Reunited with his beloved Shield Knight, Shovel Knight continues journeying with her, just like old times.
But when what appears to just be run-of-the-mill loot ends up teleporting the pair to a new dimension,
The pair will find themselves not only facing a new journey. but new challenges within themselves as well.
*Warning- minor spoilers for Shovel Knight*
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7/21/2014- We made the popular stories list! Thank you everyone! Who knows, maybe we'll make the feature box? Perhaps?
7/22/2014- I don't even... we actually made the feature box.
4/3/2016- We once again made the feature box. Thank you all again for your continued support of the story.
Chapters (6)
Didn't we just see a shovel knight story yesterday?
4729558 Yep.
4729558 Really? Huh, I thought I made the only one so far.
Hope you're enjoying the story so far.
I could edit or preread for you, it may not be the best or the fastest but i will do it if you want.
4730479 Thanks so much!
For now, if you spot anything I need to fix, let me know 
I should start working chapter II soon.
4730505 You got it boss!
This is nice. I'll see where you go.
4729558 Really?
What is it called.
Hope you can give us more soon!
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I find the dismissal of Shovel Knight's dad kinda... weird.
4734602 It will all make sense in time.
FOR SHOVELRY! is a great name for a shovel knight story.
I just watched my friend beat this game the other day, and I wanted to tell you, since I'm still in the Shovel Knight-mode, I love this story.
4734983 Why thank you!
Hope you continue to enjoy it as it continues.
Yo...
I have not seen any errors yet. so far so good. Great as always
I do believe I saw a request for a critique in one of your author's notes, so brace your but because here it comes.
I want to start with my knowledge of Shovel Knight is very limited, I only know what goes on in the first hour and last ten minutes of the game so some of the things I am going to touch upon may be covered in parts of the game I have not witnessed.
Your story has promise, the "prolog" to your story and a bit of chapter 4 contained bits that if more focused on could turn this story into a true gem. From my read through I spotted almost not spelling or grammatical errors, though those are not my strong suit so this praise should be taken with a grain of salt. However in its current form I can only call your story mediocre at best since it is little more than shovel knight and shield knight faffing about.
I has several big problems with this story the pacing, the amount of telling, the constant shifting of perspectives, and the handling of characters. Pacing is one of the most glaring issues your story currently faces, everything proceeds by at a lightning pace, interesting events condensed down into mere paragraphs with potentially interesting scenarios being left by the wayside as the the story both rushes forwards and spins its wheels at the same time. Slow down. Take the time to describe things, places, events, let character talk it out instead of condensing conversations down into, "Yeah this happened." I'd also recommend that you either join several of your chapters together or lengthening them significantly, the break in a chapter is rather jarring and is best used to separate a long passage of time or to give the reader a break before something big an important happens. While it is not a requirement that your chapters be of a certain lengths and I have in fact encountered several stories with shorter chapters than yours, several of your chapter breaks occur in places I do not think justify such a break.
Expanding on this, a good place for a chapter break might be when changing the point of view, though this might not always hold true. But this is another problem your story has, you change point of view freely, frequently, and most of the time, needlessly. Several times in your story you cut away from the knights to look at a paragraph or two of pony action/thought and I can't remember a single instant of which I felt it was necessary or added anything to the story. I would strongly suggest either reducing the point of view down to include only the knights, preferably only one of them. Or, perhaps, a single pony who will have the most interaction with the pair acting as an audience surrogate who knows nothing about the knights and assigns meaning to some of the knights' actions, sometimes interpreting actions falsely.
Which brings me to my next bullet point of things that need improving on your story, a point that almost every writing class I've ever taken has beaten me over the head with, show don't tell. Your story is almost unforgivably guilty simply going 'this happened' or 'x felt y', and this not only sounds unprofessional and stilted, but is boring as it doesn't let the reader draw her own conclusions or try to puzzle out things themselves. This is most flagrant in some of the previously mentioned spots where you simply skipped or summarized scenes that should not have been summarized, but also whenever you peer into your character's heads. To help remedy some of the internal telling, I'd advise you to think about how you think, when you remember things or think about something do you tend to think, "I'm hungry" or "I'm sad because of X." I doubt it. You need to not only explain the details of what's going on but also try to have your characters think more like the actual human beings they are.
Which brings me to one of my last major issues with your story as it currently stands, how you are handling the characters.Now some parts of this, I am willing to give you a pass on. The knights for example are two people I can fully believe would not be surprised by suddenly landing in Equestria, they live in a world with horse and deer people for peat's sake! The mane six however I have more trouble accepting their acceptance of the knights.
