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Not bad, but the way you do the dialogue makes things pretty hard to follow. That's really my only complaint.
3114769 what do you mean by "doing the dialogue"? You mean I should improve my writing on dialogues or what?
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You mark what is being said by someone with a hyphen rather than quotations marks, it's very unusual. Also a lot of the dialogue is continuous and therefore it becomes easy to lose track of who is saying what.
3115168 oh, I see. Writing like this is common in where I live, but I think I can change it in the next chapters if it is too much of a problem.
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That makes more sense then seeing as how you are used to seeing it that way. Whereabouts if you don't mine me asking?
3115188 Poland.
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Cool. It's always neat to see different world perspectives on things.
Oh, bravo. This legitimately made me happy... Kudos to you. my good and most heartwarming friend.
3116066 I'm really glad to hear that :) I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters as well!
3115206 I've changed it in the first chapter, also fixing some spelling errors. I hope it's fine by the way it's now :)
Hmmm interesting bit of stoy you have here , think ill book mark ya and see how it continues on, wonder if its this woman body hopping from character to character or if its going to be different personas all together, or perhaps fluttershy is the only one to change whilst she helps the others come to terms with their attraction with the same sex. So ya im going to stalk you for a time to see how it turns out ^_^.
Mane Medic
By the way... Don't let any of the clowns givin' you downvotes ruin it. You got it, just keep goin.