Well hello soul, once again out to burn my eyes? Well no, okay. So anyway, it was gooooood? But you didn't really explain why octavia is Russian? and there were one or two editing mistakes that, you as a pro should of got, in my opinion. So let me guess octavia tries to rape bon-bon and then some sort of affair happens and then some random shit then ending possibly with the death of one of the main characters.? It's alright in way of telling but the context was just a bit strange but what else don I expect from you. So tracking to see if I'm right. Also side note, in a fan fiction I'm writing can I use your name as a passing reference? So keep up the good work and out the dildos.
328150 That was an impressive try you did there to foresee the story of events And about Octavia being Russian, let's just say that there will be more chapters in order to explain everything. Leaving plot holes unsolved is not my thing (heh... I'm such a perv )
329683 I know, I face hoof every time you write. But it's a good type of hurt. And did you really just make that joke? So yeah keep it up and tell me about that whole name thing because I need a bunch of names and general descriptions of the sort of stories these people like you write. By the way it's not in a bad way but more of a historical way as saying you broke the stereotype of something.
And I BEG YOU to tell me your opinions about this. Tell me why it's good, tell me why it's bad, tell me why I should get stabbed in prison for writing this or WHATEVER comes to your mind! Whaddya think of the characters, the accentz, the descriptions, the annoying fact I'm going to use references to musical arts in each chapters, and what else I can't come up with now?!
Well, I'll be honest and say that I hate Octavia's accent. I'm going to keep on reading this story because I really like the premise and possible outcomes. Now, I think that this DRASTICALLY needs a proofreader to go over it. The excessive grammatical and spelling errors are going to detract from the enjoyment of this story. While it still has descriptive sex, it is not nearly as descriptive as some of what I've read. It is still quite enjoyable and gets the idea of what is going on across to the reader rather well. Oh, and I'm going to make this a reply so you'll see it and maybe consider some things. 329683
I like where this is going!
Sweeet! Soulhook you are the Bach of clop.
Well hello soul, once again out to burn my eyes? Well no, okay. So anyway, it was gooooood? But you didn't really explain why octavia is Russian? and there were one or two editing mistakes that, you as a pro should of got, in my opinion. So let me guess octavia tries to rape bon-bon and then some sort of affair happens and then some random shit then ending possibly with the death of one of the main characters.? It's alright in way of telling but the context was just a bit strange but what else don I expect from you. So tracking to see if I'm right. Also side note, in a fan fiction I'm writing can I use your name as a passing reference? So keep up the good work and out the dildos.
328150 That was an impressive try you did there to foresee the story of events And about Octavia being Russian, let's just say that there will be more chapters in order to explain everything. Leaving plot holes unsolved is not my thing (heh... I'm such a perv )
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I know, I face hoof every time you write. But it's a good type of hurt. And did you really just make that joke? So yeah keep it up and tell me about that whole name thing because I need a bunch of names and general descriptions of the sort of stories these people like you write. By the way it's not in a bad way but more of a historical way as saying you broke the stereotype of something.
I can imagine how this ends up...
"I enjoy getting the shit beaten out of me"
"Really? I love beating the shit out of mares!"
"Let's cheat on our lovers!"
"Okay!"
Ahhhh, ein gehrman ahczent?
Well, I'll be honest and say that I hate Octavia's accent. I'm going to keep on reading this story because I really like the premise and possible outcomes. Now, I think that this DRASTICALLY needs a proofreader to go over it. The excessive grammatical and spelling errors are going to detract from the enjoyment of this story. While it still has descriptive sex, it is not nearly as descriptive as some of what I've read. It is still quite enjoyable and gets the idea of what is going on across to the reader rather well.
Oh, and I'm going to make this a reply so you'll see it and maybe consider some things. 329683