Well I was almost right, but it was good and man I love mad bon-bon. Though with octavia, at the start I think there could of been some anger at the dildo, like throwing it but thats just me. So good on you soul, it's good to see you back on form.
456396 NEVER! NEVER EVER! FOREVER? YES, FOREVER NEVER! I guess what I'm trying to say is that I will continue...
456813 well, we all have our ways of reacting. I can spoil that Octavia felt a little disappointed at herself for making Vinyl use a dildo instead of her...
456290 for the love of Luna, don't forget to comment and say what you thought!
i read up to this 'Octavia asked and stroke the inanimate object again with a fore hoof' and my thoughts went straight to Dr. Evil petting his damn cat
463760 Wow, nice comment! All long and big and... heh.... Well, about the Vinyl/Lyra part, I can just say that this story is far from over....that's all. Sorry, but I just can't spoil anything Also, the dildo was a major mind breaker for Octavia, but I guess I forgot to explain that in this chapter. Perhaps I'll do it in the others instead! And thx again!
Though something in this chapter threw me for a loop.
Four Mares planning, recruiting for, organizing and executing a brutal rape with lots of physical evidence in the time frame of about 20 minutes with no concern to the consequences of their actions. I mean do the five ponies who did this not have families or just don't have plans for the next five to ten years. Not to mention personal slights aside 4 random ponies just being perfectly fine with rape, kidnapping and assault...
I can barely get four people to agree on a restaurant let alone multiple felonies.
I gotta say I love you're characterization of Octavia.
468174 Your thinking is absolutely rational and contains perfect logic.... exactly what those four mares forgot during their blind rage. When you act during rage, the outcome never ends in a good way, and what you can tell from those mares who actually decided to take out revenge in way like this, is that they are no good persons and definitely not good friends. You could say they unknowingly had buried their own graves already when they decided to do this. The thing with my stories are that I always add the bitter PARTS of reality and adds them into these fictional creations. I point out all the fragile sides we carry and shows how horrible humans can be.... with ponies.
I am kinda late with this, but i just discovered this fic... anyway the Russian "e" is pronounced as "ie". So it would make more sense to write it like that since it is written phonetically anyway. Privet would be "priviet".
Just something I wanted to say. (Love the story so far Especially the hard scenes like the suffocation)
I absolutely love your characterization of Octavia. It fits almost perfectly with my own headcanon, and it's good to see someone diverge from the typical naive and sheltered rich girl approach. I did find the Russian approach to be a bit odd. I would have figured German would have been a better choice seeing as her name is Von Clef which I saw as a play on old classic German composers such as Ludwig van Beethoven, Friedrich von Flotow, Carl Maria von Weber, etc. Either way I still love it.
When reading through Bonbon's flashback I was expecting the rape scene to happen, but of course I wasn't sure when. So with each introduction of a new character I was saying "alright, it's going to be this guy or maybe those guys" but you managed to keep me on edge and then surprise me with what actually happened. You've also managed to maintain the tension in the main storyline as well which makes the overall outcome not so clear, which is good in my opinion. I can't wait to finish this story and see what end you've come up with.
I also have to admit it felt a bit weird when you were describing Bonbon's personality and approach towards sex because I felt as if I was reading a description of myself. Sorry if that's a bit TMI but I just found it wonderful to be able to sympathize with a fictional character so well.
Huh, that was pretty damn interesting. I'm still quite interested in reading this story. I don't real all that many stories with such...violent sexual content in it. I enjoy reading a good clop or sensual romance, but this, while I still enjoy, is pretty gruesome in the sex factor. Either way, I look forward to reading more of this crazy thing.
I Know this was written a while ago, but i have realised through reading these stories that it is more often better using names in lieu of descriptions.
Damn this is good!
Never stop writing my friend!
Well I was almost right, but it was good and man I love mad bon-bon. Though with octavia, at the start I think there could of been some anger at the dildo, like throwing it but thats just me. So good on you soul, it's good to see you back on form.
