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  • 32w, 3d

    Chapter nine of The Book of Water: The Heart of Winter has been released. Apparently several readers brought it to my attention that they hadn't received notifications. So just letting everyone know the latest chapter has been released, and is available for reading.

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  • 42w, 1d
    I Was Asked A Question...

    I had gentlereader DraconeKing ask me the following question in the comments of The Great Slave King: Any advice for writing fanfiction? I always stop at the first paragraph and give up.

    After a bit of thought, I wrote a response to them. Since I spent some time writing it I thought why not post it as a blog post so it doesn't accidentally get erased.

    Thank you for your comments gentlereader, the first thing I'd suggest is deciding what kind of story you wish to tell. An adventure tale, extolling the exploits of an unlikely hero and his compatriots against some great evil and impossible odds. A romance, where two strangers become unlikely friends then lovers, after they realize they have more in common then they ever though possible. Or maybe even a tragedy, where the protagonist loses something dear and precious to him, and struggles to cope with their loss and grief, until they finally come to terms with themselves and finally find peace.

    Once you have an idea of where you would like to begin, I'd suggest deciding on an overriding theme for your story. Perhaps you want to write about friendship, and how the hardships the protagonist face become easier to overcome because of the bonds and friendships they formed with the other characters in the story. Maybe it might be about the power of love to change even the most embittered soul, and how the protagonist learned to trust again after finding solace with the one who refused to stop loving them, even if they didn't deserve it. Or you could even possibly write about how none are beyond forgiveness and redemption, once the antagonist has been laid low and defeated after a hard struggle, and instead of the protagonists vanquishing their foe, offer him the chance for penance.

    Once a theme has been decided, determine who your main protagonist is. Will they be a wide eyed innocent soul, who's destined for far greater things then the humble village of his humble beginnings. A wronged soul, who seeks vengeance against those who stole that which was the most precious to them. Or even a bitter and jaded warrior seeking tranquility, whose grown weary of their journey along the stony path of conflict which life has offered them.

    Now that you have discovered the protagonist, determine their motivations. What events have shaped and molded them into who they are today. Perhaps it some unspeakable tragedy which has greatly wounded their heart. Finally finding someone to love, and hoping to win the heart of the one who has already won theirs. Or even someone content to live within mediocrity, because they simply gave up.

    Once you know who the protagonist is, you need to discover the world they live in. What sort of land do they call home? What are the people like, their culture, their religion? What about the countries beyond their land's borders. How do they differ from the main settings?

    Now that you know the protagonist, their past, and where they live. You need to discover the event that changed everything. Perhaps a raid against their village from a much larger army, started them on their journey. They could have been content, living their life when they show up. The person that somehow managed to get beneath their skin and worm their way inside their heart, prompting them to change for the better. Or maybe they committed a great evil, and in their shame they ever wander, desperate to escape themselves.

    Now that we have some momentum, you need to determine the challenges the protagonist will face. Essentially, what happens between point A, and point B. Maybe they came to a new town for a job, discovered that one of their coworkers is actively sabotaging their efforts, gets blamed for a massive cock up, discovers the truth and reveals it their boss, ensuring their coworker gets their comeuppance. Or maybe a lonely king is under threat from a law requiring him to find a queen or abdicate the throne by a certain date, however for personal reasons objects to marriage and tries his best to elude the law's requirements with help from royalty from a neighboring kingdom whose citizens are pushing they get married as well, in the end they discover friendship and love, and learn that maybe being married isn't so bad, especially if it's to each other.

    Finally a good story is a lot like dancing. There's a rhythm, cadence, and a beat every story wants to follow. The easiest stories to write have three movements, the beginning, where everything is explained and the protagonist faces great peril that has been spoken throughout the story, the evil twin steals their favorite toy, the romantic rival sweeps their interest off their feet, their company is being threatened by a hostile takeover by corporate raiders. The middle where the protagonist is brought low by their challenges and peril, and they are unsure if they will actually make it, the castle is under siege and supplies are running low, the young student lost their master and must now rely on themselves for answers, their best friend was murdered before their eyes and the killer managed to get away. The end where the protagonist and story meet their resolution and climatic end, the grand wedding where they exchange their vows of everlasting love for each other, the retirement to a small peaceful village where they are free to pursue their true passion, painting scenic watercolors, winning the final round of the tournament to accolades and great honors.

