shep needs his bro Garrus while in Equestria.

Can't wait to see where this goes.

Hmmm.... 'Lets see what we can learn'.

Oooh! Nvrmind, "I need People I can Trust".  Because as much as Mordin could be amusing as a pony, Garrus and Tali make even more of a crazy team.

I'm with Wander D. Tali and Mordin. Imagine Tali as a pony. Mordin would go crazy with experminetal ideas. But most importantly, if they find this new tech, they need to analyze ASAP then find a way out. The second I assume will take sometime. I would also like to note that Mordin and Tali could benefit ponykind as well as the mission.

However, though I choose the paragon choice, I would like to not that the Garrus and Thane choice is a friendlier approach; they seem more civil and able to talk the mane 6 and co. better the other opinions. Grunt and Jack will probably just bring about intimidation and fear. Leading to problems with Applejack, RD, and, possibly, Royalty.

Though, this is assuming our choice partners will come to Equestria. Again, Mordin and Tali is the best.

Learning route. Mordin and Tali

I agree. what can we learn?

Mordin and Tali. Just hope you can get Mordin's personality and speech habits down. And if Tali comes along, remember, she is our romance option.

Mordin and Tali! Twilight will be so pleased with Mordin and all of his rapid-fire questions and I would love to see how Tali reacts to being pony-fied. And it's only three days till update! This has been tracked and liked to death!

If I had my choice, I would choose Mordin and Garrus, because Garrus is a bro and Mordin is quite possibly my favorite character in ME. Of course, Tali is cool too. Mordin & Tali it is. You knew everyone would choose it. :P

My votes for Tali and Garrus.

first the doctor whooves series, now THIS GLORIOUSNESS!!!!!!!

marry me please

also, your shepard seem almost CREEPILY similar to mine.

Garrus/Thane. They have the most amount of cool without sacrificing the whoopass

Let's see what we can learn.

im stuck between 'lets see what we can learn', and 'expect hostiles'.

on the one hand... basically what everyone else said.

on the other, JACK AS A PONY!

i now use my allmighty powers to make you imagine a deathmatch between ponyjack and rainbow dash.

Interesting. Tracking.

Oh, and my choice is:

Mordin and Tali: Let's see what we can learn.

You serious lol not even mad, LETS READ THIS SUMBICTCH

Lets see what we can learn ( Mordin and Tali )

Also, I love the way you presented Mordin.

Garrus, would find the situation absurd and would probably be dying to fix himself.

Thane would probably feel humbled by the God-like Princesses and enjoy the ideal peaceful society. But I imagine he'd want to leave because he's feel he has no right to be in such a pure place after what he's done.

This is why I pick Mordin and Tali. Those two would have tons of questions... For Science and the Flotilla.

Tali and Mordin.

We need to be discret.

Renegade: Expect hostiles.

Never know what could be lurking out their.

Great story so far

Tali and Mordin, Let's see what we can learn

Tali and Modrin--I'd like to see him try and keep up with Pinkie.

I say we go with Tali and Mordin "Let's see what we can learn."

But I would also want to go with Tali and Garrus, I always used that setup, other characters were never used by me, hehe.

Anyway, this is great and awesome, like the rest of your work Loyal2Luna. Keep it up

I'd say Mordin and Thane as they would make the best combo of stealth/intel but since that isn't an option, Mordin and Tali.

Edit: Of course the voting is over, not sure how I missed that, any way just want to add that the story is off to a good start.

Tali and Mordin. I want more of That Salarian.

>>447564447564

Voting isn't over, this chapter is technically early (L2L is impatient...) voting on this chapter ends on the 22nd.

Also, after thinking about it I get the impression that whoever Shepard takes with him won't get ponified, going by what goes on in the beginning of the chapter. I still vote Garrus though, Garrus is best squadmate.

Mordin and Tali, but I would Find it more interesting with Thane and Tali going instead.

>>447646447646

What else can I say... 'AH WANT IT NOOOWWWW!'

Also, yes. This was put up a couple of days early just in case there was a concern from the site moderators as my original  CYOA  format (which was a tad different)  did not meet approval when I discussed it with a mod whom shall remain nameless.

I know there were a great number of awesome combinations and it was hard to narrow it down, but my desire in the first choice was to put together teams that would be 'specialized' for a certain task.

