The girls thought that they'd seen that last of magic when Twilight went home, but little did they know they were wrong.
Contains: very mild FlashLight; will also have mile PinkieShy, RariJack, ScootaDash, SweetieBloom. You've been warned.
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so the real human sunset shimmer is Dead ? I don't like that at all You could have at least keep her in a Coma in a hospital. Could you Try updating it to keeping her alive but still in a coma Please ?
Good story so far. What i am truly interesting is magic in human world
. And of course if there will be some enemies
. What i am suggest is you make longer chapters or update more often. But for now you deserve a 
i wonder what the pony turn human sunset shimmer feel?
Sigh I still don't like it on how the real Human sunset was killed off instead of being in a coma. But ill accept it since I know you won't rewrite it to keep her alive with a coma.
I'd like to see where you're going with this story, looks promising enough. Tracking.
it sad it make me cry
sunset killed sunset
I'm for asking but I'm not seeing any magic of friendship or random magical happenings of any signs of so far. I just think MABYE we can get to the plot.
I think twilight Should tell him Early than later.
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I'm getting there, I just have to set up for it
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That was fast but it was needed quick and painless.
This seems to be too fast paced. This would be better if it was longer, and split into two chapters.
I must agree whole chapter felt little rusch
. And i truly hope there will be more original enemy then chrysalis and her swarm
could you re-write chapter 7 to be less rushed.
mighty morphin elements of harmony.
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I welcome any suggestions on how to do that, this is how it came out in my head unfortunately
3966557 well slow it down maybe create some build up or better yet use another antagonist.
So they "wall" between the two worlds are breaking down? Does this means more dangerous creatures will come from the pony's world? Let face it the pony world can be a deadly place. Chickens that can change you to stone.
That's it?
Wow, that's short.
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I got a couple short chapters that I'll be posting either later today or tomorrow, just giving them the final look over
How anticlimactic.
Still... thank you for using proper grammar. <3
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Have you written these in advance? You're bringing new chapters out rather quickly.
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I have pretty much the whole story written out before I start posting, I just kind of go over them before posting
Hmm I only hope next vilian will be better and more original. And maybe more evil
. Story so far good
hey there be sequl of equestria girls rainbow rock
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I know, hence the AU tag
"Must've". "Must of" is wrong
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Thank you
Okay maybe Fluttershy and Pinkie shipping i pass but RD and Scootallo seriosly man ?! That kind of creepy
. Okay I end of your story and dislike it. This was very bad move bro.
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What's wrong with RD and Scootaloo being together? I expressly mentioned that their relationship was difficult cause of the 3 year difference between the two.
[btw, my wife's 7 year's older than i am, so don't tell me you can't fall of someone 3 years older than you]
I think you got your Spanish wrong. Yes in Spanish is Si.
3997482 My parents have a twenty or thirty year gap between them.
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wow! good for them!
So begin with scootaloo age. No where was mentoined actual age but her age is probably betwen 7- 12 years. And Rianbow Dash age is around 15 - 20. There is no problem witch age gap if they were both adults. But Scotaloo is only a kid. So it rather disturbing. And in majority countries Rainbow Dash can go for something like that in the jail. And Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie ? That is probably worst couple what you can imegine. 2 weeks ago Pinkie Pie make Flutershy cry. There is no way that two can be together.
4000477 Yes my parets have around 10 years gap. But my father didnt start dating my mother when she was 10 years old.
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Scootaloo's 14, so that's a little better, least she's not like my cousin that got knocked up @ 12
kissy kissy :3 keep it up this amuses me
weeeeeeeeeeell that escalated quickley
You should make Applejack sound a bit more southern.
I'm reading it on a Wednesday so it sort of takes away from you posting it on a Monday but I still think it is funny.
Yay! Go Flalight? Flashlight? TwiFlash? Lets go with flashlight so then I don't get annoyed at the stupid red lines hovering below all of my words. So. Yay! Go FlashLight!
There was a person complaining about there not being enough magic. THERE IS MAGIC HERE! I'm glad.
CIDER!!!!! YAY
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Sorry, I had thought I had put that in the A/N, I changed how the story goes slightly so that the girls have another year is school, and decided that the wedding should wait until they finish school.
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No problem
Twilight is taking this rather well.
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The whole ting with Spike made her believe them, lol
Make another one you can call it eqg 3 summer days
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I'm working on it, got another project going first