    Remembering these simple rules will help you write whatever story you want. I suggest starting out with a simple outline, Determine the type of story, then its theme, decide upon the cast and live in their world for a day. Decide on the challenges they might face, and a simple outline of how you want to arrange the acts. Once you have this simple framework, the rest is easy. Write what comes naturally to you, and above all else have fun. Remember as long as you're happy with the story, no one elses opinion matters. Well unless you write for money, then pander to your audience. Hopefully you found my thoughts enlightening.

    P.S. Look out for the next chapter of The Book of Water: The Heart of Winter shortly.

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  • 48w, 3d
    Regarding the Latest Chapter of The Heart of Winter...

    The next chapter release will occur on Christmas.

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  • 51w, 4d
    Would You Kindly...

    Hi, gentlereader, I'm going to start working shortly. So I might miss discovering my story getting featured. If it does, could you please send me a message so I can post the next chapters like I promised? Thank you for your kind consideration.

    Until next time, gentlereader!

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  • 51w, 4d
    The King Has Returned, (once more that is)!

    The next story in the Great Slave King saga has been submitted for your reading pleasure, and is just waiting for mod approval.

    If you don't want to wait, here's the link: The Book of Water: The Heart of Winter

    Until next time, gentlereader!

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  • ...

The Well of Eternity a place lost to time, is the birthplace of Equestria's various deities. King, a mortal man from Earth slips between the cracks that separate worlds. Landing in the unforgiving badlands of greater Equestria, he aimlessly wanders through the unforgiving terrain. Eventually enslaved by diamond dogs, for ten long years he labors under their cruel whips, eventually escaping his captors only to become lost in the depths of Equestria's vast underworld. Dying of thirst, the man spies the Well of Eternity and drinks his fill. Its waters more than quench his thirst; a metamorphosis occurs and changes him, for good or ill none can tell. What fate shall befall this man, the Great Slave King?

Book one of four, book two can be found at The Book of Water: The Marriage of the Slave King

TV Tropes Page: The Great Slave King: Special thanks goes to gentlereader Abstract Indigo

Cover art by myself.

First Published
12th Mar 2012
Last Modified
1st Dec 2012

This looks promising

this seriously sounds epic, imma track, but waiting for complete.

i like it, the idea is the first of it's kind i've seen and you put the idea into words very well, tracking.

>>314241 Thanks, It always bothered me that we never see greater Equestria in any fanfics its always Twilight screws up a spell, or Rainbow Dash shipping with anything and everything. I was throwing around the idea of a fic based around the diamond dogs since January, and the Ballad of Echo made me decide to flesh out my idea.

>>314253 nice, i read the same fic :3 have for a while (i keep teasing the creator by suggesting dog-like names to call him)

Assuming his abilities are unique to his being, as every deity we have seen so far has, then I will enjoy it.

WHy did this re-post?

EDIT: inb4 first fags


exactly what i thought

>>315026>>315029 I added another chapter, the prologue. The Divine Moot.

cool, cant wait till he goes n fuck the Ddogs up

#14 · 141w, 3d ago · 1 · · A Just Reward ·

maaaaan he's got conflicting emotions...

Interesting. Tracking.:pinkiehappy:

#16 · 141w, 3d ago · 2 · · A Just Reward ·

Also he is a total douche.

#17 · 141w, 3d ago · 2 · · A Just Reward ·

>>316273 Thanks. I wanted to portray him as a selfish, greedy person. He knows he should be a better person, but has stopped trying cause he no longer cares.


good shit! reallllllly looking forward to this.

he coulda traded the apple for the hay, am geussin hes gona get to know the Griffon and Unicorn over the next 10 years


I agree, while I kinda like knowing whats in store. this is way too much information. You will need to get to the slave king bit soon. I already know what happens, he stays a slave for the next ten years, what happens during those ten years doesn't really concern me greatly. Its the well bit I find intriguing. And you can always return to those times when he was a slave in flashbacks and memories. so you could kind of have two stories going at the same time.

Still, tracked, liked.

Favorited? only time will tell.

When do we get to see him as the slave king?

>>321477 chapter 1 technically. But I'm putting the finishing touches on the next chapter. So you'll see some action then.


So basically the story is the chapter as him turning into a god and then the rest f the story is his past?

>>321540 Well the important events in the ten year gap will be told in flashbacks, after he assumes his power.

