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i enjoyed this more plz
I want to write more so bad but I just moved and idk when I'll have internet again so I'm restrained to my phone. Thank you for reading and the comment, I'll do my best to continue.
I am now back online ! Will be adding more soon .
Romance with the princesses is fine by me.
Although the standard 'going to ponyville' stuff always gets me annoyed. It might turn out well, so i'll leave it up to you.
Romance with the princess sound fine to me. ( I don't see them getting much love so it's nice to see it). Also the pov is great looking forward to when you do the next one
I love the thoughts and comments.Thank you guys! I think I can definitely swing a good romance plot, but it may be much deeper into the story. True romance isn't true without hardships, trial and error. So I am gonna make it one of the princesses, just gotta decide which one now haha. As always though I'm open to ideas.
I have to say,
"Oh Shit!" Would've been the only thing I could've processed at the time.
Very well written, and seems to be well thought out. Nice work.
Lol thanks man, yea it's some extreme fiction, but I'm trying to make it feel as real as really being in the situations as I can. Gotta say the same about your story as well, very creative and that's hard to do. I like it. BTW.. you got a romance choice for me?
I feel as if you had the length of the story quite well fitted.
I was engaged fully, throughout the chapter.
That, along with all of the other elements you incorporated worked quite well together.
Good to hear, thank you. Haha that was the term I was looking for earlier about your story, "fully engaged". Definitely kept my interest, and I still have more to read yet. I've also been trying to get my 4th chapter out for the longest time now but I have been busy. I'll admit now that it is headed for ponyville(a cliche idea I know), but I'm gonna attempt to even make that interesting with an unexpected situation or two.
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agreed now the only thing I have to say is more!
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Well, since Romance is typically my forte, I would say it seems as if, the way you've had the story go so far, Archangel and Princess Luna would be pairing with each other. But then again, you could also make some unexpected romance come into effect in Ponyville. If you'd like you could message me and we could discuss it further.
good chapter
and Finally a new chapter!
also good luck with police academy you going for regular cop or swat?
Thanks a lot, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yea it takes me forever to get any done lately. I'm just goin for basic police training for now, but I'd like to pursue SWAT later. After being in the Marines I can't imagine a job without at least some action haha.
Awesome chapter. (LUNA IS BEST PONY OF ALL.
LOL Thanks and agreed, she is!
Good chapter. Your writing isn't suffering as far as I can see, so yeah. All hail best pony, the one by the name of Princess Luna.
Great to hear thank you
did somebody say HERO
*
*get off the stage
awww
Lmao nice. Thanks for the fav!
Thank you that is very good to hear, and I hope I can find the time soon!
I'm liking this so far. You do seem to be rushing character interactions though...
Thanks for the fav. I know, this story has been on hiatus and in rewrite forever now. I am honestly surprised you found it haha. I'm currently enrolled in the police academy and have very little time for this unfortunately. So, I think some things were left a bit choppy and I'm quite sure I was gonna change a lot of it. But if you could or would like to, please PM me expounding on what you thought could use improvement and we'll talk details.
He is literally the Dues ex Machina to the problems in Equestria... Although, he is not quite there yet.
-Live long and prosper- 
Also...It's pretty obvious with the way things play out between him and Luna.
For me, no one is best because there are always higher mountains. Better, probally and maybe favorite too, but, no best...
Interesting concept and I really hope you don't abandon it like so many many many stories with potential.
is this story still live?
4456412 yeah I've just been revising a lot lately and hopefully getting on a new chapter soon here.
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AWSOME!!!!!!!
That first bit of tekst is realy deep man
4497417 Haha thanks and welcome to my mind lol.
Congratulations on graduating.
4498528 Hey thanks, it sure feels good to finally be done.
Nice chapter are you going to continue this?
5043077 Thank you. I really want to, and plan on it. Unfortunately time has been my enemy, and my inspiration has been with drawing on deviantArt lately.
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That's great tell me your username on deviant art and I'll follow you
5053441 Oh awesome alright! It's the same...vansmidt haha
I do mostly MS Paint work.
Congratulations, and i'm just waiting anxiously to read more! I'll be sure to check out what your art.
5093575 Thanks a lot! I look forward to your opinion on that as well :D
5126299 Well, i look forward to see what you think of next for this story!
Blah, Blah. Forget anything?
Oh, yeah. I now have three voices in my head now. You just met Rage.
Hi
Next, we have joy...
HI!!
Last but not least, WE have Relaxation
Hello.
Now that intros are out of the way... BYE
5126972 Yeah, so do I. I just need to sit down and take the time to do more of it.
And three hmm? That must get crowded. Rage, Joy, and Relaxation. This sounds like a story idea in itself if you don't mind my saying hehe.
5127017 Yeah, it can get chaotic, but not crowded.
Says you...
ITS ROOMY IN HERE!!!
Yes, there is enough room for all of us, we just use a different part of our brain.
And it is a story worthy idea, and i have read other stories with the same thing. As a side note; when they fight i get a migraine. So we established a no fighting rule. RAGE.
5127102 Well that is certainly a good rule then lol
5129593 Yes, and it has been working so far...
But it's bound to be broken...
With you? Yeah, it's only a matter of time.
5132509 haha uh oh
5133510 Yup, this is only the calm before the storm, no matter how much will pass, IT. WILL. HAPPEN.
5133556 Well, then I guess all I can say is good luck. May the best portion win. Or better yet regain balance haha. But for now, goodnight.