Dark doesn't always have to be depressing, morbid shouldn't seem so mundane, and romance without regret just sounds... insane, rather than sweet.
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Trixie awakes in another's bed, the owner tells her that she's already suffered a cruel fate and will suffer another far worse if she doesn't accept the "full" extent of her affection here and now.
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*looks closely at cover picture* Twilight? (Trixie's magic is pink while, clearly, in the picture, hers is purple, which is the color of twilights magic)
Fixed, sorry about that.
Hope you enjoyed the story.~
I'm confused. What just happened between Twilight and Trixie?
4355362 I kinda get it but fuck this is random.
4355362 So Twilight offered Trixie, who had a deeply embedded sexual attraction, and supposedly emotional attraction, a second chance at life on the condition that she serve her to the end of her days, which apparently will never come because Twilight is making Trixie her equal physically, mentally, and in the terms of longevity. They will be immortal beings dedicated to the service to one another, but Twilight has to hold back somewhat due to the fact that her primary responsibility must always be to the ponies of Equestria. That is just my interpretation, feel free to correct me.
4355037 Try giving this story a read over in edit mode some time, and fix any mistakes you see. There are a few and they are pretty obvious, I'm sure youll get them all.
Curiously reminded of Revolutionary Girl Utena. Very trippy.
Interesting read, but too symbolic and flowery and dream-like. Didn't really feel like the characters were themselves. They were very... other. Not bad in itself, but I'm engrossed in Twixie because of the characters, and these didn't feel like them.
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TheGoodDoctor(love that name x3) was somewhat correct, Trixie herself is given Twilight's approximate knowledge, but she herself is not an alicorn. Twilight will offer Trixie her soul as agreed once her mortal life/servitude ends, thus making her an immortal and the princess herself will eventually pass instead alongside her friends. The rest of their interpretation was well perceived.
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Completely understood. Its an acquired taste honestly. That and perhaps my imagery could use a bit of touching up. I'm glad you took the time to read it either way.~
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Actually I had done so three times, I suppose I just need editors.
I imagine there were some lines you misconstrued, but I'm also certain that you wouldn't fabricate something like this. So, thank you for the heads up, I'll certainly give it another edit... or go in search of editors.
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Okay. Thanks for clearing that up. However, Trixie wanted to get revenge on her killer, yet Twilight said she never will. Did Twilight kill Trixie? Was it done intentionally, so Trixie would become her servant/lover?
4355811 I would love to edit for you, perhaps you could edit for me as well. I make alot of grammar mistakes that are just so inbred that I can't get rid of them, perhaps you could be a solution to that? I assure you, the stories I write tend to be amusing, so the job could be quite fun.
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That was to be revealed, rather, acknowledged in the next story provided this one went well. However after I edit this story as suggested I may just write it anyway. All and all I enjoyed writing/typing this one, more than I thought I would.
4355814 Twilight, somehow, was part of the equation that resulted in Trixie's death. Twilight, truthfully or not, takes on herself a great deal of the responsibility, but Trixie feels that either she was a victim of circumstance, or was not fully responsible and that there is another who is more at fault for her tragedy than Twilight.
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Ha~ I'm not sure if that's an air of arrogance or confidence finely tuned. But it goes well with your proposal, sounds interesting enough, I learned my eyes tend to fill-in-the-blanks no matter many times I try to train them proper.
I won't claim to be a remedy but I'll give you my best regardless, I'll let you decide if an when you're cured.
4355857 Alright, does Following a person inform me of when they add new stories or chapters? If so, I'll follow you so that I can get a notification of when you add a new chapter, then I will read and inform you of any errors.
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I wouldn't know, I imagine it does, regardless you have my attention whether you choose to follow me now or not.~
4355898 Something you shouldn't bother proof reading, I just published "Celestia's Blind Commentaries of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic". There is way to much shit in there, I don't want you to get injured trying to proof read it. I was getting a head ache while typing it, and the part I published was only half of the first chapter, I'm putting it out as a test to see how people react to it.
4356010 Scratch that, apparently it counts as plagerism. I'll message you a copy of it incase you want to read it.
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awww, I actually liked thegooddoctor's idea about them both being immortal in servitude to each other. Either way, liked the story, looking forward to the sequel if there is one.
Wut?
4357315 I'm afraid I need to echo this statement. The story was well crafted but... confusing. It felt rather like I was stepping into the plot of a more 'artistic' anime, which, if that was what you were going for, works, but at the same time it left the general feeling of things unsolved. I can understand a story trying to tell through hints and implications, but from the standpoint of a reader, I've never liked a story that never actually explains things.
Honestly without going through the comments to see how it's interpreted and what has gotten the author's approval, I probably wouldn't have connected most of the dots.
Good story, well done, overly florid in segments, and perhaps a bit confusing (The Rules require her to walk on two legs? To hold a weapon? Did Sparkle actually give up her smile? What's with the flowers? The threat of the thorns?) I hope to come back after the edits and feel that it deserves a thumbs up.
Huh.
This was quite different and I rather enjoyed it.
Unique portrayal of the princesses. My only question is where Cadences rules.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Well I never took Cadence for the godly sort, she is truly, merely a princess in my eyes. There's nothing wrong with that, but you've given me more incentive for the next story. She's the epitome of romance itself after all.~
I'm glad you enjoyed it reading though, and that you took the time to comment at all.
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Well that was my intention, the holes and gaps between and things only /insinuated/ for now. I enjoyed writing the fable enough that I was /certain/ there would be a second story, so I left things as they were.
Its a shame you don't feel it deserves a thumbs up, but I'm glad you took the time to read and /express/ what you felt. And all that wasn't explained will be entertained in the next story, you have my word.~
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I'm holding you to that.
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Lookit me, bein' all demandin' and stuff. Pfft. Like my stories are any better. 
)
cool story bro...
thumbs up
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I found this by complete accident.
And I'm glad I did.
Forgot to do this earlier:
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~Skeeter The Lurker
i didn't really like this, it felt wrong to me.
kinda bitter.
i read this twice and still left with that taste.
..... just my opinion
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Ha~ Thank you, you're too kind.
4360327
Double tag of my comment?
Interesting...
Anyway, you're quite welcome, man.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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That's fine, I just enjoy emotion as a whole and hearing the critiques of others. Good or bad as long as you /feel/ something I'm glad you shared your experience.
I wonder what exactly left that impression upon, but, I hope you'll have a better experience with my future fables.
So... Creepy... Why do I like it?
Thumb and added to my recommendation group.
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Why of course, that was the intention from the start actually.
Being why it ended at a new beginning.~ I enjoyed writing this story enough that I knew I'd write a sequel after I was done.
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You may just be a romantic at heart, who knows?
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That was the plan, so yes, I shall.~
When I read Trixie's lines, I can't help but think of this guy...
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Yes, my Lord...
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Well yes, that's generally where that line came from, I'm glad someone noticed.
The butler came from the illustration itself,amazing how the two tie together,and the rest however was just romanticized notions of my own.
This was a very fascinating read, it's different in a very exceptional way. . . I like it
UPVOTE!
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Thank you very much, different was precisely my intention here, I'm glad you enjoyed it.~
The next story was actually posted not long ago, you're welcome to give it a chance if you wish.
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Actually I just finished reading it, you should see my comment in it by now. And I think you'll like what I have to say.
I love the Black Butler references. Trixie's fast becoming Twilight's Sebastian.
I love the twixie ships. it is however sad that Trixie will be cursed with immortality, but to rule without twilight by her side. that is just so sad.