Scootaloo Spends The Day With Her Mother

Scootaloo and her mother are going to be hanging out with one another.

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Ironfire Skies

Ironfire Skies #1 · Jul 15th, 2014 · · ·

In your author's note can you change Sango-Blazer Skies to Sango_4000. Just to let you know, sorry.

Matt11

Matt11 #2 · Jul 15th, 2014 · · ·

4695292 I'm on my phone it won't let me change it so tommarow I will pramis

Ironfire Skies

Ironfire Skies #3 · Jul 15th, 2014 · · ·

4695315 Okay

The Cardboard Box

The Cardboard Box #4 · Jul 15th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Seems promising, but you put "Scootaloo" down too many times. Just use pronouns like "She" sometimes.
Be wary of making Scoot's mom a Mary-Sue. She seems to be getting dangerously close at this point.
Actually, while I'm at it, want an Editor? I'm not sure if Sango is editing for you or just helping you write, which is why I ask.

Matt11

Matt11 #5 · Jul 15th, 2014 · · ·

4695672 I don't mind getting another editor, do you edit? What did you mean by Mary sue?

The Cardboard Box

The Cardboard Box #6 · Jul 15th, 2014 · · ·

4695687 Yeah, haven't done any noteworthy stuff though.
Wait a minute, someone just accepted my offer to edit for them?
Never mind. How will it work? Private Message? E-Mail? What?

Matt11