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Stories (11)

  • The Commander of Shepherds
    An amnesiac Commander Shepard has been living and thriving in the Everfree Forest for several months. Saving the life of a passing pegasus sets a chain of events in motion that could change Equestria forever.

    120,747 words · 10,643 views · 1,568 likes · 40 dislikes
  • Dungeons and Ponies
    Twilight Sparkle, apprentice to the great Archmage Celestia's life is thrown into disarray when her master graduates her, gives her an apprentice of her own, and sends her off to some nowhere town all in one day.
    63,778 words · 3,931 views · 543 likes · 16 dislikes
  • The Best Babysitter
    A young girl is suddenly forced to remember someone who used to be very important to her when a new girl transfers to her school.
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  • A Celestial Mix-up
    Princess Celestia has been doing her job for a long time without a break. She finally decides it's time for a vacation. A mix-up with her replacement how
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  • Return of the Dawn
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  • Umbral Shadows
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  • Umbral Travels
    67,449 words · 357 views · 50 likes · 2 dislikes
  • Settling In
    194,868 words · 1,010 views · 104 likes · 9 dislikes
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Commander Shepard remembers firing the crucible.  She remembers she had to make an important choice.  She remembers good friends, a lover, and plenty of loyal crewmen.  

She just can't remember what her choice was.  What the threat she was striving so hard to end was.  Or what the faces of the most important people in her life look like.

She also has no idea how she wound up in the monster filled forest she's come to call home for the past eight months.  Or how she picked up a snarky A.I. making its home in her omni-tool.  

First Published
27th Jul 2013
Last Modified
27th Jan 2014

Comments ( 2,053 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · 23 · ·

Welp, even if I only know the first ME, you got me hooked!

Do continue!:raritystarry:

#2 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · · ·

I love it:heart::pinkiehappy:

Mass Effect 3 has been my favorite game of-all-time:twilightsmile:

BTW paragraph 21-ish you wrote tree-of-the- night. Don't think that space before night is supposed to be there:raritywink:

:heart::heart::heart:

FAVORITE:yay:

#3 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · 1 · ·

Great start to what should be a great story!  Now, to go buy ME3.  Maybe play 1 and 2 some more.  Hmm, decisions decisions.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · · ·

Well, I'm interested to see where this goes.  :twilightsmile:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · · ·

MOAR:flutterrage:

#6 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · · ·

>>2945973

You have to remember those decisions! It's important!:rainbowdetermined2:

#7 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 20h ago · 11 · 1 ·

Nice to see people using FemShep. Even Better, an Infiltrator FemShep. That's the best Shep there is. Liked it so far. So Keep it up.

#8 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 19h ago · 7 · ·

...Oh yes.

Human Shepard in the Everfree with Legion as an AI assistant about to make first contact?

Sign me the hell up.

Only complaint is that Legion seems a... bit off (and it's not the "I" thing, I know why that works), but besides that, excellent work.

#9 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 18h ago · 1 · 13 ·

Dude, you titled this 'Commander of Sheperds' and then you constantly call her 'Shepard'.

Consistency: also, the second one is the correct spelling.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 18h ago · 5 · 1 ·

Heres hoping this is a Paragon Shepard... My Femshep was a renegade vanguard.... Bad assed as hell, but not a nice lady XD

#11 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 18h ago · 3 · 2 ·

I hope we get a renegade femshep

#12 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 17h ago · 3 · 1 ·

>>2946389

Shepard's name is spelled wrong in the title for a reason lol

#13 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2945969

Thanks for catchin that.  :o Fix'd

#14 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2946097

Well it's MY Shep haha, she was an infiltrator. XD

#15 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2946357

It's been quite a while since I played 2 or 3 for that matter so there's a chance Legion MIGHT sound a bit off.  The I thing though, there's a reason for that.

#16 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2946399

She's probably more neutral than paragon or renegade.  She's killing to keep herself alive, and she eats what she can get a hold of.  So far she's more or less a blank slate (what with the amnesia and all) so events happening around her are going to shape whether she's paragon or renegade.

#17 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

It's too awesome for me to form a coherent reply so until then I give you :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

#18 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2946912

That's a lot of kissy Rainbow Dashes. :o

#19 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2946871

I look forward to more, though I'm beginning to despair for ever clearing out my backlog of things to read considering how often I come across anything fic that just grabs me by the ears, pulls me in, and beats me over the head with desire to read it... So far I think theres like 150 or so that have done this, most over 15 chapters...

#20 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2946399

>>2946502

>>2946871

Please, everyone knows Paragade!Shepard is best Shepard.

#21 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2946925My read later queue is up to 199 now. XD I never read anything anymore, it's always write, write, write.  Sigh.

#22 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2946976

I agree entirely.  I never liked having to 100% go one way or the other for optimum story results.  Smart ass Hawke in DA2 is the only way I go.

#23 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2947039 smart-asses are the funniest! :pinkiehappy:

#24 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2946097 >>2946862 Agreed Infiltrator is best... snipers... CLOAKING! WOOHOO (to bad cloaking wasn't in the 1st game) :pinkiehappy:

#25 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2947065

Blerg I know.  She's gonna be cloaking soon once the Mane 6 start hunting for her in the Everfree.

