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Trying to keep something a secret from somepony is hard, especially if that somepony is your marefriend.

One of my (slightly too long) Flarity stories for the Flarity Group Collab; and we would love if more people participated.

Enjoy.

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We need more vampony stories. This was wonderful. :rainbowkiss:

Nice story, but I think Rarity resolves this a bit too fast. Yes, the story is less then 2k words, but I feel there should have been a bit more to it than "I don't care darling, I love you anyway. Now get me some iron supplement."

I loved it, well done!

Yeah, I've let a few prompts get away from me too. Resulted in my most popular story, and another one which people generally like.

But as far as this goes... well, I have to agree with 3925857 in that it did feel a bit abrupt. Not that it is a bad idea, but I think it could have done with a little more expansion.

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Get out of here Dash! you're not even in this story!

love it. and i'd love to join the collab! however I'm not that great, and I have writer's block which means no stories from me. hate when that happens

I wasn't sure about "Fluttershy as a vampire" stories, but this one was beautiful! :twilightsmile:

Who the heck is Harry?

3927181 Fluttershy's bear friend.

I keep seeing Rarity reenacting Nicolas Cage's scene from Vampires Kiss, [youtube=Lct6x-XqWrw] :raritycry: "I'm a vampony!"

Rarity the ham actor... Well she is a drama queen, so she overacts all the time.

“And why is the great and powerful Flutterbat scared?”

:trixieshiftright:: HEY!! Only Trixie gets to call herself 'Great and Powerful'! Get your own title.

Rarity gently set her back down on the bed and frowned at her.

This line is so incredibly, unbelievably cute that it makes this whole fic worth reading.

Anyway, it's cute, but it all goes a bit too fast, which is almost inevitable with these kinds of little prompt games. I would be very interested in reading an expansion of this story, one that explores this idea more thoroughly.

That story was as sweet as Rarity's blood probably was. :heart:

Amazing story! :pinkiehappy: :raritystarry: :yay:

I usually gag at these stories. I squeed, instead. :rainbowkiss:

That was a good story.

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