Rainbow Dash had the little filly for a while now and she loves her little pony, However, she been recently busy with work and hate to leave Dasher alone. So to keep her company Dash decides to adopt a new pet for her to play with, and this new pet happens to be a tortoise.
Cover art: dm29
Note: First attempt to write a cute and adorable story.
I love this
This was adorable.
I like the concept but you have a lot of grammatical errors...which makes the story hard to read...I would suggest getting a proofreader and cleaning the story up....also in your story description u wrote sash instead of dash....overall I would once again suggest fine tuning with a proofreader...there are a few groups on this site that can help u with this :)
RED = wrong tense
PURPLE Unneeded words
____ = missing words
This is just from the one paragraph, may I suggest getting an editor or proofreader to go over this?
Also is English not your second language?
3084447
No, my grammar just sucks.
3084511 SERIOUSLY!?
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Yeah......
ADORB!!!!!
I died from the cuteness...