The grammar and missing words is getting ridiculous at this point, when I was reading the scene about Trixie letting Crimson out of the telekinesis I could not tell until later in the scene that she actually did let her out. If you were to go over these again and fix the mistakes then make it more easily accessible I think this story could do quite well.

Thank you! And i need to dust them off and work on it, past month got another addiction of RP-ing on Pony2 I think i'm improving but i sure do need some edititng

Maybe soon there be updates