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ShadowBrony


Just a simple writer living in the shadows.

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Twilight has been having some weird dreams lately about strange dark creatures. Twilight tries to ignore them as just simple nightmares. But one day, the creatures of her dreams become a reality. Soon she has to fight to protect her friends, but the only way to do so is to fight using powers and magic she has never seen before. Just a normal day in Equestria, right?

(Warning: most of this story will be taking place in Equestria and will in no way be crossed over with the characters of the Kingdom Hearts series. This is just Keyblades, Heartless and Ponies.
All MLP Universes crossed over into were done so with permission from their respective Authors.)
[Featured on 5/5/14 and again on 5/25/14 ]
Picture done by AshuraZXexianGlitch

Chapters (41)
Comments ( 450 )

Considering how I am a HUGE fan of Kingdom Hearts AND you used music from the upcoming HD reMIX of KH, I am totally watching this!

~Raxel~:heart:

why cant you at least but king mickey in this story please

kh and mlp 2 best things in this world?

i think i fav this lol

2717015 Maybe a possible cameo? Hmm. I will consider this.:rainbowdetermined2:

AH , CUT THE CRAP! BRING ON THE MEAT!

Meat = more chapters. (Can anypony recognize that reference?)

2717220 I love Little Shop of Horrors.:rainbowlaugh: I will try to have the next chapter out in a few days.:rainbowdetermined2:

2717154 please please please don't, your idea of using only mlp characters is perfect, please just stick to that decision :fluttershyouch: .... I have been searching for a long time for a good kh/mlp crossover, this first chapter gives me hope I've finally found it, keep it up :pinkiehappy:
also its spelt antenna

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Yay. :yay: you got it right!

Anyway, here is another:

FEED ME CHAPTERS!

OK, I'm done. I'll be looking forward to more.

Is Twilight going to have a command deck or is this gonna be similar to KH1 and 2? Please be command deck. It's awesome. :fluttershysad:

"No Sora or Riku, just keyblades, heartless and ponies."
Yesh, this is what i've always WAAAAAAAANTED!

I love this!
Moar?

-Kiryu :moustache:

So far this story looks to have a lot of promise.
The intro is a good retelling from kingdom hearts, and I'm looking forward to how you integrate this into Equestria.

The only drawback I see here is the use of language. Many times your choice of words reduces the impact of what you are trying to say. While there are few actual errors, I recommend getting a proofreader or a pre reader to help you make the most of your story.

2717411 Sorry this is going to be a little bit more like KH1. :twilightsheepish:

Nice job, I really liked this story. Considering how poorly written most KH crossovers are, I have to applaud your excellent writing :pinkiehappy:

2723661 Thanks man. I don't usually get awesome comments like that about my writing very often. I promise I will not disappoint!:rainbowdetermined2:

I wonder how everything will start in Equestria?
This should be good. Watching. :twilightsmile:

Will read later. Though you get a thumbs up for Kingdom Hearts.

(Later)

Its later and I read it. Well done. Keep this up and you will probably have the best Kingdom Hearts crossover on the site.
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And just like that I am hooked. :twilightsmile:

This chapter felt a little rushed to me but still good. Also, remember, every time a character speaks it needs to start a new paragraph. For some reason a lot of people don't know this. But those are the only two issues that I saw. Keep up the good work.
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2737304 Yeah, I think it might help if I slow down a bit, instead of trying to finish this in just a few days. I have a very busy schedule. If you don't mind waiting a week, the next chapter should be a lot better.:twilightsheepish:

2737449 I don't mind. To be honest I'd rather wait one month for a really high quality chapter than have a rushed poorly written chapter once a day.

God, twilight brushed off the possible death off spike like nothing...

-Kiryu :moustache:

2738011 :twilightblush: Sorry, I feel like I rushed through this way to much. I promise I will slow things down from here on out.

Well, even though you took the fast approach, its still a good chapter. Please involve something from outside of the Equestria world; it'll make it that much better. Story telling is still spot on, well done!

2738150 I'm not sure what you mean by outside of the Equestria world. Do you mean other creatures besides ponies? Or do you mean beyond the world itself? :unsuresweetie:

since Disney's been done she should travel the hub!

the timing and choice of the music needs a little work. While the songs are great, Vector to the heavens is a BATTLE theme and doesn't really fit with 'running to Fluttershy's house'. But that's my opinion.:pinkiesad2:

2739117 and traveling the hub sounds like a wonderful idea.:pinkiecrazy:

2740371>>2739117>>2738561 Hmmm. I will defiantly consider it but what my original intention was to have her explore Equestria itself. Maybe have her visit the different kingdoms like the Dragons or the Changelings. Or kingdoms we know very little about.:rainbowdetermined2: One idea I also had just for laughs, but I don't think I will do, is to have her travel across different Fanfics.:pinkiecrazy:

2740664 is to have her travel across different Fanfics. < this could go really well or very bad:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:

2740675 I know, that's why I don't think I will do that. Maybe sometime I will do a alternant chapter where she does this, but for now I don't think it is going to happen.:twilightsheepish:

2740687 how would she react to pound puppies? (her persona)

2740693 I don't watch pound puppies so I couldn't tell ya. Aside from Transformers and Dan vs, I haven't watched anything else from the HUB.:unsuresweetie:

hey you should have a heartless angel boss thing just saying

2740664 I'm not sure how she would react to Pinkamina.:pinkiecrazy: That would be a little dark for a Kingdom Hearts crossover.

2740693 That would be adorable. Simply adorable.

well good and yes i will do a repeat of everyone else slow it down a bit i know its fucking hard to write it slow since everyone actually just want to jump right in but still lol

oh and also wtf is up with angle? how did you manage to misspell angel 2-3 times?

2742548 It was my stupid spell check. It kept changing it on me. I thought I had gone back and fixed it but I guess not.:twilightsheepish:
Edit: just went back and fixed it for sure, thanks for letting me know.

Well it seemed less rushed so that's good. If can do the same with the next story section that will be good. But the quality of this chapter (while short) has improved since the last one. Good work.
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I must say, I love the way you use the Kingdom hearts music with your stories. It adds a surprising amount of immersion to it

2761803 Thanks, I really like your avatar by the way.:pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

That was a good chapter, but a couple questions come to mind, namely did Twilight and her friends end up in another world? Cause the thing that took them is associated with the world being destroyed. If that isn't the case, and the world didn't get destroyed, what was the point of using the giant world destroying storm?

2762869 The storm didn't destroy the world, just Ponyville. She is still in Equiestria, just really far from home. Don't worry, this will all be explained next chapter.:rainbowdetermined2: (This world is NOT connected. But it is now tied to the Darkness.)

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Ok, that makes a heck of a lot more sense, in the sense that you're keeping it in equestria

Nice. Not perfect but getting better. Still feels a tiny bit rushed to me but the important thing is that your improving. So continue the good work.
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You're right It did seem a little rushed, but still good. But you need to remember one thing. There is no such thing as falling behind. Take as long as you need, if it's good people won't care how long it took. Do your best and keep up the good work.

Nice work. This chapter didn't seem very rushed this time. Keep improving and I think you might be able to hit the featured page.

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