So this wasn't just me putting forward favorites of mine.

Well, except that  Tali, Garrus, Mordin, Thane, Grunt, and Jack ... actually are my favorites... and I never used boring Jacob, b**chy Miranda,  Bland Samara, or the DLC characters....

Uhhh wait, what was I originally saying?

Tali and Mordin. The idea of that salarian singing along with Pinkie Pie would be hilarious.

Mordin & Tali.

Plus the way you've done Mordin's dialog was SPOT ON!

A mustache to you ma'am, we wait more.

Tali and Legion

What?  

>>447890447890

I...suggested this to the crew members

Image: http://images.wikia.com/masseffect/images/b/b5/Legion_Tali_Loyalty_Confrontation.png

... It didn't go over well.

>>447918447918

Exactly!  What better way to make an amusing story than to have the two who will never see eye-to-eye?  

On a more serious note, I vote for Thane and Garrus.  

Tali and mordin, though I would love to see tali and legion together. That was how I played anyways.

Mordin and tali

or Garrus and thane

Hard choice

Cant I take Garrus and Tali

Wow, alot of calls for Garrus and Tali. I wonder if I should allow write in campaign for choices like this.

Would have to REALLY shake the stars to get it in though.

*throws down the gauntlet of Democracy*

>>448662448662

Can I change my answer to Garrus and Tali?

(Not that it would matter all that much, Mordin/Tali seems like the most popular choice at the moment.)

Mordin and Tali, they should be fun( as well as being my team when I played). As a soldier we can bring the heavy firepower and having 2 combat drones is always tons of fun.

I vote Mordin and Tali, though if you're allowing a write-in ballot, Tali and Garrus would be awesome.

Tali and Mordin for me, although I would like to see Tali and Garrus. I like what you have so far. Keep up the great work!

Aside from being a soldier (prefer infiltrator myself personaly) we pretty much have the same Shep

Tali and Mordin have my vote, can't wait for the next update of this and Along Came A Spider

Nnnnnnnnhhhhh...

...It's obvious I need to at the very least partially familiarize myself with Mass Effect if I want to enjoy this story, because honestly I can barely tell what's going on. It would be nice if there were a little bit more explanation about what's going on with some of the concepts and the characters and past events because I honestly don't know much of anything about the ME universe. I know there's a guy named Shepard and I know there's some kind of thingamajig that allows things to achieve 'negative mass' (hence Mass Effect) and that allows for them to do all their cool sci-fi stuff, and that there are things called Reapers and they're the bad guys you're supposed to shoot at... and they MAY be similar to the Borg? Beyond that though, I basically know nothing. SO when you're up there talking about 'Physical Integration' and 'Protheans' and all the various factions and races and characters... I get a little bit confused. Especially since none of these concepts are really explained, like... at all.

I dunno, maybe I just need a wiki open while I read this, but in my opinion, a story should be able to stand on its own. I should be able to read and enjoy a story without having to do supplementary reading... or playing. No matter how good the Mass Effect series may be, I should be able to enjoy a crossover story like this without having played it first and, in fact, a really good story should be able to draw me in and get me interested in the series by itself so I feel compelled to pick it up. This is how I got into Beast Wars, Dresden Files, Silent Hill, and Alan Wake, by the way. Really good crossover fanfictions that got me interested in the thing they were crossing over with and inspired me to broaden my horizons.

This story... has not convinced me to pick up Mass Effect... which is a shame because it's written really well, as your stories usually are (love your Doctor Whoof series btw. Possibly the best one I've seen ever). But sadly, it relies upon too much knowledge of the Mass Effect Universe for me to enjoy properly. I understand in your foreword that you instructed us to go out and buy all three ME games and play them nonstop for the next 120+ hours, but sadly, some of us aren't willing to drop 30-70 dollars on games (x3) at will just on somebody's recommendation without being thoroughly convinced it's worth the money, and the utter lack of explanation isn't helping me to be convinced. I also understand that you don't really want to include spoilers, but that doesn't mean you can't explain concepts, factions, races, and characters, you just need to be a bit more vague and be careful about how you go about doing it to avoid events that happen in-game. Sadly, as is, I can't help but merely be confused by a lot of what's going on, and making me utterly confused does not reflect well on my opinion of the story... nor the series it's representing.

