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After the gala, things return to normal quickly. Yet it seems like there are some things that need to be talked out.
At least, Discord feels that he should.
Short little thing that came to me after the 'Make New Friends But Keep Discord' episode.
Enjoy.
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I really like the narration in this piece. There were times I felt de Lancie was reading it himself.
5998883 You too, huh? Might be because the episode is fresh in my mind, but... yeah, this felt like a very natural follow-up. Good work.
5998959 I don't think it was just the ep being fresh. It's in the mannerisms, I think.
I love it. Discord was spot on, and Fluttershy taught a friendship lesson!
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Oh, finally, a story about this episode that won't go for the unfunny "Tree Hugger = drugs lol" low-hanging fruit—
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Hey, Discord's words. Not mine.
This was a wonderfully warm, heartfelt story that put a smile on my face...
Until the ninth paragraph from the bottom. Total unexpected heart punch.
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I aim to please/kill, whichever you think I was trying to do.
Commence read.
Very sweet.
5999178 I actually had something even more inappropriate as his name for her at first, but in the end I decided I wanted the story to be 'everyone' rated.
5999509
Sure, 'cause that makes it better.
Anyway, now that I have a free lunch hour:
Characters are good, readability is fine, prose flows nice and snappy. You're an old hand at this by now, so not much for me to say on those front.
The first half of this really feels like retreading the episode again, and while I'm sure 'Shy isn't above putting Discordin the doghouse, I honestly thought this issue had wrapped up well enough in the episode proper for Flutters not to hold an all-night grudge.
I would have loved it if this had taken place the same night as the Gala, when the festivities are winding down, before they have a chance to go home and think about things. The two take a moment to themselves in the royal garden ("I understand, Discord. I had a problem with feeling ignored by my friends too, once. I didn't take it well."), and the rest is history.
"History", of course, being the second half of this sucker, which is all kinds of fantastic. There's some really good bonding here, with the end convo serving as an even stronger ending than the actual episode, IMO, and we get further mending afterwards. What's here perfectly follows the origin point which inspired it.
So, yeah, retreading aside, a sweet denouement to an already fantastic ep.
5999674 I wasn't saying that it was better... just that 'let's comment on that she might be a stoner, lol!' wasn't my first idea.
I'm glad you were able to enjoy the story despite it.
Even more enjoyable the second time! Especially now that I am not halfway to passed out from work.
They glanced at eachother while in an episode.
Fandom explodes.
Expect another 100 spinoffs of this story cause >FimFictionPolitics
6001300 Did you even watch the episode, or are you just stupid?
6001489 No, I just work for FedEx.
6001490
Ah, professional shipper.
6001497 FedEx Priority.
6001498 So you ship faster than anybody else. Guaranteed.
6001502 Usually.
Hmmm...starts out like a real continuation of the episode...then feels more fan-ficcy a bit after the middle, I guess?
Nice. This is the first fic that has shown me the typical dramatics that characterizes fanfic work right after showing me something that is like the show. A good, "compare and contrast" piece!
Nice one! I like this bit a lot:
He chuckled and cleared his throat before doing a passable imitation of Twilight Sparkle’s voice, which in his case meant making her sound more nasal and as annoying as he could. “Dear Princess Fluttershy, today I learned that you aren’t supposed to bring a monstrous blob from beyond the veil of space and time to a black tie event. Your chaotic student and friend, Discord.” He watched Fluttershy stifle a giggle and smiled. If he could make her laugh, perhaps he wouldn’t have to leave at all.
Discord feels somewhat out of character here, but the story was sweet and enjoyable~
Aww I liked this story.
This was a nice little story. I can actually see this happening. Have a like and a fav.
Discord, "Now Celly, about getting the other five to Ascend."
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Agreed.
6002756 i.imgur.com/TkVcM.png Make sure you don't age? Easy as chocolate rain!
Wow, another great work!
Great work on this story!
One thing, though:
It should be spat out a hairball, since this story is in past tense.
:3
This is a Beautiful piece of art, I can see this sword of happening after the episode Keep being creative!
friendzoned
How heart warming. It also got to me when Fluttershy told him that she wouldn't be there forever in terms of being his friend.
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The space here is misplaced:
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No matter how many times you look something over... Mistakes have been fixed, thanks.
I believe the term for this is AWESOME.
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That was a nice little story to read. Nice to see that Fluttershy and Discord have talked with each other to sort the problems out.
can this be canon please? in fact, to go with this idea, if i ever conquer the world in complete domination, i shall use the world's tax paying dollars to buy out Hasbro and make the great and powerful Karrakaz head writer of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic! yeah, that sounds like a terrible evil plan, i guess i can just say lottery winnings, but i have a feeling Hasbro is expensive to buy out from under them xD
this fanfic should be canon though, and compared to the writing on MLP, i think Karrakaz could outdo any writer, yes, even Meghan McCarthy and Dave Polski! i just don't think they take their writing seriously enough sometimes, they have been lacking a good balance between their cohesive plots/morals/and comedic elements.
~hugs Karrakaz~
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But yeah, Discord and Flutters are different than the whole "Looks at each other shipping happens," comment you made. After all all of S4 in the credit opening, Discord is in Fluttershy's window. I think he's in her window in S5 as well. Then you have the episode as a whole (in which Discord gets jealous of another pony getting close to Flutters, and does several cliche'd acts. Before trying to banish Treehugger into an alternate reality (which should have been done anyway to save the world from that horrible pony).
Still, FedEx worker. Pretty cool gig.
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I ride with princesses and I ride princesses all the while it's one big fucking ship.
I RUN FEDEX.
6321849
Pfft!
There can be only one!
[Fimfic won't load the picture. Still that is the best proof that Cadance owns all shipping ^_^.]
That was a good story.