trahzo
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Can't you provide a description for the actual story, not just your monologue?
2713033 I dunno, he DID sum it up perfectly. "Yet another story where Rarity dumps spike and he fucks Apple Bloom instead".
Tou missed out rarity
I'm going to read this because Rarity rejecting Spike makes me happy.
Funny. :) Alot of 4th wall breaking.
......uh well okay then.....I don't what to say about this at all....
2713296 were the hell do you get off saying that
2714156 Go away, you are not welcome here.
kind of sloppy and all over the place. you can do better than this
Dafuq did I just read?
No. Just no. It's an interesting concept. But it's very very sloppy. Several characters are painfully OOC. Some parts make 0 sense ( especially Flash Sentry being married to Twilight). And a lot of story needed to be developed before the actual events you have written actually have happened.
Sorry bro
Well...
I think you have a perfect plot to make a great fan-fic. That's why a give you a positive, but to be honesty, if you re-wright this, with more details, without rush, i think you will do a grat job! think about it! ^.~
It seems a bit rushed just a small amount...love the plot though
2831859
Silly filly! Everyone loves... The 'plot'.
0.o
good idea rushed faster than sonic the hedgehog, roadrunner, and the space shuttle combined!
mind Is trying to both make sense and keep pace, but failing terribly at both situations.
not bad of a story
panzer rating?
you get a panzer 1, 2/5 panzers
Eat her 'pie'..........
I think I can tell where you got this from. Did you happen to see an anime called Clannad? They have this same fight on one episode.
4704035 I love Clannad!
Me too! It's sweet, but sad at some points.
Left a dislike due to the poor grammar.
While this a fun read I have to point out a few things. First some positives, the SpikeBloom pairing is one of my favorites (so that gets a plus), the writing did a decent job of getting the Apple accent down, and it's always fun to see people poke fun at the Sparity pairing. Now for some negatives: there are numerous grammatical mistakes (even when you exclude Apple speak), several places have missing signs (I counted at least 2 cases of quotations missing or improperly placed), missing punctuations (there were a few run on sentences, or at least they seemed that way). I also noticed improper words in a few places.
It was a fun story but needs some editing.
I found all three