After flying into space to save human kind, the astronaut Magragor finds himself lost in space until he finds a planet called Equestria and he must go to there to survive.
What kind of mysteries are in that strange planet and how is he gonna fit with the pony race?
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small spelling errors but at least it didn't have the usual timberwolves attack.
will keep reading
It's into not to the, you need to get rid of that the, and find should be finds although the sentence structure makes it seem awkward. Anyway I just thought I should point out those spelling mistakes because they were in the description and some people will down vote the story just for that.
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Thank you so much my friend! i'll change it, Brohoof!
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the whole story is to fast a pace. slow down explain whats going on with detail. why does he now who Twilight is, when it was never mention before. and the chapter before when did he get injured,why did he have no choice in taking that potion. why did Zecora not take him to the village. why is he trusting aliens so much, humans are paranoid beings. when it comes down to it this feels more like explanation with no story.plus did Celestia her self come out of nowhere then all of a sudden take him to the palace for what appears as no reason. and if he is from the year 4270 the technology then would be off the chart be more creative. plus the whole he went to blow up a asteroid is from a very famous movie. im sure you now what im talking about. plus how far away was that dam thing. since there is no way it was in the same solar system as are's. so why would they need to blow it up then when we would have waited for it to get at least into the inner planets . i could go own to say more about the tech. we would have had by that point in time, or the fact that even now we have relies its easier to just change there course then destroy them.
in the end its the journey that matters not the destination. remember this and try not to do a obvious self insert next time as well as ripe off famous movies.
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You're right, i think that maybe i need to explain so many things. and i DO NOT ripped any movie for this story, this story i wrote myself long time ago (with humans XD) and i'm re-writing my story to fit in MLP universe, so i had to cut some things, i wrote the story in notepad and i paste it on this page.
Anyways i think i better review my own story.for any future mistakes, Thank you for your review! Brohoof!