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Synthetic Soul


Everything I do is mediocre. Anything good that I do, I do on accident.

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I can't remember anything. I don't know how I ended up here, all I know is, the only pony who can see, hear or touch me is Twilight. But the other ponies tell her she's crazy, that I'm not real. But I know I'm real. Aren't I?

Cover art by MorningMist
Inspired by 'Wake me up' by Drax99

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 26 )

the strange thing i always had about these stories is simple. have your friend stand in another room, and the person only you can see enters as well. wait a few minutes, then let them out and ask the person only your can see what they did.

I would recommend changing the main picture of this story. I've seen it used before and it makes it look like a copy.

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That probably wouldn't work so well in a world where magic exists.

4533804 in a world of magic having someone talking to you that no one else can see can be plasubiel enough to investigate.

"Oh, hello Twilight," said Miss Cheeralee.

It's actually spelled 'Cheerilee'. Just thought I'd point it out.

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That's what I was thinking...

*Cough cough*

No :facehoof: Don't quote the action, explain it. Something like:

With a resounding cough,

Ooh, spooky! *Grabs a bucket of popcorn* Please continue.

If it makes you feel better , I prayed. :)

He had pale, almost white skin.

Almost as if he was a ghost.

Kike stood in front of the stand to address the pony.

*glare* ... Anti-semite AND a reverse racist!

(That's a joke, btw.)

So thanks for that.

5263463 I don't remember that last quote you used, where was it?

5263463 Where's that "kike" thing, it's a typo and I don't remember if I corrected it yet

7158151 I don't remember off-hand, but I'm sure you'll find it with a Ctrl-F on the chapters, if it remains. I'd do it myself if the site played better with phone browsers.

So thanks for that.

i like this story but it needs to be continued

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