559174 it would change my writing style a lot if I separated the dialogues like that. I'm glad with the current style, but perhaps I might just test the one you mentioned. I used to write like that when I just started with it, but who knows
561582 well, falling to an imminent death thanks to a banana skid is just as hilarious as it sounds. You know what they say: it's funny until someone get hurt, then it's hilarious. And if they die, you choke to death from laughter. And let's not forget that sadistic happiness is true happiness
Well once again you have gone almost to far:face hoof:. Yeah I don't know what to say so I'm just going to wipe this from my memory cause, dude its fucked up.
572002 it's the bitter reality that actually happens in real life. Ponies have been taken so far on the internet community that it was just a question of time before people would add reality in the creations of art they make. I just decided to take the area that effects poeple in a horrible way, that's why it fascinates me.
572565 True but you have more than, 4 in this story and if that happened to one single person, in one lifetime, I would consider it very unlikely. But hey it does happen and it does effect people.
This story definitely leaves me feeling a little dirty...but i have to say I am genuinely eager to see how things turn out. And this has been the only chapter so far I just count get any arousal from.
I really want to know what was up with Lyra during this chapter. I mean even with the back story what did she think happened to Bob-Bon. And what about her past made her so afraid Bon-Bon was going to leave her. Until the back story hit I thought she had just heard Bon-Bon like moaning Octavia in her sleep or something.
703664 those questions will be answered in time. However, Lyra's condition is pretty much already described. When she found Bon Bon unconscious, she was fully convinced something BAD had happened, something that would ruin her image of a life filled with harmony. She had a breakdown as a foal when she realized her mother was getting abused and when she had to see her mother getting raped. She just wanted everything to return to normal by eliminating what disturbed her perfect world. That's why she asked her dad to disappear (which he accidentally did)
TL;DR she absolutely can't handle the truth that sometimes horrible things happen in life.
I definitely noticed that "Disturbed" connection with that flashback. That was pretty brutal what Lyra had to witness. I can definitely see how it would cause an adverse psychological effect on the poor girl. I must admit though, I laughed when that asshole slipped on the banana peel and died. Great chapter, STILL needs some major polishing!
Man I'm so sorry for Lyra and Bon Bon and even Vinyl. Maybe you could explain what happened to Lyra and Vinyl and why they didn't grow up and get to gather. ( if you did explain in another chapter I'm sorry, I stopped here fo the night.) But good writing.
559174 it would change my writing style a lot if I separated the dialogues like that. I'm glad with the current style, but perhaps I might just test the one you mentioned. I used to write like that when I just started with it, but who knows
561582 well, falling to an imminent death thanks to a banana skid is just as hilarious as it sounds. You know what they say: it's funny until someone get hurt, then it's hilarious. And if they die, you choke to death from laughter.
And let's not forget that sadistic happiness is true happiness
Well once again you have gone almost to far:face hoof:. Yeah I don't know what to say so I'm just going to wipe this from my memory cause, dude its fucked up.
572002 it's the bitter reality that actually happens in real life. Ponies have been taken so far on the internet community that it was just a question of time before people would add reality in the creations of art they make. I just decided to take the area that effects poeple in a horrible way, that's why it fascinates me.
572565 True but you have more than, 4 in this story and if that happened to one single person, in one lifetime, I would consider it very unlikely. But hey it does happen and it does effect people.
This story definitely leaves me feeling a little dirty...but i have to say I am genuinely eager to see how things turn out. And this has been the only chapter so far I just count get any arousal from.
I really want to know what was up with Lyra during this chapter. I mean even with the back story what did she think happened to Bob-Bon. And what about her past made her so afraid Bon-Bon was going to leave her. Until the back story hit I thought she had just heard Bon-Bon like moaning Octavia in her sleep or something.
703664 those questions will be answered in time. However, Lyra's condition is pretty much already described. When she found Bon Bon unconscious, she was fully convinced something BAD had happened, something that would ruin her image of a life filled with harmony. She had a breakdown as a foal when she realized her mother was getting abused and when she had to see her mother getting raped. She just wanted everything to return to normal by eliminating what disturbed her perfect world. That's why she asked her dad to disappear (which he accidentally did)
TL;DR she absolutely can't handle the truth that sometimes horrible things happen in life.
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That makes sense. I have trouble interpreting the actions of characters at times.
I definitely noticed that "Disturbed" connection with that flashback. That was pretty brutal what Lyra had to witness. I can definitely see how it would cause an adverse psychological effect on the poor girl. I must admit though, I laughed when that asshole slipped on the banana peel and died. Great chapter, STILL needs some major polishing!
Man I'm so sorry for Lyra and Bon Bon and even Vinyl. Maybe you could explain what happened to Lyra and Vinyl and why they didn't grow up and get to gather. ( if you did explain in another chapter I'm sorry, I stopped here fo the night.) But good writing.