>>322257 I've always been a strong believer in standing by your choices. the Slave King will not disappoint you in that regard. Also enjoy the new chapter. The Godslayer's Punishmnet


I love this chapter and the first, but I skipped the ones in between. Those middle chapters seemed to be pointless exposition.


this is soooo good

>>322326 I'm sorry you didn't enjoy chapters 2-5. It's probably because the type of story changed from when I first started. The purpose of those chapters was meant to show a typical human, or ape as the wonderfully talented Chantoyance might say, would act. Thank you for your patience, I hope you enjoy the rest of The Great Slave King, as I release it.

>>322365 Awesomesauce. You know you've reached internet awesomeness where there's meme involved.

>>322449WHA?!?!?WHO DIDNT ENJOY THOSE CHAPTERS?!?!THIS STORY I-*cough*Sorry caps lock I love this story to the fullest extent!Who could not like a single chapter?!:pinkiegasp:ITS LIKE BREAKING A PINKIE PROMISE:pinkiecrazy:

one thing though,

"Even though you tried to assassinate me, I’ll accept your challenge."

Challenge, what challenge? I thought she just tried to off you. or at least imprison you in stone. Not really a challenge. and seriously you could level some serious threats, for example "try that again and the earth will refuse you its bounty, and all shall starve for your trespasses." all farms need the earth to grow food, you literally have the entirety of the world in a choke hold, except for maybe the dragons, if you wanted to threaten them, just turn all gems into coal.

>>322459 if you have a preference on whether Lord Triton or Lord Ouroboros, be the Slave King's antagonist please post and let me know.

>>322469 Yes, but she tried to do what Lord Darkpaw attempted. Violate the law of the moot.The Slave King isn't a soulless monster yet. He only really has a quarrel with the gem biter clan. If Lord Darkpaw had let him kill a few of them, the whole situation could have been avoided. In the next chapter I'll explain the mechanics behind the prime elements.


still, what challenge was offered? is she challenging him for his life? control of the earth? she never really says anything that can be considered a 'challenge'

he says he will 'yield to her judgement' but she again hasn't said anything.

See my problem?:fluttershysad:

its all very unclear

>>322489 Okay point taken, I added some clarifying language to show he would be imprisoned not assassinated, and to show Celestia's actions would have been seen as a challenge. Thanks for reading.

this story is awsomne dude


thank you.:twilightsmile:

I was just getting a bit confused, sorry for nit picking.

>>322551 I'd rather have a nit picker, rather than a not reader

>>322547 Thank you for reading, it pleases me that I was able to bring you enjoyment.

I only hope that my story will be considered, as good as the epic fics this site has. Like a taste of grass, Ballad of Echo the Diamond Dog, and Memoirs of a Reality Jumper.

wha?! WHAT JUST HAPPENED?!?! he fell asleep and you skipped ahead?!?! THIS IS SO CONFUSING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (though nice 3 chapter update)

I don't know if I'd be so agreeable to the one who was about to imprison me in stone for millenia.

I'd be playing by the Chicago Way.

>>323079 Basically, the character Andrew King, was explaining his story to the assorted deities from chapter 1. I had planned to spend three more chapters on the ten year gap in fact i had like 6k already written, when I decided that the isn't really the slave kings story, its was a story about the interaction between the slave king, the various deities, and the people, er ponies affected by the prime elements warring with each other. Fear not you will learn more of his exploits prior to him actually becoming the slave king. But I apologize if the transition was rough.

>>322951 Fear not gentle reader, the chapter releases were doubled, and hopefully I will be able to write another six k words tonight after work. After all the pieces are now all on the board,and we just have to move them.

>>323721 The Slave King knew, Celestia was only attempting imprisoning him to protect the weaker creatures of the world. She also voted against his banishment during the moot. Additionally he hadn't learned the extent of his powers just yet, and Celestia was the obviously most power being in attendance.

heh heh kill them all

DJ...what are you holding?

a skull, "alas poor yorick, for i knew him not horatio" - if you don't know i will kill you

Oooooh I likes the story better now!:pinkiesmile:

The ground screamed in protest, having no desire to bear the trespasser's weight.

The sun darkened, bathing all in a crimson deep, illuminating the dark figure.

All things living fled, their instincts foretelling the doom that graced them.

Hope turned to despair, frozen in the hearts of all that bore witness to his terrible visage.

All was lost.

For Death had come to call.

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