#26 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2947066 Nice touch with Legion by the way, I was literally crying when he died. :fluttercry:

Though your right, anyone as trained as shepherd (and not as cocky as myself or renegade shepherd) would cloak and watch... I do prefer smart-ass and going one way only seems kinda dull, so don't limit yourself to ether good or evil be both~! :pinkiecrazy: And your right Smart-ass Hawke was the only real entertainment in there (besides the sexy dwarf)

#27 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 15h ago · · ·

looking good, though your cover pic makes me think she will be turned pony sometime in the future

#28 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 15h ago · 3 · ·

>>2947081

Psh I was sobbing the whole game.  Even for Thane who I hated!  I couldn't stand him in two but man the waterworks came on in 3.  And Mordin I had to stop playing for a while I was so broken up.  I wanted Shep to have some sort of connection with her old life, and Legion seemed easy to squeeze in the way I did.  It was him or EDI, and no offense to Joker's sexbot but I liked Legion more.

#29 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 15h ago · · ·

>>2947199

She might!  She might not.  I just thought it was a cute picture of pony Shepard, that fits with the MLP/ME crossover. XD

#30 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 15h ago · · ·

>>2947235

sort of wishing she would be, I would expect twilight to transform her even if its temporary, just to prevent the population from panicking

#31 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 15h ago · · ·

>>2947234Edi was funny and all, but Legion is just better in all sorts of ways. I wasn't able to cry for Thane, it made me pissed off, and what pissed me off the most was the fact I almost killed that LT.Bastard Ki-Lang (whatever his name was) on Thesia I mean I took his shields down to zero ... and yet I wouldn't let me touch his life. Mordan's death made smile and cry all at the same time, he was a great alien and kicked ass, his sacrifice was the point where, everyone knew the war changed. So yes I shed a tear for Mordan but his death was a light that brought forth many more. :coolphoto:

now am going to go finish my book on Chseesy Lines!  :pinkiecrazy:

#32 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 14h ago · · ·

Grats on the feature, you totally deserve it.  : )

#33 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 14h ago · · ·

>>2947036

725 unread items in mine currently...

#34 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 14h ago · · ·

>>2947235

this story is full of yes. but now i demand hot sheppony shipping.

#35 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 13h ago · 3 · ·

>>2947235

Before I even read this story, I beg you not to turn her pony.

She just fought to save her species and the rest of the galaxy.

Maybe play it off as some sort of trigger from her past?

Just because she can't remember it doesn't mean she can't 'remember' it.

Like someone who had amnesia due to a fire, and has an irrational fear to it.

The person doesn't know why, while at the same time said person does remember why?

Get what I'm saying? Because I'm beginning to confuse myself.

Just, please no pony Shep?

#36 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 13h ago · · ·

This should be good.  I'm a sucker for a good crossover, and lately all i've been reading are FoE crossfics.  'S time for a good Mass Effect crossfic.

#37 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 13h ago · · ·

I like the looks of this! Keep up the great work! :pinkiehappy:

#38 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 12h ago · · ·

Now this has me interested. Can't wait for more!:rainbowkiss:

#39 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 12h ago · · ·

:yay: Cute so far.

#40 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 12h ago · 1 · ·

Favorited for later read, this looks good. Always a fan of Mass Effect :pinkiesmile:

#41 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 12h ago · · ·

Other than a couple of little errors, this was pretty good!

#42 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 12h ago · · ·

well, this is a keeper. not the bug kind either. (bad joke I know)

I'm adding this to my favorites immediately.

Also, might want to change the image to avoid confusion, I thought Shep was a pony for a while.:eeyup:

#43 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 12h ago · 2 · ·

Of course the bullets passed harmlessly through

If by "bullets" you mean "piece of metal the size of a grain of sand shaved off of a block of metal within the gun and fired at incredibly deadly speed via the weapon's mass accelerator" then sure!

:rainbowwild:

That's just me nitpicking though. Calling them bullets is fine, I just always loved the lore behind ammunition in the Mass Effect universe, and can never resist an opportunity to bring it up.

In any case, liking this so far. The cover image was a little confusing, but the story itself is looking good. :twilightsmile:

Can't wait to see where this goes.

#44 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · · ·

>>2948198

Right, I know how the ammo works but saying 'rapidly fired shred of metal surrounded in a mass effect field' is a little wordier than bullet. XD

#45 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · · ·

>>2948179

I keep hearing that, I might change it soon.  Or I might just turn Shepard into a pony.

#46 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · 1 · ·

>>2948139

Thanks!  Grammar and I are age old enemies.  As is comma placement.  I haven't had any formal education since high school and that was quite a few years ago lol

#47 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · · ·

>>2947526

Might ship her, I have a couple ideas I'm rolling around lol

#48 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · · ·

At first it moves a tad too fast, but as it goes the flow work better. I like it so far, i'll keep an eye on it.

#49 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · · ·

Definitely a good start, but you might want to use something to separate a character's thoughts from narration.  Italics are a common method.

#50 · Chapter 1 · 60w, 11h ago · 2 · ·

>>2948221 please don't. I mean really, don't

not that 'human in equestria' is original, neither is 'human made pony in equestria'

you got a good thing going here as is.

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