It was just a normal day inside Golden Oaks Library. But when Spike finds a hidden book teaching him about the power of Alchemy, a long lost art that is kind of like magic, what will happen? And more alerting for the drake is that he is one of the only few who can use such a power. Will he use is gift to help Equestria? Or will the power go to his head!? Also, can he keep his power hidden from Twilight?
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Featured on 7/14/2014
Chapters (2)
A Harlem you say?
Though Spike could certainly beget a city.
Did you perhaps mean harem?
4693351 Stole my punchline you did.
Alchemy, something that could give unicorn magic a run for its money and can be twice as dangerous as dark magic. And Spike was able to do so without a circle. Not only that but the sparks were red. Hmm, maybe due to his unique birth he took a quick trip to the doors of truth or he is a special kind of homonculus? Either that or he at one point ate a philospher stone, or maybe he was born with one? I can't wait to see how this would change Spike life.
4693351 *rubs back of head* haha... How embarrassing. Here let me change that.
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Understandable, one of the downsides of spell-checkers is that they miss out on context.
You may also want to change "begetting" to "be getting" -- beget means:
1. bring (a child) into existence by the process of reproduction.
2. give rise to; bring about.
I guess this makes Spike the Foal Metal Alchemist
4693551 haha nice!
Thank you, thank you
Well, given the circumstances of Spike's hatching, transmutation without a circle might not be so farfetched (Or possibly homunculi abilities, for that matter)
Let's see where you'll take this. I normally avoid dark fics but this has interesting enough a premise for me to ignore that to a certain point. Also:
Are you sure you didn't mean sneeze?
ponies.
Please fix these and consider getting a proofreader and/or editor. Keeping the quality of your writing on a higher standard makes it a lot easier for us readers to immerse ourselves to the story. I don't want to sound mean, but I see this happening all the time. The first chapter is even more important to get fixed because that is what you use to attract readers to continue.
EDIT: I'll fav for now to see where this goes.
Good read although there are a few errors with word choice. For example, 'seize' should be 'sneeze'. The former, while correctly spelled, means 'to conquer.' Also 'mite' needs to be spelled 'might', 'used' should be 'use', and 'I've' should be 'I'd'.
still looking forward to more. 
You mean this isn't a crossover with 'Fullmetal Alchemist?'
I'm really not hoping for a harem. Just, this crossover might ruin it. Believe me, if I see spike and harem in the same story description, in tracking it without reading it.
This time, it makes me wonder on whether it not I.should read this...
4693708 Thank you so much; PetuTheViewer & NobleValor! I have corrected the mistakes that you two have found
Also for NobleValor. This is a Fullmetal Alchemist crossover. But its just there powers and other things from FMA world put into the story. There won't be any people from FMA for example, in the MLP world 
Very nice!
Aside from a few (and it's not many at all) grammatical errors, my only suggestion would be to finish both FMA and FMA: Brotherhood before deciding which direction you want to take this in.
4693909 Thanks! I will take your advice. Also, I'm halfway done with FMA. I'm on episode 36 right now
So it won't take me that long. Depending on how long FMA Brotherhood is 
so spike is either homunculus or a living philosopher stone?
4694122 Yep.
4693935 Yep. FMA: Brotherhood is actually like 64 episdodes.
And apparently some OVA's that I had no idea existed. I guess I now what I'm doing next.
Bada bum bum ba. Im lovin it!
Please sir, may I have some more?
Interesting premise.
forth to last paragraph
I guess you meant concentrated or contemplated
also good start. FMA is one of my all time fave; all of it, the manga, the series, and brotherhood. I always like to seeing how different worlds mix.
4693618 I am with this! Also, you need an editor badly. Pretty good so far!
you have piqued my interest my dear 'brave', i am incredibly anxious to see where this path leads. Also IF spike is a homunculus, wouldn't it be correct to say that the other 6 are in Equestria? Or perhaps he is a combination of all 7? Or is he not of the 'Children' but of the 'Farther'? Though considering you haven't seen brotherhood yet, the last speculation is most likely not the case.
This needs another editing pass. There are lots of places with typos, misspellings, and incorrect words (like "beings" instead of "begins", or "seamed" instead of "seemed").
So I guess the whole Tirek thing never happened? Since Spike is cleaning out the library that was, y'know, destroyed.
How was Spike able to do alchemy without even having read chapter one of the book? So what, he just instinctively knows how to do it? Without any study or practice first? Even Ed and Al became experts by studying their father's books and training with their teacher, before they lost their bodies and saw Truth.
Verdict: Needs work, but overall not a bad start. This looks very promising. Good job, keep it up!
Spike + FMA. Hmm You have my curiosity? However, i'm afraid your story craftsmanship needs work. Too much Tell and not enough Show. However, I see potential in this story and it's premise. If you want, I can hook you up the a good writing coach that could help you improve. His name is Golden Vision, and I own a lot of my own success to his advice. Reply or PM me if you're interested. I promise you won't regret it.
Also, are you watching the original anima of Brotherhood. Brotherhood follows the manga while the original goes into it's own original story. Witch version you're basing off will become very important should the homunculi appear later on.
You couldn't have at least said "mortalkind"?
4693905 Why does it say you tagged me, and when I click, it took me to this, where you didn't tag me. What's going on, fimfiction?
That is all.
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Magic?
cool cant wait for more!!!
This my friend... has potential, a lot, of potential,
Like and fav for sure!
4737157 Oh, that would be wonderful!
I would be very appreciative if you did. But you would be my first editor ever so I'm not that sure on how we go about doing this... 
Just send me a private message when you read this comment, and we will continue from there. Thanks again friend.
Really cool, I can't wait for the next chapter
Now I wanna watch the show
damm you
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Sorry... Also, you should its an awesome show! I already finished the original, now I'm half way through Brotherhood.
Huh, this has potential since i luv both versions of Full Metal Alchemist
; altho i perfer FMA: Brotherhood then that other one 
. Anyways, i'll hold my judgement n' whatnot til we go further into t rabbit hole 
Spikaloo otp
So it looks like we have either RainbowSpike or ScootsSpike waiting on the wings. Though I'm not sure which one to pick. And I wonder what Twilight's reactions will be to Spike's powers.
okay that was great
but now I'm just here and sad it short.
Good chapter although I felt you could detail it up and personalize it for the characters a bit. (Matter of personal preference on my part)
There were several typos. For example, it should be 'I don't know' and 'increasingly affectionate'. Also, it should be 'interrogated' not 'integrated' (2 completely different words). You added an extra 't' in 'hated' and 'sight' should be spelled thusly (2 different meanings). 'Growling' is missing an 'l.' Few more like it, but tired of typing. Have a nice day and I hoped I helped.
Personally, I think you are making the two pegasisters blush way to easily. That would be more Fluttershy easy.
>>Thebravenorse
Is this still alive
6175368 i... dont think so...
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Aww this looked to be one of the better crossover stories featuring Spike good try though.
will this story see another update soon
More pls
update pls