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Chance for the Damned

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TheFaceofMercy #1 · Dec 7th, 2014 · 3 · ·

I think you have a good premise, but I found a lot of mistakes in the narration, and that makes it annoying to read; mostly awkward tenses and weird spelling.
And even if you said you don't want any grammar nazis here (I am not one of those but still ), you really need to get an editor for your story because a lot of people is going to comment about your grammar mistakes.

Moving on, I liked the story, it has been a while since I read a vampony story... I'm going to put this story into my Favorites, just to see its progress, but I cannot bring myself to like it, not yet, and still I won't dislike it either.

Keep going, I'm very curious to see what will happen next.

Warrior Kitten #2 · Dec 8th, 2014 · · ·

So... She was raped and turned at the same time?

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Warrior Kitten #3 · Dec 8th, 2014 · · ·

I'm not a grammar nazi I'm a spelling and punctuation nazi.

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