The one thing that makes friendship challenging is changes..
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You've got a lot of issues with grammar and tense. You also skip over words and use the incorrect forms of other words.
For example, "Your Faith Student". It should be 'Faithful'.
It's a great concept though, it's just your writing that's less than stellar.
I like the idea, but I have to agree with CharmBracer. It's just too... messy. :/ And too many grammatical errors! (Also, Rainbow Dash, not Rainbowdash. Two words, not one.)
Jumping too far too quickly is a problem that I tend to have as well. Yeah you have grammar issues but this is a good start. I look forward to reading the rest of your story. Just keep on truckin' and everything will be fine.
So, how long until you start shipping? javascript:smilie('
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Either way , I love the premise you're going for.
2999022 Thanks for pointing it out!
2999022 I'd be sure to keep that in mind.
2999844 Cool, thanks!
2999967 Thanks for your support
This looks like the start of something interesting. I look forward to seeing where it leads.
Do you plan to keep the letter format, or use this letter as a prologue to a story?
Also, a minor typo in the title: "Things Changes" should be "Things Change".