This story is a sequel to Outlaw Mares 2: For a Few Ponies More
After the demise of King Sombra, the royal sisters seized his personal writings for study and eventually to seal them away. However, half of his journal is stolen by Golden Jubilee, a sorceress from the secretive organization called the Horizon Walkers. Team Trixie is hired to recover this journal before the Walkers can learn of the dark knowledge the late king had written within them.
As the investigation brings Trixie close to the Walkers, she uncovers how Golden knew of the hidden half of the journal and just what reason the Walkers want the second half. Trixie must confront a past fear as the trail leads her to an old artifact she is uncomfortably familiar with - The Alicorn Amulet.
I'd buy three. And dammit, like I don't have enough to read!
Great opening. Action-packed and having me looking forward to more!
Yay! The wait is over
Looks like it's off to an action filled start, too.
Sweet, the wait is finally over! But...
Do you really need two flamethrowers? Funny, I don't remember you being such a pyromaniac when I used to live with you.
I love how nothing goes as planned for Team Trixie, and how plan B is to scream and start smashing things. It's as if the more skilled they become, the more every plan goes wrong
The last scene in the museum and falling into the forest was maybe a bit hard to follow. Action scenes often are tricky, but I think this was largely due to a lot of 'the azure pony', 'the green-maned pony', 'the black assailant', and such. I try hard to avoid any such descriptors myself, as they are often unnecessary at best or a distraction at worst.
For known ponies, using their name or 'he/she' usually works best. I also try to keep each character's actions confined to its own paragraph as well, which means that if I use 'Trixie' once in a paragraph, then for the rest of that paragraph I can usually make do with just 'she'.
Just some thoughts for tonight. Looking forward to next chapter.
This was the only place I noticed Luna using the archaic 'thou', so it probably should be 'you' to be consistent. I also think the proper archaic version would be "What thou shouldst focus on ..." but that sounds like it could be articulated better somehow
Shore mare? Or was it meant to be Show mare?
Something seems to be missing from this sentence, but I'm not sure what.
Huh... not sure how I missed this update, but I managed to miss it until now. Well, in any case, I'm here now, and that's all that really matters, now, isn't it?
All in all, this was another fun little stomp through Equestria, but you finally took Team Trixie out of their usual "comfort zone"; the skies!
You've done a fine job once again.
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Thanks for all the feedback!
I've gone back finally and made edits. I decided the best way to fix the fight in freefall was to reveal the two pegasi names early so I can make the read much easier. Should be good now.
Y'know, sooner or later we're going to want to see Trixie permanently end Debon in some way because honestly by this point it's getting hard to imagine how she'll convince herself not to do so if she gets the chance. He really is that detestable a character. Golden on the other hand I imagine will end up offing herself, she seems the type to go and grab what was not meant to be grabbed.
I gotta say this series of fics really turned me on to the idea of wild west Trixie - she (and you i suppose, but we all know who is the great and powerful star here) works so well with it!
Did Golden just suck that pony's brains out, make it into coffee and drink it?
There are some rather dark undertones in some of the scenes.
Anyway, did you ever submit these stories to EqD? I think I recall you mentioning that you planned on it, back when you were writing the first one.
"But it only had a familiar name" sounds like a contradiction.
Having some random pony in the crowd shout out the demand, and then everypony goes "Yeah!" would be much better. Show it, don't tell.
Oh my
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Yeah, I had a bit too much fun writing the dark tones for Golden. She's like... insane in the most pleasant way.
As for submitting to EQD, I haven't yet as I'm still working out edits and another session of proofread for the first story before I give it a shot. I want to put my best hoof forward for it.
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Thank you, I'm glad you like the series!
As for the villains, well I guess I didn't do a bad job writing them if the readers really get the desire to see them get their just desserts!
Embarrassing tidbit: I had actually forgotten that you were still working on this story, Deeg.
Glad to see some more progress, though! And, you just named a set of villainous pegasi after the Jet Decepticons, didn't you?
Glad to see the story is still moving, even if it takes a while. Heavens know I'm taking my sweet time writing my stories too, so I know how it is.
Their hooves, I hope :)
Uhh, Trixie, is now really the time... ?
Still a better
lovestory than Twilight (not Sparkle).3944543
"Minuit spun back up to her hoover" sounds like an awesome trick.
My God, this one had all the references!
Before that, however, I noticed a bit of a typo/name replacement:
Unless I'm mistaken, it's Cheryl that's making said argument. Was that supposed to be Zeeps, instead?
Now, references!
The Last Starfighter, check!
The Lost City of Atlantis, check!
Nostalgia Critic's review of The Adventures of Sonic the Hedgehog, check!
Serenity, check!
I suspected Sombra's secret wouldn't be quite what everypony expected, but I definitely didn't see Luna coming. Nice twists.
Man, doing these comments on a phone is awkward.
Oh, dammit. How'd I let this slip through my proverbial fingers?!
Anyway... wow. Good action, like adcoon said it was a might hard to follow. I just about lost it at the names Thundercracker and Skywarp.
And Luna... you'd BETTER make sure they get good financial compensation for this. 
Okay... maybe it's my Boast Busters prejudice shining through, but I am kinda hoping Applejack gets a 'reason you suck' speech followed by being kicked in the head. Applejack, buck you. Just... buck you.
That opening... holy crap!
Was Historia turned into a clockwork pony/golem, too? 
Great action. And again, screw you, Applejack. 
Out of the frying pan, into the fire...
Oh, damn. Am I following you? If not I will be in about a minute. Anyway, as Limedog pointed out...
Last Starfighter reference for the win. :D
Keep it up. Although this story does have more of a bodycount thus far than the others, it's still enjoyable.
3589229 I disagree on your descriptor analogy--at least the best/worst scenario. I've seen it used very well, but is best to use it sparingly. Like any synonym, if over used it's just like saying the character's name time and again.
3611777 You and me both, I just discovered this sequel today!
3699134 Love your latest work and will continue to look forward to it.
GREAT chapter. Thought Sombra would make itback , but more so from Debon's artifact taking possession of him (he turned into black smoke same as the tyrant). Luna was there all along, even now realize the hint of foreshadowing with her asking Trixie about the new mare.
Gonna read the next chapter before heading to bed; it's too good to put down!
Loving it and need More!
...though part of me thinks the CMC will pop up at some point. Just feel like they snuck aboard the airship somehow....
Great to see this one back! Ah, Debon... no sorrow for him. Glad he's dead.
canons
Cannons shoot things. Canons are those silly things in your head.
bounced the changing off
Typos typos everywhere. Changeling. But maybe she was changing.
The princes threw
Princess
Eeeee, plotty bits.
Now for the big reveal. Trixie's Father Is.....
Hmmmmm... Trixie's father turns out to be a property lawyer?...this explains, absolutely nothing...
Can't wait to see where it goes.
Daring escapes and unexpected reveals, oh my! I didn't see that coming.
I have to wonder why they were concerned about making noise after they had just been kicking the door loudly. No one seemed concerned about that.
Doesn't the saying usually go the other way around? "Any port in a storm"?
Man, that was some great action and one hell of a shocking reveal!
I... hope this gets updated soon.
If I recall Victor is a male so you would need to say.
“More than ever,” he replied.
But what happened to Sombra's horn?
Great to see this back. :D As for Sombra, Luna, if you kill him it's murder, plain and simple. He's not the original Sombra.
I've not read ahead, but if Trixie doesn't get her hooves on the flammenwerfer I will be disappointed.
Just so the author knows, people are still reading this. ;)
But still no Trixie-mounted flamethrower. :(
Hi there! id like to know if you still plan on continuing this
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I have the last chapter about 95% written out. Just need a bit of a push (or maybe a kick?) to get it posted on here to conclude the grand adventure.
is there going to be a fourth one ?
And after a long hiatus, this story got an update - which, I find to my shock, is the conclusion!
Perhaps I have had my hopes too high up...
Anyways, welcome back to FiMFic writing, and I await your next installment!
Glad to see this come to a conclusion, but am left wondering what will happen next with our motley group of mares? Hope there's yet another sequel, and to see what mischief Trixie can get herself into...
Can't wait for the fourth one. Also I wonder if blowing up that amulet didn't had side effects for Trixie.
I believe the Manehattan part and the epilogue should go into a separate chapter; it cheapens the emotional impact of what Trixie does a great deal to have those parts so closely connected.
As for the story: Apart from the spelling problems, I think it is great. And if you ever get around to writing that teased fourth part, I propose it be called Once Upon A Time In Equestria, for obvious reasons.
Keep narrating,
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Has it really been six months since I last kept up with any stories here? Damn.
And why doesn't any of my stories have a TV Tropes page? That's so unfair
Anyway, I'm glad to see you finished your story. Every finished story is an accomplishment. The jump from "Oh no, Trixie just blew herself up!" to "Trixie is fine, let's move on" was a bit too sudden, in my opinion. That's probably the biggest complaint I have. It's been so long that I can barely remember what happened in the previous chapters, though.
So what's your plan for the future?
Somehow, I have a hard time imagining Sombra wearing glasses, even if all the purple smoke does give him near-sightedness.
Since Shining Armor recognises Golden Jubilee, I assume that means Luna made certain to declare her a pony non grata in Equestria and she's now in hiding. By the sounds of it, she may also be suffering from wounded pride after having been defeated by Trixie before.
Also, Golden Jubilee screwed up. She caused damage to books, and that means Twilight Sparkle is now going to be coming out hard at her.
