A Rainbow's Prayer
Rainbow Dash flew backwards through Ghastly Gorge without a care as she watched her four flying finalists dodge the Quarry Eels. "Easy, peasy, one-two-threesy!" Dash said confidently, "Right, guys?"
CRACK!
Rainbow Dash flew straight back into the canyon wall. Cracks from her collision point spread through the wall and all the way up to a pile of rocks above. As Rainbow Dash rubbed her now sore back, she just happened to look up and see a rock falling towards her.
"AVALANCHE!" she shouted as she dodged the rocks. Suddenly the four animals flew by her, dodging the rocks with ease. "Hey! Whoaaaa!" she shouted as she tried keeping up with them. However, another large rock fell down and landed on her, forcing her down to the ground.
Eventually Dash managed to shake off the dizziness, and found that the avalanche was over. She looked up to see the four contestants flying off. She jumped up to take to that air after them, only to get pulled back down. She turned and saw that to her horror, that her right wing was held down under a large boulder. She desperately pulled on her wing, but no matter how hard she pulled she couldn't get it free.
Dash looked up at the animals and called out, "C'mon... No! Wait! Come back! Don't leave me! I'm the one who's supposed to win! I don't wanna end up stuck here... " Dash shuddered, ". . .forever!" Dash looked around nervously as she began to feel panic take hold of her, "Oh no, nonono, th-this can't be happening. Forever is way too long to be trapped in Ghastly Gorge. I mean, it's like, forever!" Dash looked up and shouted at the top of her lungs, "Somepony! Anypony! Help me!"
Her voice echoed throughout the empty gorge, a sign of how alone Rainbow Dash really was.
"What am I gonna do," Dash said as she turned to the boulder, "What did I do to deserve this?" Dash hardened her gaze and said, "I am not giving up!" She then threw all her weight against the boulder and pushed with all her might. To her dismay, it wouldn't budge. She kept this up for a few minutes, but the rock didn't move an inch. Dash moaned and sat down. "I give up."
Dash looked up and around her surroundings. The walls of the Gorge seemed to extend infinitely upward, providing no escape.
"Valley of the Shadow of Death," Dash remarked quietly as she began to feel fear. Dash hung her head and whispered, "No. No, please no."
Fighting to hold back tears, Rainbow Dash bowed her head as low as she could as she began to pray, "Please God, don't leave me like this. Don't let me be stuck here forever. I want be with my friends, and join the Wonderbolts, and a tone of other stuff. If you got plans for me, why did you let this happen? I don't deserve it! I don't-."
Dash suddenly caught herself and sighed, "No, I deserve a lot worse actually. And if it weren't for you, Christ, I'd still be headed right towards it. I don't even want to think about it. . .but why did this in particular happen? How can I be of any use to you if I'm stuck here? Help me understand, God. Is there a lesson in this? All I did was try to find the prefect pet."
Dash sat in silence, still in prayer, for a moment. She focused on the couple of Scripture verse she could remember at the time. The Scripture was the only book she ever read. It wasn't like all those other egghead books. It was different, and way more important. As she sat there, she did her best to search for the Holy Spirit within her. She hoped that He could help her see what she was missing. Eventually, something did react inside her, and it filled her with guilt.
"I. . .didn't treat those pets right, didn't I?" Dash prayed sorrowfully, "I wasn't exactly nice, and I put them in danger too. I guess, I was so focused on getting an awesome pet, I forgot about what having a pet was all about. Love, attention, and all that mushy stuff. I can do that! I really can! I can be tough and awesome while still being a caring pet owner. I just didn't try hard enough. I'm sorry God, and You know I rarely make the same mistake twice. I repent, I really repent God. Just please, get me out of here. I fix that mistake, please forgive me. In Your Holy Name I pray. Amen."
Dash sat in silence for a moment after that. She squeezed her eyes tightly as tears of shame and despair squeezed. However, the sound of rock crumbling alerted her to look back down the Gorge. She smiled joyously as she saw the shadow of something approaching her.
Dash's heart soared as she jumped for joy, "Wahoo! My prayers have been answered! Oh, thankyouthankyoutha– "
Dash's joy was short lived when she saw who cast the shadow.
"You?!" Dash shouted in disbelief as the tortoise approached her, "Oh no!" Rainbow Dash shouted as she began to feel anger build up inside her, "Now I'm not only going to be stuck here forever." Dash then took the opportunity to shoot an angry look upwards and shout "I'm gonna be stuck here forever with the most annoying turtle in the world!"
Dash shout down in a huff and looked over at the tortoise. It appeared to be slowly digging at the dirt beneath the boulder. "Gyh, I'm doomed!" Dash moaned, "DOOMED, I tell you!" Dash buried her face in her hooves and started crying. "Does God not care about me anymore?" she thought sadly.
CRREAACK!
The odd sound caused Dash to look over at the tortoise. After taking a look, she blinked the tears out of her eyes and rubbed them clear for a good 5 seconds. However, the sight still hadn't changed. The tortoise had dug a small hole beneath the boulder and stuck his head into it, and then lifted the 2 ton boulder with its neck.
Dash stared at the impossible scene for about 10 seconds, then finally regained her senses and quickly rolled away from the boulder. Once she was clear the tortoise lowered the boulder back down and backed away.
"No way," Dash said in awe, her mind still reeling from what she just witnessed. She looked down at the tortoise and said, "You. . .saved me. . . and I- OW!" Dash tried to open her wing, but was greeted by a sharp pain. Her legs shook rapidly and she fell painfully to her knees. "Ow. . ." she moaned.
