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YEEEAAAHH SPIKE!
i TOTALLY support your decision
This is good, not bad but good. Just good. Needs spacing between paragraphs to avoid a clusterfuck wall of words that would turn of any reader off.
but I enjoyed it nonetheless, I hope to see further progess, been a while since I seem a spike fic.
One more thing, go search for a proofreader/editor and have them help with making this about 20% less messier.
Will do! im rather new at this writing thing..but i shall do my best
Here, try this for grammar.
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thank you, this is helping alot!
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thank you, is much appreciated!
I hope to have the next chapter up tonight,or early morning! Thank you for the likes they make me motivated and im touched that people like this :3
I love this story now.
Oh, and just like another reader said, I totally support your decision.
Damn, this honestly needs to be re-edited, if both of them are older then Peewee can take care of himself, but very glad you added him
Be sure to chance from numbers to words, it makes everything easier. I would very much suggest an editor, other then that though I'm impressed.....you have my attention
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Yes i know it does, as i said before im new to this and will get better as this story is going on. But thank you for the read man, it means alot
2226243 Awesome, I can't wait and never a problem, this is going to be good
2226243 Never a problem, and I'm very glad bro, this is going to be fun. I got your back, DERPY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
seems like a very good concept, but i will wait until i am sure it is what i am looking for before i fav. but none the less seems good.
oh and derpy in a spike fic is rare so i support
Remember, ALWAYS caplize the names of the ponies and other creatures, and Princess is with a capital p, be sure to capilze the i's as well, this is good but it really needs to be re-edited. Come on bro, you should know English
And Peewee some how just disappears......hoW odd
GO DERPY!!!!! She's with the Goddess of the Sun so she'll be fine
NEXT!!!
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I added where Peewee is at :p and i thought i looked over everything >.< gawr i will do better!
2227476 Huh, did I just not see it before?
Peewee is my favorite out of all the eight pets, and yep, might have to go over both chapters again bro
Errors. Errors Everywhere!
Good story though brosky. Look forward to next chapter 
Ugh, so many errors on the title page alone!
After receiving a letter from Princess Celestia, [pointless comma] stating that Twilight and the others wont [won't] be coming back for a long amount of time [ for a long time] ,
[...]
A dragons [dragon's] decision
And that's how you scare of readers!
there wasnt that many errors in my opinion
(probly because I've seen worse)
other than an uncapitalized 'i' in I'll
and the not separating quotes from paragraphs(though I see no one's touched on that subject, so im debunking it as optional)
but overall, they're minor errors that I couldnt care less about
Celestia dropped a wing over Twilight and nuzzled her, "Oh, Twilight, it is okay. You couldn't have known that he was feeling this way if he never spoke up."
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Yes i am aware there are errors and i will do my best to fix them.
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I think people need to just enjoy a good read instead of being grammar Nazi's. :p
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thank you for your corrections
The idea of the story seems solid, but it does seem a bit...I don't know, rushed, maybe?
I'll be keeping an eye on this, though
Your story has potential, it just needs somepony to have a proofreader to make sure there are no errors and is readable.
Interesting so far. Any chance spike will meet a dragoness in this?
2418901 I plan certin things for this story but i won't reveal much but your going to love it so plaese stay tuned
Maybe this story can get better, lets see.
this will be fun to read
any who
if i were spike i don't think there would be much convincing me to come back unless they could prove to me
2510376 we have no doubts
I got to admit I am interested in this soon to be troop of outcast and misfits. I really want to see Spike and Derpy together (Spike would make a great stepdad
lol).I always loved that pairing,and with yours i feel that would be nice compliment to each other characters. Can't wait for the next update.
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We Wait.
Goodbye *is* forever
Please update.
Is this story dead? I like this story so far!