It's too bad because given what the other comments are saying, it sounds pretty interesting. Sadly, all I can really get from this story is "there are these guys on a ship going to rescue some stranded scientists and retrieve data from an unexplored planet." And that's a fine setup and all, but it's the story to hundreds upon hundreds of things. And if you want me to really care at all you need to make your story somewhat original and define your characters and concepts from all the rest... which I'm sure you are, but you're not doing it in a way that is accessible to the reader that is not in the Mass Effect fold, making your story limited to the reader.

Also, I'm not a fan of 'human turns into a pony' at least not in crossover fanfiction. I tend to feel that, unless a) there's a really REALLY good reason for it for genre or immediately apparent story reasons, or b) it's a Doctor Whoof fic (since he has his own background character of course), the character should be able to go to Equestria and remain unchanged... ESPECIALLY in spacefaring fics where they meet alien races all the time and DON'T suddenly turn into a different species every time they land on a new planet. I get that this is a personal preference, but honestly, at least so far as I've read, it doesn't make sense to me at all why anyone should turn into a pony when they land on Equestria... unless there's some reason for it in Mass Effect, like to make first contact go smoother or something? If that's the case then that's just one more disconnect between this story and an outside reader.

Look, you write well. You write really REALLY well... but I honestly can't give this story any kind of good review because NOTHING is explained. It's like Quest for Camelot for me... things are just happening or being glanced over with no reason whatsoever and it's really jarring.

I can really only give this a 6/10. It sounds like it could be really really good, and if you stop and/or go back and explain the concepts being brought up, then I'd be willing to up my review. I really want to like and follow this story, but as is...

Also, I guess I may not be entirely qualified to say this since I can't make an informed choice... but I guess I choose Garrus and Thane. I have no idea who these people are or what they can do, but here's my line of logic: You're going into potentially hostile territory to rescue hostages and retrieve data. Personally, I'd want to try and be stealthy and try and get in and out without a fight and with as minimal detection as possible, but be ready with somebody who can be capable in combat if absolutely necessary. If it were me, I'd say I'd want somebody like Solid Snake on my side, but well, he isn't a choice. That said, if these two can be 'discrete' I'd guess they'd be the closest to that option. Of course, I can't be sure I'm making the right choice since I don't know who these people are like, what they can do, what their personalities are, or even what they look like...

after reading the Conversion Bureau stories. I just hate human/alien to pony stories.....good concept...but i am going to have to pass this one. sorry.

Good luck.

I choose a different answer!

I choose Garrus and Tali!

I CHOOSE TALI AND GARRUS AS MY NEW ANSWER!

>>450633450633 ...Um... IMO... a good chunk of that review can't be taken seriously due to the fact that you don't know much about the game... The story that Loyal has shown so far fits perfectly with the storyline in the game. Much of the confusion you are having is directly related to the fact that you haven't played it. Most of the readers have, hence the demand for Tali and Garrus, as most everyone knows those two. Not attacking you or anything, as your review WAS solid, but I'm just pointing out that you don't really have sufficient information to review a story like this. Just my two bits on the subject. Also, I don't believe Loyal was trying to get you to pick up the game... I think this was written for people that were already fans to enjoy. Please correct me if I'm wrong, Loyal!

>>451745451745

^ What this guy said. If you don't care for a story based on not knowing the source material, then either you educate yourself, or just not read it. Other franchises don't need to do a total recap on everything that happened before. Why should fan-made material be held to a higher standard?

Just take this site for instance... Would you even be here if you didn't like the show? The stories here take for granted that their audience doesn't need to be spoon-fed details about everything about the universe, we're just here to read some fun stories and be entertained.

Well If I have to go with the options given then it has to be "Lets see what we can learn (Mordin and Tali)"

But if I can put in a write in option, then I choose Garrus and Tali. Either way, let the awesomeness ensue.

>>451745451745

Okay, but see... that was kinda the entire point of my review.

