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Might wanna check that tag. I about raged, thinking this was another goddamned Twilight sad story about immortality. It appears to be more of a romance.
2926779
Twi's letter was a little ambiguous, but I think Tia's nailed down that this is a mother-daughter relationship. I don't think romance really applies. I'd almost take this as a slice of life story, so normal life between
and
.
Pretty good but some sentence flaws and the letter seems to flow from one topic to the next without much build up and without tying into the other ones.
This is also kind of a story idea that's been done to death.
That right there confirms my headcannon. No one ever said all alicorns are immortals.
2926809 Momlestia is best mom.
2926832 Do you still need an editor?
2926985 You could be a backup editor if you'd like.
2926819 Yeah i noticed myself too :/ Thanks for commenting tho, really helps.
2926779 Tag is a little messed up because first i thought of writing a story about immortality, but
there are waaaay to much, so i thought of something else.
2926809 I guess you're right and thanks ima add Slice of Life
:pinkie happy: i liked it
2926819 almost every story type has been overused...
2936230 :D Thanks
2937668 any time
i really loved this story and i cant wait to read more from you 
Great Story!!!
Can you tell me next time your making a story?
I wana read it as soon a possible!
2954036 uh sure
I certainly enjoyed this foray into the post-coronation relationship between these two princesses, and I think that you nail down the dynamic between the two in a way that doesn't feel weird or outrageous.
I almost didn't finish, though. The writing, while expressing a good idea, was almost difficult enough to read that I almost gave up. It was just easy enough that I kept going, and I'm glad that I did, but have you considered allowing someone else to beta read / edit for you? Not to change your ideas, but to correct the sentences and make sure that it can always be easily read?
2954942 I can see where your heading. I publish this story the night before I went to the DR. Also I'm a one man army, I got no editors. My bro sometimes helps me edit but usually it's myself. As much as I want some editors, I can't get myself to burden others over my problem. :3