The ponies live in a very dangerous world and have by this point experienced first hand many dangerous things, so when two creatures in full plate that bare more than a passing resemblance to hostile or militaristic races like diamond dogs or minotaurs it is hard to believe that they wouldn't both keep them somewhere secure, but not instantly contact the princesses. This is made even more true when you consider the first action Shovel knight takes is to attack Applejack and easily overpower her, someone the show implies is one of the most physically powerful ponies around. As they also tell of their adventures and fights with monsters, that too could send warning bells of just how potentially dangerous these two complete strangers of alien origin are.
Which also brings up the general lack of a conflict in this story so far. Like I said in the beginning, the threads you dangled with Shield Knight both worrying about lingering corruption and their advancing age both got me hooked and were a large part of how I managed to read the story through. These are great concerns as Shield Knight is coming down off her own much more traumatic Nightmare Moon arch, a link I am happy to see you are teasing at, and that these two brave adventures are far past their prime, being as each character is a minimum age of thirty years old, which for their time period was half their life time. Yet by and large this falls to the wayside as two hardened adventures who obviously love each other and have finally been reunited for a scant few months are willing to let each other out of sight in an alien land to play with talking ponies instead of having to deal with the awkwardness of their relationship now that they no longer have the distraction of adventuring to fall back on, or perhaps attempting to do so in Equestria while still under a sort of house arrest.
Like I said your story is literally oozing with potential to the point that I'd be tempted to help write it or write my own version of this story if I was more familiar with the source material. I would love to give another critique of this story once its been work shopped a few times and would love nothing more than to see you tap that rich potential and grow as a writer.
Oh, one last nitpick, I don't like Rarity just saying she is the Element of Generosity, it seems a bit boastful of her and seems like a needless pull. Hope all this helps.
Great story, i look forward to more fantastic shovelry!!!!
Phffft. Shovelry is dead.
Sorry. Will watch for that complete tag.
So thanks for that.
4738707 THANK YOU SO MUCH!
You REALLLY have no idea how much that helps me out. After all, I did come to Fimfiction with the goal of becoming a better writer.
All of your points I see and I'm aware of, and I'm extremely glad that you see so much potential in it
Of course, I need to HEAVILY workshop this thing (no surprise there) so if you are indeed interested I do need a pre-reader to help me point out these things in the future.
All in all, thank you for your fair critique of my work so far, as continue to become a better writer.
I also look forward to your critique after I've given it a few good workshops.
Hope you're having an awesome day!
4740011 I have never worked as a prereader before but would not be against reading over your chapters and suggesting changes.
4740558 Thank you.
I havn't finished Chapter IV yet (most likely it will be ready tomorrow, because I'm working on another story today).
However, in the mean time, if you have anymore specific changes to suggest to any of the current chapters, just send them in a P.M.
4738738 Why strike the earth, when you can slam it?
Nice job! I hope that The Order of No Quarter show up!
Hah, glad to see I'm not the only one with the idea to cross these two over!
You repeatedly spelled "meeting" as "metting" throughout the chapter.
Otherwise, interesting. I'm especially curious about what you do with Black Knight, his ingame role.
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Thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix it right away.
Glad you find it interesting.
"explores" should this be explorers? "Make sure stays safe." missing a she before stays.
4800221 Fixed!
Well Black Knight is not a villain, so what is he there to do? Help them to return home?
4804514 Perhaps. Perhaps not.
4730505 im guessing you have found an editor? if not im always available
I have always interpreted black knight was sheild knights brother... but thats just me
4804621 So he's there to do something, but not malicious?
This has been intresting so far. Cant wait for more
If I recall, Black Knight served as a rival to Shovel Knight throughout the game. Not necessarily good or evil in the context provided. Basically, he's the Proto Man to Shovel Knight's Mega Man. Or maybe the Bass. Yeah, Bass is a better fit, but Proto Man still works, kind of... I'll just say that he's both and move on.
I just finished Shovel Knight today before reading this.
I'm sure this wouldn't be considered too obscure for the heroic duo despite being in a different world, what with them having anthropomorphic beings of their own back home
But of course, the ponies are confused, so there's that
The mark of a true badass
Replace Spa with Paladin
I sense conflict in the near future...Anyways, glad I finally caught up with this story.
Tracked and faved.
This is good.
Eyyy, an update :D keep up the good work (how long do you think the next chapter would take to write)
7092735 Thank you. :) As for the next chapter I can guarantee it'll take a lot less time than Chapter V. XD More than likely within 1 to 2 weeks.
Poor Black Knight having to deal with Discord's shtick. It'll be hilarious if the CMC end up proving their respective worth as squires
7092833 They may prove themselves, or they may fall flat of being true knights. One thing's certain though, Discord is by far the most frustrating creature in the universe to Black Knight. XD
7092834 Thank you so much! :) There's plenty more to come, so I sincerely hope you enjoy.