It's one of my tenants of writing that a good story, whether it be a sequel, a spinoff from an established story, or a fanfiction, that it should be capable of standing on its own. I should be able to read/watch/play a story/movie/game and be able to at least generally comprehend what's going on and be able to enjoy myself. For example: The first Indiana Jones movie that I ever saw was 'Indiana Jones and the Last Crusade.' I had never seen Raiders or Temple before watching Crusade... and yet I still found that it was one of the most fun and enjoyable movies that I ever saw because it did a good job of establishing character, events, setting, and other such things. Another good example is the 'Buffy the Vampire Slayer' spinoff 'Angel.' Before Joss Whedon went off his meds and started making both shows into nonsensical and idiotic piles of drivel, they were actually really good shows, and Angel was the one that I saw first. And it explained characters, situations, and concepts really well, and when the need arose, it accurately summarized necessary events and elements.

This story, while it SOUNDS interesting, does not give proper explanation about most of these characters for an outside reader such as me to get interested in it, thereby severely limiting its audience and readership. Yeah, to you it's absolutely brilliant, because you know the material, but to me it's a mishmash of confusing dialogue, characters that don't make sense to me, concepts that are way over my head, and past events brought up that I'm supposed to know about that I simply don't. And to say 'oh well you just need to play the game' isn't good enough. Like I said, a good story should be able to stand on its own and draw outside audiences in and give them inspiration to broaden their horizons. It can't just tell people 'go buy the games first' though. That's like holding the story hostage while you go play the games to pay ransom for the story.

Just because I'm unfamiliar with ME doesn't make me any less of a prospective reader. And I and everybody else who tries to read this who isn't familiar with the ME games is basically getting slapped in the face when we try to read it. And it's too bad because I really do WANT to enjoy it, but it's written with such little explanation that I simply can't. And it doesn't have any excuse NOT to be written with this explanation, either.

>>451914451914

I never requested a 'total recap.' Again, look at my examples of Indy 3 and Angel. They didn't recap much of anything, at least not until it was necessary to know. However, it DID explain characters, concepts, situations, and other such basic context. There's no reason for a story to not even give the most BASIC of exposition about characters and concepts.

And honestly, the fact of the matter is I like this author and I really think I COULD like this story as it is if it only explained a little more. Like I said, I shouldn't have to do supplementary reading (or playing) to understand the most basic of concepts in any story. A story should be able to stand on its own And yes, I DO hold other franchises to this standard. Moreso than with fanfiction really. It's one of the big problems I have with Assassins Creed 2, which I tried to play before Assassins Creed 1. I wasn't given any recap at all or explanation about what was going on or who was doing things and I had no idea what to do... and it was a problem. And I really criticized it for it because its limiting it's audience to only those that have played AC1 as a result.

As for this site... well, believe it or not that is kinda a problem when people on this site write fics but don't bother to explain who characters, places, and concepts are. If, say, somebody who doesn't watch the show came onto the site and decided to read a fanfiction to see if he would be interested in the show or not, he could very easily be scared off... which means we've just scared one more prospective brony away from the herd.

Believe it or not, though, most of the fics I read at least have given at the very least the most basic of exposition, about who the characters are, what they look like, what they do for a living, what the town they live in is called, what their personalities are like, and basic stuff about how the world works.

I'm not asking her to stop and explain everything that has happened so far. I'm not asking for a recap of the whole game. I'm not asking that she go into every tiny little detail and go through every technical aspect about the universe. I'm ASKING that she introduce me to the world in the same way the beginning of any other good story would. Introduce me to the characters, describe them, both physically and mentally to me through their actions and emotions, describe the way the world works as it comes up, and provide necessary context when applicable.

Honestly, it's not a tall order.

>>452080452080 Look, I don't feel like arguing with someone that has nothing better to do than leave essay-long comments about things that really shouldn't matter, so I'll say this once and be done with it. Where she starts off is recapped the best it could be. It would be hard to explain the storyline at the time of this story/DLC, because it would take a very long time; the prologue would be like 10k words. You don't understand what's going on? Go play the game. You don't have the time to go play a game? Maybe if you left reviews that weren't long enough to me stories on there own, you would have the time. Don't feel like it? Don't read the story. All there is to it.

>>452155452155

Very well, though I think basically saying tl;dr is sorta copping out of trying to understand somebody's point of view. And honestly, there could be at least a LITTLE more basic exposition about characters and concepts. I can POINT to the places where I can say 'there. Right there. Put more words about this right there.' I get that it's trying to keep the feel and flow of the game, but some things have to be sacrificed to make a good story. And what's wrong with 10000 word prologues? I actually love it when a story gives me a great big meaty chapter to spend a long time enthralled with.

