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huh interesting.
you have my attention
3824468 Thank you, TBP, that means a lot to me
You have tickled my fancy...
Proceed
this is pretty good , i like to see more
Sorry for my bad english, english is not my native lenguage XD
3825120 it's not Christian (me), is a human
The concept is a cool idea, but it isn't really played out right. The beginning feels rushed, and in some places it doesn't really make some sense. There are a few too many spelling errors here and there, and the Latin seems a bit broken in the title. Iter autem centurio. This would translate to "of (or but) the path (or travel) of I (the centurion)". I guess you're trying to say "The travel of a centurion". In which case the declension of iter needs to be iteris. And you need a dē in there (meaning of). So it would have to read "Centurio De Iteris". Don't take this offensively, this is just constructive criticism.
3825903 3825903 3825903 thank you, I was using google translate, and there's also the difference between Classical and Church Latin to compensate.
The cover art looks like the Damocles armor from Ryse but it's pretty good hope to see mor my friend.
3838617 It is the Damocles Armor, just wanted a cool Roman cover image, it will have relativity later on, right now Arceus is just trying to fit it.
you know what equis need's?
a good old battle royal or just more action with blood, iron and heros!
3845900 there will be blood later, also, the cover picture will be relevant later.
3838621 I am already In love with this story.
Good read bit short but things usually get better as the story progresses.
Note trying to nitpick but I absolutely HATE when people get Latin wrong from Google Translate. I would HIGHLY recommend that you refrain from using the PLURAL Neuter ending for the Accusative form of the noun. Instead of 'Prologus' it should be 'Prolougi'. Since there is not a verb the 'us' ending should not be applied. Use the Nominative singular ending of 'i' for it is masculine singular,
5339844 Thanks, I've been wanting to study Latin for awhile now, and. I love Rome, thanks for the tip
5339844 It has been fixed