Spike went for the goal and scored.

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3196399 I take it I did okay with the sex scene?

this may just be me but when i read the Third POV at the top for some reason in my mind i had an image of pinkie pie sitting there and watching them while explaining to us what was going on.

3197490 Wouldn't be the weirdest thing out there. Though I might make a joke about that in my other story at one point.

3196520 It was amazing.

Wow man, i have to be honest, i never see any spikexfleur shiping, But this one is great, as for the sex, is great, maybe not so long as i hope for, but great in general man 4/5 :D continue this story man, is awesome

3198517 Naw, I want to focus on my other story. Though I did set it up so other could continue it if they like.

As good as the sex scene was this ended up being a very hollow and emotionless finale. Most of this is because of Spike's not very coherent character. And Fleur's lack of development.
Why is Spike incoherent? Because last chapter you told us about how he's been trough several romances, getting mature, and became a succesfull man in business. Yet on this chapter he behaves like any other brute teenager, who has no issues with having sex with a woman he barely knows just as long she is hot.
Why Fleur lacks development? Because she simply doesn't have it. You did a pretty good job telling us what she does for a living. But didn't told us at any point what kind of person she is. And is hard to figure that out when she only talks about her job or giggles about everything Spike says. And in all honesty, all I cant think of her is that she is a whore. Cuz there's is no any indication that she wishes to have sex with Spike for any other reason than lust and/or some shallow interest considering his succes. And that is NOT romantic...

I'm not trying to be too hard on you. I did enjoy the story. But stories with sex and porn are not the same thing for a reason. Next time try to work on your characters a bit more. And try to focus more on the romance, and less in the lust.

3198957 I can understand where you are coming from. While I put some thought into this it was not something I was completely serious with. This is something I wanted to mess around with real quick. Mainly did this to get other people interested in a rather unknown shipping, a quick entry for a Spike shipping contest, and to practice writing a sex scene I plan to write a few for my other story. Your saying it could be better and I agree with you. For my other story I plan for it to have longer romances where the sex doesn't happen for a good long while. If you or anyone wants to do an adaptation or a sequel to this be my guess. Though I appreciate your criticism.

3199002 I'm sure yu'll get better in time.
And here is a pic you may want to use for the cover. twentypercentcooler.net/data/28/b7/28b7559043da63eddde2c292caf95f43.jpg
After all. presentation is always important.

3218711 It's perfect thanks. Got any suggestions for a pic to use for my other story The Legacy of Dragons and Knights. It's basically a banished Spike story where he goes on a quest of self-discovery and forming his own team of fighters and friends.

3219495 Noy my kind of story. But good luck.

I find this story a little short, but other than that, it's fine by me. I expect to see another Spike and Fleur shipping from you. After all, this story is great.

3235633 Maybe but I mainly want to focus on LDK. Believe it or not it's still at the beginning, so as you can see it going to be a really long fic. Might still do more of this on the side but the chapters will probably be few and far in-between.

I. Must. Read.

3242610 Thanks, glad you think so.

Read.

I liked t.

3341160 I'm glad you liked it.

What happened to that awesome pic?

3366355 New NSFW regulation, admins took it.

3367013 Damn, that one was perfect for this story, have they no shame!

3367316 No kidding. I don't suppose you know any good pics for this story?

3367570 Nope, I tried for awhile, didn't see any good ones (or many at all).
So where did you find that one anyway, it was really good.

3371437 Rennes le chateau gave me a link to it. If you want to look at it more just scroll down the comments here.

Where's the pic gone?

3420924 The new NSFW rules took it down.

3421011 Might this one work better:
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3421056 It will do until I can find a human Spike and Fleur pic. Thanks.

3421127 Ok.

3421127 ya could ask a deviant or a tumbler to make one, phantom

3586103 Same here.

3586098 If your talking about underwear Fluer it is because of the new NSFW rules they had to take it down.

As much as I love this story, it pains me to say that it has quite a few grammar and spelling errors.

So, naturally, to resolve this issue, I edited it for you!

https://www.dropbox.com/s/3k7t7x8oz6frd2j/Something%20Unexpected.txt

This should (hopefully) fix many or all errors in those departments.

3634266 Thanks for the help. I don't suppose you might be willing to do some more editing in the future?

3634370
I don't see why not.

Holy crap, how did I miss this one.
and starts messaging them
Should be
and starts massaging them

moarrrr

Served

Wait... How in the hell am I just now finding this?! I've been looking for a finished Spike x Fleur story for the entire two years I've been on here!

Curse you phantom for not telling me about this. You know how I love Spike...

5650723 You do realize that this was like my second to first fanfic I've wrote for this site? It been around just as long. Plus you never mentioned you were looking SpikeXFluer fics.

5650938 Dude, if it has Spike...I'm looking for it. Spike is my homeboy. Anyway, this is going on my favourites list so I can read it later. You rock.

You'll do great even if this is your first clop.

Expecting more soon!