And what I was doing in reading this was trying to get into the story of Mass Effect. I was trying to read and enjoy this story to see if Mass Effect was worth my time. Sadly, it hasn't convinced me because it's explained so little and has been overall confusing.

I type really fast. Those 'essays' only took me about ten minutes.

And Loyal2Luna is a girl.

>>452167452167 And that's what happens when I type fast! Sorry, I know she's a girl, but I CAN'T type fast. If you want an opinion/facts on the story of Mass Effect, by the way, all you have to do is PM anyone reading this story.

I don't mean to come off as irritated, but I'm not having the best day... guess I'm kinda taking it out on you. Those points where the author could have added more would have detracted from the flow if the STORY. Not the game. The game has a very complex storyline. I know you don't get a good feel for what's happened earlier on in the story, but I believe the way Loyal wrote this is the way it needed to be done. For a story like this, I believe it's better for the author to just answer questions in comments rather than try and explain it in the story. We really should stop this back and forth though... if you want to continue this conversation, PM me. I don't want to clutter Loyal's comment section any more.

Right... If anypony is gonna clutter this comment area... it's gonna be yours truely .

I get that it is a bit closed off from those who haven't played the 2 games, Thus the reason new introduction materials were placed in the foreword to help address this a bit. Quickest way I can think of to introduce those who haven't played the game to the important individuals without doing an actual full re-write of two 40+ hour games in the story.

Don't get me wrong, I could do that, but who wants to read 'Loyal2Luna's Re-telling of the most awesome story in gaming history' ?

well, apparently you guys do...so HERE WE GO!

Mass Effect 1-

In the 22nd Century, Humanity discovered it was not alone... Mass Relays allow instant travel between key star-systems, connecting the galaxy together... at the center of a massive, multi-species society is the Citadel, a New York City sized space station that act's as the galactic Capitol... humans are new comers, seen as bullies by most aliens but want a bigger role in galactic society by joining the Citadel Council, the 'government' of the civilized galaxy.... All tech in galaxy based on extinct Protheans... Answering a distress call from a human colony under attack, Commander Shepard, a human special Ops soldier, discovers a Prothean Information Beacon that gave him a vague warning of a horrific enemy...  When a rogue galactic super-agent (A Specter) named Saren is discovered to be behind an attack on the Human Colony where the Prothean Beacon was found:  Shepard is given a ship named 'Normandy' to further his investigation and has alot of adventures, making friends, kicking ass, and taking names...  Shepard eventually discovers Protheans didn't make kewl mass relays or tech, but that they are traps left by an malevolent force to 'guide' galactic society into predictable patterns of development... He also discovers that Saren is only a pawn of a much greater threat: The Reapers, a hyper advanced race of sentient battleships,  blew up Protheans and all advanced societies in galactic History, hiding in Dark Space beyond the edge of the galaxy, leaving one Reaper behind to set off the Trap when the time comes and usher in a Reaper invasion  every 50,000 years or so  to harvest every advanced species....  Surviving Protheans at the end of the last cycle threw a wrench into Reaper Plans by screwing up their fail safe signals to open a 'space-door' for the Reaper Invasion, which is located at the Citadel and allows the reapers to obliterate the heads of Government before they even realize they are under attack...  unsure what went wrong... Sovereign  has to take extreme measures to open the door, which required it to attack and invade the Citadel... Shepard intercepts Saren's attempt to open the Door for the Reaper Invasion and in a pitched battle, the united fleets of the galaxy manage to destroy the massive Reaper.  With the Reaper Invasion delayed, Shepard reaps the rewards of his choices and Humanity either joins or dominates the galactic government.... But realizing that the Reapers have not been truly defeated and that only ONE Reaper nearly destroyed multiple fleets of starships,  Shepard calls on the galaxy to prepare for the enemy waiting out in Dark Space.

Mass Effect 2-

Three Months later, new race called 'The Collectors' appears,  attacks and blows up the SSV Normandy almost effortlessly.... Commander Shepard declared KIA and, while the galaxy mourns the loss of one of it's brightest heroes, politicians and galactic leaders deny and downplay the Reaper Threat, feeling sure that it has ended...  

