Hello, I'm Storiesatrandom, and, I, do stories..... At Random.
What secret Celestia holds within about Spike's origins? does it have to do who Spike's parents are or if they're alive? what lays within the mind of Equestia's Benvolent ruler?
image by shinymyu.
rated teen cause of sex talk and suggestive images.
idea created because of image.
no relatetion to Luna's Ultamate Plan, just an ironic choose of words.
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Nice story, i like the idea!
444433 thanks. a shame it the first rating it got was a dislike though. i hope it improofs as (if) it progresses, exspiecally since the Brown Box is gone now.
444437
Well, in my opinion it is one of the better stories out here, and doesn't need any improvement. This, again in my opinion is an unique story.
P.S Faved.
Gah, did you forget grammar for your intro? Is this indicative of how the story goes? Why does no one put any effort into their intros anymore!?
444654 i placed enough effort in the intro.
444657
...ignoring the whole "capitalize the first letter of a sentence," thing.
Edit: Never mind, if you think you did everything right I'm not going to change your mind.
you should probberz update the description as I have sent you the edited version
471568 i think my disprcition is good enough for my eyes, cause, it's a one shot, there really isn't more to the story, so why over explain it?
471769 I meant you should remove the part about it not being edited yet
472066 i did now.
472121 cool
Ummm...... Wat
513660 well,
tf2wiki.net/w/images/9/90/Spy2.png
What did you expect?
I must say that you really should use a beta reader to help clean up this story's spelling and grammar issues. The basic concept by itself has promise, but in execution the story has completely fallen flat.
Also, the word "sentient" does not mean what you think it means. I'd normally say that "sapient" is the word you're looking for, but you seem to be saying that those three adolescent dragons were not sapient since they are nomads. As such I think the word you're looking for here is "civilized". Sorry, but misuse of the word "sentient" is one of my pet peeves.
1017091 i don't know what a beta reader is.
1017907
A beta reader is someone who reads a oneshot story or an unreleased chapter of a longer story for you before you publish it. He or she points out spelling and grammar issues that you might have missed and offers much-needed thoughts and constructive criticism to help you polish your work before you publish it.
1018007 somehow, i doubt they'll be easy to find, they sound like they hang out more in Equestia daily as suppose to actselly be in this place.
1018045
That's not really true; if you look around or put up a blog entry on your profile it shouldn't be too hard to find people willing to beta read for you. Hell, if you have any IRL friends that like MLP and are good with grammar you can ask them. A beta reader doesn't need to be a professional anything; they mostly just need to be proficient enough in English to spot mistakes and help you correct them. (Besides which, I doubt the people on EQD have better credentials than the average FIMfiction writer when it comes to such things anyway.)
What's really important is that with a beta reader you have a different person's perspective on what is good and what needs fixing - especially the latter. A beta reader that acts as an echo chamber instead of offering honest feedback is pretty much useless, after all.
1018169 eh, i'll see what i can do. but i won't expect any quick takers, because i am not dreadfuly popular.
cute
1644982 wow, huge talker, are we?