One day while Princess Twilight is shelving a new delivery of books in her library she comes apon a book written by a Doctor Apple. Curious if this Doctor Apple is related to her friend Twilight goes and talks to Applejack, what she discovers changes may change she views everything
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Good idea there! Farmers (whoa actually farm and don't just sit on land to get corn subsidies) are actually pretty bright people. Heck, one of my neighbors manages to get watermelons to grow outside in freaking ALASKA. He just kept breeding them till they worked how he wanted. Just so happens their intellect is usually directed towards well plants. Duh.
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I'd heard stories like that before, and that is in part what inspired this. Thanks for the comment!
Congrats on the fic, 12 - 0. That's a good accomplishment.
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Hope it maintains
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ain't it the truth?
5553488 Yeah! To be fair it took him 20 years, and they are not very good melons... but none the less...
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But they're Alaskan melons, that should bring people running
5554108 It dose! The dude actually makes a small fortune every year, he has 6 acres in Palmer which are all farmland and green houses. You can get fresh jalapenos from him in the middle of winter. It's awesome!
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see! that's all that matters
Hmmmmm... While an interesting plot, the characterization and execution is dry, boring, and only true in the most general of terms. When you had Big Mac speak, I couldn't read the rest. I just skimmed it. You broke my suspension of disbelief.
It was stretching when you had Applejack wave Twilight away from a simple question: Who is Dr. Apple? Applejack had no reason to keep a simple answer with such a complicated excuse. Even if Twilight wanted to know more, then she could have invited Twi to dinner to elaborate.
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First off I'd like to thank you for your frank and honest comment.
I could've used someone like you during the process of writing this fic.
To be honest I'm not supremely happy with this fic, but I honestly couldn't get the idea out of my head.
The first draft of this had Applejack telling Big Mac's story, but that to me actually felt worse.
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That does sound worse in sense that readers may think that Applejack is lying to Twilight about something and that also breaks characterization.
In fact, that Big Mac got a doctorate is fairly implausible to me unless it was an honorary one. The path of a doctorate is filled with a lot of speaking(but not a lot of doing) and Big Mac has been so much characterized by not speaking; mostly actions. This can suggest trauma, but what could be more painful or beyond his scope of comprehension besides growing up halfway with no parents? That would suggest he is on par with Pinkie Pie in terms of mental stability, but because he is featured less, usually just keeps his mouth shut as a personal barrier.
Great that you were able to create the story even if it makes little sense. I had to thumbs down despite the great idea because that was really the only thing that hooked me and I had to figure out why a lot of other readers just ignored characterization over idea: Because it hooked them and there were ponies.
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I honestly know nothing about doctorates, if you want me to be honest. I had no clue what they entailed, my thought was they were simply the highest degree of education,and when could get one simply by learning and doing a significant amount of work. Given what you've told me it seems like Big Mac's doctorate would probably be honorary.
Unlike some people I am not offended by a thumbs down, if fact I welcome them as long as they come with criticism on why. You've taken the time to explain to me exactly what is wrong with my story, and after reading my own story again I can't help but agree. So thank you so much for pointing out the flaws. I honestly doubt I'm a good enough writer to go back and fix this story at his time, but I will try and keep what you said in mind for any future projects.
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To be honest myself, I have not personally experienced the path of the doctorate myself, just what I have learned and heard from others over the course of my time on Earth.
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The only person I know who has a doctorate is my wife's uncle who is an English professor.
The idea for Big Mac came partially from watching too much "Big Bang Theory" where the character Doctor Sheldon Cooper has a fear of public speaking but still has a doctorate in physics
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Different doctorates probably require a lot of different things depending on the field of study. This discussion has shifted my view of Big Mac getting one from one spectrum of implausibility to another that is closer to plausible despite characterization.
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Well, at least I've done something worth while
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This conversation certainly has been a pleasure. Usually when I give this type of constructive criticism, authors and other readers alike either resort to name-calling or flat out do not respond. I prefer the name-calling because at least it gives me the idea that it was actually read.
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I try my best to respond to every comment, good and bad. At least your was constructive, I've had comments on previous sites that were flame, pure and simple. I've also enjoyed this conversation.
Way to go Big Mac. I love these 'more than meets the eye' stories around the guy.
Dr. Macintosh 'Big Mac' Apple, not a bad addition to the Apple clan.
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Thank you! Glad you liked it!