Two Years Later, Shepard awakens, brought back from the dead using bleeding edge technology and an almost endless financial resource by Cerberus, a Pro-Human Extremist Group dedicated to the preservation of humanity at any Cost.... It's enigmatic Leader, the human tycoon known only as 'The Illusive Man' informs Shepard that the super-advanced Collectors are attacking and abducting random human colonies, hundreds of thousands of people taken for unknown reasons while politicians bicker.  Believing the Collectors to be agents of the Reapers (due to the advanced nature of their technology) , Shepard (against his better judgement) works with Cerberus in spite of the group's shady past and methods... His mission: to attack the Collector Stronghold beyond the infamous 'Omega-4 Relay', a mass relay from which no ship has ever returned. Given a new, more advanced version of his original ship, dubbed 'Normandy SR-2'.

Shepard recruits from the best the Galaxy has to offer.... forming a team to do the impossible... take the fight to the Collectors.

They say it's a Suicide Mission.

Shepard intends to prove them wrong.

This sound about right for a quick read up?

My vote is for Garus and Tali.

Garrus and Tali, or Mordin and Tali.

I vote Garrus and Tali! Can't wait to see what happens next!

garrus and tail

>>457363457363

Wait... N7... Unit #1.

*GASP!!!!* ANDERSON!??!!!

How I want legion in the choices.

He would possibly implode if he turned organic. Literally implode.

Since this isn't a choice however, I would choose Mordin and Tali. Mordin would also implode at the scientific impossibility that is: PINKIE PIE. Tali would just give up, but Mordin would be relentless until he found a reasonable explanation for the "anomaly".

Mordin and Tali. Need to figure out what's going on.

I was going to pick Grunt and Jack, because that'd be hilarious, but I'll hop on the Tali-Mordin bandwagon. Keelah Sa'lai!

...oh wait... Maybe using Tali is a BAD idea. Her immune system is COMPLETELY JACKED, one must remember.

From what I've read so far you are doing a better then incredible job of capturing the characters, there is nothing I don't like about what has happened so far. Though Grunt and Jack would be hilarious it doesn't seem to fit. I would have to vote Mordin and Tali; reason, Pinkie and Mordin sing Gilbert & Sullivan is the third best thing that could happen. The first and second being Ponies and Mass Effect. Well even if there is no singing those two are my favorite thanking characters, with Grunt and Jack being my favorite punchy characters.

I go for Mordin and Tali

Would be cool to see how Mordin reacts to a new sentient species

(and to see how Twilight reacts to a salarian that is clearly smarter than her)

Ooh! Ooh! If it's not too late, I vote Tali and Mordin. (Although Mordin and Garrus would be my favourite team.) Nice story so far. I almost went with something similar; I'm glad I decided to change course when I did. Looking forward to seeing how this plays out. Why was Discord with Luna and Celestia at the start, eh? Perhaps there's some kind of bigger threat.

12 Hour warning... Voting Period coming to a close. Hurry my little ponies!

Alright and here we go, had to search around and make sure there were no double votes, but even with my own vote thrown into the mix (Tali and Garrus, I was won over by the call) it was close, but  the winner by 2 votes is:

That's okay, I'm sure Jack would have hated it anyways.

Voting is now officially close and next part will be up on or before the 1st of May. Thank you to EVERYPONY who voted and please come back as this show's just getting started.

Crap........ didn't see the updated vote list. My recasted vote would have made it a tie. Oh well.

Because I'm a sap for the Paragon path, not to mention it's the best of the lot seeing as how feigning ignorance would be difficult (with his armor.......from SPACE!!!) tell the truth. Worst that could happen is they don't believe you or think you're crazy.

"A flash of light that seemed to explode outward as it impacted the planet’s weak magnetosphere, sending out a wave of energy that broke the light spectrum of the distant star, creating a colorful rainbow-like aurora ring to spread out in all directions overhead.

Two seconds later, the burst of prismatic light lanced down to the surface with the force of a precision orbital strike, creating the appearance of a bold, perfectly formed rainbow impacting the ground"

HMM, I think I see what you did there... I approve

Got to go with the Tell the Truth option, better to get explanations out of the way, hopefully that will convince them to help Shep out.

Shepard is smart enough to Tell The Truth.

Truth but that's just my Shepard

Tell the truth.

Option 1, Tell the Truth

Tell the truth, paragon Shepard is best Shepard.

I vote for "Act Accusingly".

tell the truth

Tell the truth, after all, there is no reason to lie and feigning ignorance won't work so well with Twilight around.