As Dash lay painfully on the ground, the tortoise approached the mare. He pulled his head inside his shell and popped back out with a roll of bandages in his mouth.
A/N: First of all, its a cartoon. Second of all, in the show, Tank pulls a pair of sunglasses out of his shell, so who knows what else he has in there.
The tortoise unrolled a clean length of bandage, and Dash lent a hoof in helping him wrap it around Dash's injured wing.
"Well, gosh. . ." Dash said, shocked nearly speechless. She attempted to stand, but her legs still responded weakly. The next thing she knew, Tank was underneath her, lifting her up onto his back.
Now Rainbow Dash was at a complete loss for words. This tortoise had actually gone into Ghastly Gorge after her, saved her, and now was carrying her to safety. She would have never predicted anything like this in her entire life. But what really blew her mind was how he was able to lift such a heavy boulder. It didn't seem possible.
Rainbow Dash stopped thinking as she came to a sudden conclusion. She smiled and said, "Like a camel walking through the eye of a needle. . . "
. . . .
"Thank you, God. I'm pretty sure I've learned my lesson. And I know how to show the little guy my gratitude."
The End
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Shame religion and ponies are almost always a magnet for baseless downvotes. Controversial topics aside, the writing certainly isn't bad enough to warrant a downvote. My only criticism would be that it's a bit fast-paced, but for a one-shot based around a minute or so of canon episode, it's not bad at all.
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Indeed. If only 'Love and Tolerate' extended to such things.
I for one am wary to read this, not because it's religious, but because the description mentions Prayer Warriors.
First of all: This is really well written and I ended up actually liking it. I'm not a Christian myself, but I don't mind people being religious (I'm the kind of atheist who thinks that one can't sense the ontic world, so I'd never arrogate to say what is real and what isn't).
Even though English isn't my native language, I found some mistakes, which I am now going to point out:
There's one "that" to much in there. Also, there might be a comma missing here - not sure.
Missing "to" ("I want to [...]") and "ton" is misspelled.
I'm pretty sure it should be "[...], did I?'".
Not really a mistake, but I'd write "[...] helping him wrap it around her injured wing.".
That had my interest.
Well… Maybe?
Er, no. I'll pass.
No downvote, still have a couple of your other fics in the to read later pile.
I actually quite liked this even though it was quite short. There are just odd people out there who think actually having beliefs is worse than not having them. There are probably a few downvotes on this story that it did not deserve. This is a one shot and this is what one person believes. Do not just down vote because you don't share his beliefs. I for one enjoyed this because it was something I never considered. I sincerely hope this story's comment section does not turn into a war. It is a story, read it because you want to. To the Author, God bless you as well. I hope my comment makes a little sense and i'm sorry if it is just me rambling.
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to be honest there have been many times when I felt like I was trapped forever and then there was some mysterious savior, always getting me out, always picking me up, but I knew that it was because I have tried so hard to find faith, I know that I will still face such obstacles but I can and will overcome.
this is like walking in the sand with Christ, most times you are walking you would see two pairs of foot prints leaving a trail, but at times when there is only one, it is because the lord is carrying you through the troubled times.
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That was just a term I heard some where. I assumed it meant someone who prays passionately and goes on and on. Did I make a mistake?
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Technically yes, since it's associated with a story about hypocritical douchebags who murder people in the name of religious conversion. Maybe it used to mean something else, but the connotations it's picked up since then aren't pretty. It's along the lines of calling a fic My Immortal, except worse.
I Think It was a Good story
I just got to the part where she first calls out to God. I had to stop and go, "Ha. ALL OF MY YES."
This was great. Heckuva better lesson than Celestia tries to teach.
Beautiful. It's nice to see someone who's willing to write about faith in a world that tries so hard to reject it.
3471477 no what story are you talking about a prayer warrior is someone who prays passionately
*ton
*"didn't seem possible."? "seemed impossible."? As it is, this seems to be the opposite of what you mean.
I like this idea a lot. Being religious isn't a character trait that looks like it would fit with Rainbow Dash, but it works surprisingly well. It adds so much depth, especially here, where it only really shows up when she's alone.
This, was amazing. God bless you.
Pretty good. Naturally, there are no direct Christian references in the show (that I can remember off the top of my head), but then, they have no choice with a kind's show on an entertainment network. I would like to know just how Rainbow knew about the Bible; I'm not criticizing, I'm in fact pleased, but I'm still not sure how the knowledge got there.
I certainly enjoyed this.
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5824835 Megan.
Amazing story 4 out of 5, only missing 1 star because this fanfic [or fimfic] should be longer.
There was this one guy who was hiking in Utah alone and fell into a gorge, trapping his arm underneath a boulder at the bottom of a hole. He also prayed to God; he was Mormon. But after hours and hours, after even several days stuck there, he still was not free.
The answer from the spirit, however, came to his mind clearly. There was only one way to get himself free. The man then decided on the one option to free himself.
He cut off the arm at the shoulder with a pocketknife.
He doesn't have an arm anymore, but he remains as staunch in his faith as ever. God made it so that he had lived through the experience; he could have easily died in the rocky lands of Utah, but he was found and treated.
I loved what you did. It was terrific, all the way. Maybe, though--maybe...the fic could focus on a darker route. Maybe Rainbow would have to sacrifice her wing to be free, and then she ends up questioning God as to why that happened, as well as what she can do now.
That was a great story, dude! God sure has given you the talent to write stupendous stories.
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You know
Its been so long since I've seen a Christian thing that doesn't actively hurt my faith that...i dont know how to feel for it
You did good buddy