Dog Days

by TwoLonelyBronies

Dog Days: I Promise You Won't Lose Me

Dog Days: Chapter one
“I promise you won’t lose me”

Spike awoke to the rays of light from Celestia’s morning sun warming him from the resonance of the nights chilly bite.“I swear sometimes I wish that thing would just burn out.” Spike grumbled under his breath being careful as so not to wake Twilight. Twilight played such a large role in the young dragons life, she not only played the role of his mother, she also played the role of his big sister, she raised him and she meant the world to him.

Stumbling out of his bed, Spike walked downstairs to find Twilight face down in a book in the library. Spike couldn’t help but smile, she was cute when she was asleep. He quietly walked over to grab the broom and dustpan, he was happy to clean the house as she slept, she had spent all night reading again and it was the least that he could do. After he put the books back, of course being sure to put each book in its designated place on the bookshelf, otherwise Twilight would have a panic attack when she woke up. A few minutes after Spike started dusting the plethora of books, Twilight stirred a little before sitting up and stretching.

“Hey Spike what are you doing up so early?” She asked yawning.
“Cleaning up the mess you left, you know Twilight, you really need to stop staying up all night reading, what does the Princess have you studying now?” Spike said nonchalantly.

“She told me to begin my studies on foreign affairs, there have been some problems down in Saddle Arabia and she wants my opinion on how to take action, something about Saddle Arabian soldiers firing on a transport carriage from Canterlot.” Twilight replied seeming to be lost in thought.

“Still Twilight she never asked you to stay up all night studying” Spike said becoming irritated, mostly because Twilight seemed to put the Princess before her own health more often then not.
“Yes Spike, but she wants my opinion by tomorrow and I need to study in order to form a proper textbook opinion, and as her pupil, I will not let Celestia down.”

Spike sighed “Whatever you say Twilight, hey do we have any gems left? I’m starving”
“There’s a big old emerald with your name on it, I’ll give it to you on one condition Spike”
“W-whatever you want Twilight” Spike said letting his hunger get the best of him.
“Good to see that you’re so willing, anyway Spike the girls are coming over today and I was wondering if you could tidy the place up a little.” Twilight said, her piercing, violet eyes meeting Spikes own.Spike understood all he had to do was say yes and he would have that big juicy emerald she had promised.

“Sure thing Twilight now w-where was that emerald you p-promised me?” Spike said, saliva dripping from his mouth as she unveiled the beautiful jewel she had in her saddlebag, the light gleaming off of it in such a way that it looked as if it belonged in the princess her self’s own treasury.
“Right here.” She said tossing the gem to Spike who with practiced ease caught it in his mouth and ate it all in one bite. “You should head over to the Carousel Boutique, Rarity said she wanted to see you, she sounded serious so I would suggest hurrying.” Spikes face lit up even more “ Sure thing Twilight, Ill head over there right away!” Twilight smiled from ear to ear “Ok just but when you get back your gonna have to make this place spotless ,anyways have a good day Spike” She said opening the door and practically shoving him out.

“Okay. Bye Twilight!” He called as he left for the Boutique which, undoubtedly, held the beautiful Rarity. Just as soon as he left, he found himself at the door of the Boutique and shortly after knocking he was let in.
“Oh hello Spike, I wasn’t expecting you for another 15 minutes deary, but please come in and take a seat, I have something I want to talk to you about.” Rarity said unable to keep the concern out of her voice.

“Okay.” Spike said, his smile fading almost instantaneously. “What’s wrong?” