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4104590 Caffeine plz!
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4104601 I should have been more specific…
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4106470 I might do that later, although for now, all the gore I'm going to write is done. As for the rape fic, NOT HAPPENING. Any clopping here will be purely consensual.
300 pounds thats 21 to 22 stones this guys fat
Damn you're fat, someone needs to go on a diet
So, Steve finally talks to his caretaker. Is he 300 lbs. muscle or fat? Also, the names that he misheard,
I wonder how the other will react to hearing he calling them by their misheard names.
I have to say I have found some mistakes in this story:
I think it should be the other way around.
'pulled out of'
Either 'should be at least' or 'should at least be'.
'should be three or more miles'
Anyway, I will try to catch up when I can.
Sorry but you can't say A pegasus there's no term its just Pegasus because in Greek mythology pegasus was a horse ridden by someone to defeat great beasts like the chimaera
4968853 Please forgive my idiodicy, but I'm not sure I follow.
So the main character is a obese 40+ year old dude... Fantastic.
5005119 40? Uh, no, he's not forty. Steve states his age in another chapter. You just gotta keep on reading.
5006781 I could of sworn that I the first chapter it says that he was on his way to his 25th year high school reunion, making him 43. Well, oops!
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If he was born in 1978, and graduated in 1997, then wouldn't he close to 30?My apologies, my brain has decided to go on holiday. (Math was never my forté.) So, yeah, issue is corrected, you may now commence with your suspension of disbelief.My last comment? About the idiot ball which you said this chapter would explain away? Yeah, this chapter's explanation only made it worse. In fact given that Twilight acted like they believed him to be a quadruped the arachnid thing makes it all even dumber. If they think him an arachnid they should be saying;
Which... is really stupid. "We can only hope this pony can walk on one and a half legs." See? Sounds stupid right? Your anti-idiot ball explanation increased the idiot ball factor.
5007957 Nope, he is using time travel.
So he graduated at age nineteen.
19+25=44
See, he has travel forward through time so he can go to his twenty five year reunion in his early thirties and make his old classmates jealous of how little he aged.
5019688 I made some changes, but I don't know if I avoided the "idiot ball." Care to have a say?
Seems good so far, though its wierd and not really believable he miss heard every single name in that manner, some aren't even close lol. Everftweek from ever free? Maybe evertree.
Wait, he was getting their names wrong on accident? I thought he was trying to be funny
5883888 I'd like to think he wasn't really paying much attention to proper names…
I think I would be worth the crash to be nursed to health by flutters. I didn't realize until he said that he was deliberately being quiet, not sure why.
i love how he's second guessing everything around him and trying to make sense of it all. Believable.
I make mention of this because i mostly read HiE fics and everytime the human protagonist just goes 'color pastel ponies? Yeah i'm not surprised' and goes on to classify everything around him, easily wrapping his head on a lot of things and take them in a stride it's annoying.
I mostly read HiE fics and small moments like this is what makes or breaks a story for me. Glad this story has it going so far.
Finally someone to share my hate of the Daystar. Stupid daystar being all bright and shit
7001519 down with the Daystar, long live the night!
Fuck, it's gonna be one of these.
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Tony Mcbrony from Youtube but without being a brony.
Well, the water is the best water he's ever drank. Can't imagine his reaction to eating an apple from Sweet Apple Acres.
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I love those names
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