456396 NEVER! NEVER EVER! FOREVER? YES, FOREVER NEVER! I guess what I'm trying to say is that I will continue...
456813 well, we all have our ways of reacting. I can spoil that Octavia felt a little disappointed at herself for making Vinyl use a dildo instead of her...
456290 for the love of Luna, don't forget to comment and say what you thought!
i read up to this 'Octavia asked and stroke the inanimate object again with a fore hoof' and my thoughts went straight to Dr. Evil petting his damn cat
463760 Wow, nice comment! All long and big and... heh.... Well, about the Vinyl/Lyra part, I can just say that this story is far from over....that's all. Sorry, but I just can't spoil anything Also, the dildo was a major mind breaker for Octavia, but I guess I forgot to explain that in this chapter. Perhaps I'll do it in the others instead! And thx again!
459180 haaaahh.... I love Dr. Evil
I am enjoying this fic so much.
Though something in this chapter threw me for a loop.
Four Mares planning, recruiting for, organizing and executing a brutal rape with lots of physical evidence in the time frame of about 20 minutes with no concern to the consequences of their actions. I mean do the five ponies who did this not have families or just don't have plans for the next five to ten years. Not to mention personal slights aside 4 random ponies just being perfectly fine with rape, kidnapping and assault...
I can barely get four people to agree on a restaurant let alone multiple felonies.
I gotta say I love you're characterization of Octavia.
468174 Your thinking is absolutely rational and contains perfect logic.... exactly what those four mares forgot during their blind rage. When you act during rage, the outcome never ends in a good way, and what you can tell from those mares who actually decided to take out revenge in way like this, is that they are no good persons and definitely not good friends. You could say they unknowingly had buried their own graves already when they decided to do this.
The thing with my stories are that I always add the bitter PARTS of reality and adds them into these fictional creations. I point out all the fragile sides we carry and shows how horrible humans can be.... with ponies.
473976 ehhh, no.... russian
soulhook i have read 3 of your storys and i got to say i NEED MORE PLz! you have got real skill keep up the good work
I am kinda late with this, but i just discovered this fic... anyway the Russian "e" is pronounced as "ie". So it would make more sense to write it like that since it is written phonetically anyway. Privet would be "priviet".
Just something I wanted to say. (Love the story so far Especially the hard scenes like the suffocation)
I always thought she was German in this story lol
I love this story so far.
I absolutely love your characterization of Octavia. It fits almost perfectly with my own headcanon, and it's good to see someone diverge from the typical naive and sheltered rich girl approach. I did find the Russian approach to be a bit odd. I would have figured German would have been a better choice seeing as her name is Von Clef which I saw as a play on old classic German composers such as Ludwig van Beethoven, Friedrich von Flotow, Carl Maria von Weber, etc. Either way I still love it.
When reading through Bonbon's flashback I was expecting the rape scene to happen, but of course I wasn't sure when. So with each introduction of a new character I was saying "alright, it's going to be this guy or maybe those guys" but you managed to keep me on edge and then surprise me with what actually happened. You've also managed to maintain the tension in the main storyline as well which makes the overall outcome not so clear, which is good in my opinion. I can't wait to finish this story and see what end you've come up with.
I also have to admit it felt a bit weird when you were describing Bonbon's personality and approach towards sex because I felt as if I was reading a description of myself. Sorry if that's a bit TMI but I just found it wonderful to be able to sympathize with a fictional character so well.
Huh, that was pretty damn interesting. I'm still quite interested in reading this story. I don't real all that many stories with such...violent sexual content in it. I enjoy reading a good clop or sensual romance, but this, while I still enjoy, is pretty gruesome in the sex factor. Either way, I look forward to reading more of this crazy thing.
I Know this was written a while ago, but i have realised through reading these stories that it is more often better using names in lieu of descriptions.