I agree with >>506085506085, Paragon Shepard is best Shepard. So I say go with telling the truth.

Orbital Friendship Cannon, automated anti-personnel version! I approve of this.

I think I have to vote "Tell the Truth" on this. Though I know Shepard's going to have a lot of questions of his own.

Good writing so far. To me it seemed like you captured the voices and personalities of Shepard, Tali, and Mordin quite well. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

Logically, feigning ignorance would be the better choice. True, Shepard has his armor on, but he can fake 'amensia' if he wanted to. Twillight is not the greatest lie detector in my opinion, but she could detect illogical fallacies which is something I believe Shepard can overcome.

Personally,I would go paragon and tell the truth if this were a game. However, the logical factor comes into play. If Shepard told the truth the following may happen:

1. Twillight may believe he's just flat out crazy, though she will probably investigate anyway. She would probably look into psychoanalyical stuff as well.

2. Calling Celestia! That's always a possiblity. An unlikely one, since Twillight will want to take this in her own hooves until she can't figure the situation.

3.She "believes" him, but will press on home send home, where and what the Citadel is, and all those fun inquistive questions which will lead her to freak out believing them to be impossible despite the possiblity due to Shepard's suit.

4. She's open-minded and believes him, though I don't know how that would happen.

5. Anything else that have not mentioned.

However, I'm trying to keep in mind of key factors in this situation:

Fact:Shepard's suit WILL be questioned.

Fact: Shepard is unarmed (currently)

Fact: Twillight will interogate deeply.

Possible Factor: If Shepard manages to fake ignorance with Twillight, Rainbow Dash and Applejack may drill him next concerning his honesty and intentions.

Possible Factor: Pinkie may pop up with crazed knowledge on Shepard, his background, or anything in the galaxy (assuming that they are still in the same galaxy).

Fact: Shepard is an Earth Pony. Intimidation may lead to sour relations and issues. Plus, Twillight can wave her magic wand.

Possible Factor: Twillight may report her findings to Celestia.

So, for logic and interests, I choose B: feign Ignorance. The old amnesia card can still be played here. After all, he was found in the Everfree Forest, he's still "confused," and they just met. Even if he could only play it out for a while, he would be at less of a disadvantage with more intel on his new location. I'm also thinking that Shepard has to adapt to his new body. Again, supports amnesia. That's if he plays it. Plus, more drama!

Truth I guess.

Tell ze Truth

As much as I love Paragon options, Telling the truth would be little... stupid.

I vote for Ignorance.

Im roleplaying this: Act Accusingly.

Nobody shoots me with a moon laser, leads me into a bunker via hack, turns me into another creature without answering a few questions.

I vote for feigning ignorance... If I were him I would stall as long as possible until I could locate my team, and while they seem friendly enough, he has no way of knowing what their intentions are.

Truth. Also Orbital Friendship Cannon for the win!

Edit: Votes so far:

Truth: 14

Feigning Ignorance: 3

Act Accusingly: 2

My vote goes to 'Feigning Ignorance' just so it's known where I stand as well I get a vote too don't forget.

I want to tell the truth but i also want whatever gives the most dialog... I love the dialog. So go with the amnesia card.

Feign Ignorance.

Feign Ignorance, of course.

Also, as a side note, while the writing is positively superb - seriously, possibly the single best mass effect crossover out there - there are a few ticks, mostly with dialogue, though you appear to know the rules of it, you've slipped up a number of times with commas and quotations. If you have an editor good at that, I recommend asking him to take a second look. Most of them are in the first bit of the chapter, pre-Kodiak asplosion.

Moon Laser + Orbital Rainbow Cannon.

Bit overkill as an anti-personal weapon perhaps.

Personally I would lead with a (truthful) declaration of his identity then start demanding answers. (Act Accusingly)

Feign ignorance. No way to know the creatures level of technology at this point, should gather more information before acting or yielding any information.

Go Paragon

Then Renegade interrupt because you misclicked

Accusingly, my Shepard would be a tad upset over the influx of new information and lack of answers

Feign ignorance

Act accusingly. We're going full renegade!

Feign ignorance. Telling the truth at this stage would be a mistake. Better for Shepard to get to grips with the planet and earn their trust before dropping a bomb like that on them.