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Dante24


I like to think I'm a great writer but I suck

Comments ( 23 )

Whoa there's a surprise
Who's the anthro and whos human?

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Spike is human
Twilight is anthro

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The pic looks like a close accurate discription of twilight in the recovery dragon series.
At least from what most of us readers could have imagined

Just be glad nobody drowned while she was distracted from her lifeguard duties.

great fic friend I'm very fan of this couple

What would happen if Celestia, Luna, Cadence, and Flurry Heart surprise visited Spike and his griffin friend?

I wonder how Twilight would feel if Spike gave her flank a real "ride".

If you think this will help forget all those bad TwiSpike fics I've had to go through................
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.................................on second thought this is really helping me forget all those bad TwiSpike fics I've had to go through. :twilightsmile:

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Really? I was going for the Palcomix look for Twilight, but hey if this is how you see her, go for it.

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Spike has a griffin friend?

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Especially since marking her seems to have some sort of enhancement effect on her...or maybe just from the fooling around. Either way, palcomix Twi is hot but I'd like to imagine more detail like this pic above. Perfect ^^

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Dear god the feeling is mutual. No one seems to give twispike much love and devotion these days. But maybe that'll change soon.

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Yes, her name is Gabby.

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true i want to see more twispike in the future there are several possibilities for this shipp

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You should put the name of the artist

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I would, but I have no idea who the artist is. I found this picture on a random site.

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Palcomix? Eewww, not the guy who lewds every furry, favorite cartoon show, video game, etc. and other things too good. :rainbowwild:

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Hey, the "Power of Dragon Mating" series is good.

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I agree with that statement

For anyone wondering, the cover image was done by Maarthul. You can find the original here

The young man wore green shorts with matching sandals, a white undershirt and a purple hawaiian shirt he left unbutton and wore like a jacket.

Unbuttoned

If she wasn't geeking out over the nerdist of things, then she was overthinking the situation to the point that she obsesses about it.

Nerdiest

The beach itself was your typically size area; filled with individuals having a good time.

Sized

Since humans and ponies live together in peace, it wasn't unusual for interspecies dating to occur in fact, it was widely and openly accepted.

Put a comma after “occur”

The tower was only authorized to lifeguards and other personals, anyone else is prohibited from setting foot on it.

Personnel

"SPIKE, WHEN DID YOU GET HERE!" she yelled excited.

Excitedly

"Oh, Spike, i've missed you so much!" she cried.

Capitalize the “i”

"Yeah, i've missed you too." he replied.

Capitalize the “i”

Twilight broke away from the hug wiping away the small tears from her eyes before moving to rest her forehead against Spike's; being mindful of her horn.

Put a comma after the word “hug”

Spike crawl right over her, positioned himself, then in one move, entered her with one thrust.

Crawled

"Oh, m-my g-gosh, Spike." Twilight breathed. "T-That w-was.......oh fuck. D-Don't you d-dare go......t-this long w-without have sex with me again."

Having

"Yeah, looks like." Twilight replied before blushing.

“Looks like it” or “that’s what it looks like”

Grammatical errors aside, this fic had a nice premise, but it felt a bit rushed. I feel like their conversation before having sex should have been longer as it establishes their relationship as beyond just sex. As it is now, the only indication that we get that they’re in love with more than just their genitalia comes after the sex scene at the very end of the fic when they’re watching the sunset together.

Also: how many people drowned while they were busy fucking?

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