I wonder what Trixie did in a past life to piss off Lady Luck to the point Lady Luck spites her with the maid opening the curtains at the same time Trixie opens the window, and for Zeeps to completely goof and not know about Twilight Sparkle having wings now...and then she ends up in Ponyville at the end of the chapter
Maybe Trixie and Luna are going to have to team up and go commit some good old-fashioned deicide against a goddess of luck.
I'm mildly baffled about why Trixie shot magical fireworks at Golden Jubilee's butt and burned off her tail, since rereading it, it seems like Trixie had a grip on Golden's tail and could have dragged her down with Trixie. Well, in any event she lucked out in the process by discovering Golden's new airship.
The real question is if Trixie is gonna have to fight Golden Jubilee followed by Debon one after another in their last battle, or if she'll get breathers in between the two.
Luna's gonna have to make a massive pay-out to Trixie after this story's over. Like, at least Team Trixie's own stained-glass window massive.
Well, it sounds like Golden Jubilee has split off from Debon, no doubt over a difference of opinion. I wouldn't be surprised to find out she was the one who initiated the attack on the changelings. Good (or bad?) to see that she's finally beginning to realise Trixie simply won't die and orders her soldiers to find Trixie or her body itself.
After this latest fight in Ponyville, I'm sure Trixie will be even less welcome for a little while, especially if Luna has to go into full-fledged denial of the mission she gave Trixie for a while due to politics. It's almost a shame Twilight wasn't in town, if only because she's never really struck me as much of a fighter: I would think she'd throw out a few powerful spells, then exhaust herself quickly.
I still expect both Golden Jubilee and Debon to be dead by the end of this series, though, even with the schism between the two.
At this point, Trixie should just quit showbusiness, because just about everypony would call bulls
on her if she were to tell stories from her own life, unembellished. They simply wouldn't believe that her luck could be that bad, for that matter: after all, falling down in the middle of changeling territory, without Zeeps?
Sure, having Zeeps there may have gotten her killed, but at least she would've been able to communicate with the other changelings, I guess.
Trixie, right about now would be a good time to reveal you snatched something off of Debon's ship in the five seconds of chaos you were gone for.
Man, so Luna's been with the crew for the last day or so? So that's what Minuit's rant about her art being better than her sister's only to be ignored because her sister was prettier was all about, along with the getting stabbed part. I wonder how many times Luna must have repressed a face-hoof upon seeing Trixie and co.'s antics
. She's only having it confirmed that Trixie's luck is like a black hole, sucking in all the good luck around her.
Well, let's see if they can at least eliminate Golden Jubilee here before King Sombra finally gains complete sapience. Looks like her plans have finally crumbled underneath her.
I see Trixie still has a Twilight Sparkle complex
. Good to see she can at least still laugh at Golden Jubilee's scorched butt.
Well, looks like Debon's tale finally comes to an end here. Golden Jubilee had better worry though, because this is the genre where in a big-bad duumvirate, the second villain dies shortly after the first.
The changelings get their moment to be the big damn heroes by saving most of Trixie's crew and capturing part of Golden Jubilee's remaining forces. I don't know who the false King Sombra is, but I'm certain he'll probably be important somehow in the next few chapters, even beyond creating the arrows to indicate which direction they're being pulled in.
Zeeps finally gets her home back
Only Trixie could find out who her father is in the middle of a big escape scene running away from a mad magic-wielding Earth pony while the building is also on fire. Only Trixie
Golden's competent subordinates have been whittled down even further, either to death or to betrayal. Where is the Amulet now? I believe it's been buried underneath the fort, but knowing Trixie's bad luck Golden has it. Since Luna didn't succeed in stealing Trixie's kill against Golden, of course Golden is going to come back for one last hurrah.
Still, fun chapter, and the changeling hive definitely got themselves some brownie points by coming in to rescue Trixie and Princess Luna. After this adventure is over, Princess Luna is going to banish Trixie, because bluehorse seems to bring bad luck and property destruction everywhere she goes!
Hey, maybe that's why Trixie's dad is a property lawyer. She can go anywhere and inadvertently blow up buildings, and her father either owned the buildings already with lots of property insurance that'll pay out, or he'll swoop in and buy the devalued land after
Trixie needs a flamethrower.
No, two flamethrowers. That's what might finally take Golden Jubilee down for once and for all.
Not-Sombra gives some good points given real-Sombra already was basically killed, but Luna seems determined to see him dead regardless.
Well...that was mildly disappointing for an epilogue. Never did get to see much of how much information is known to the general population about Trixie's heroics and their reactions, especially Celestia and Twilight Sparkle's. Nor do we see anything about the changeling hive integrating into Equestria. Don't know if Sombra is going to be a villain or not, and how he got away from Luna isn't detailed either.
At least Trixie finally got her kill on Golden Jubilee.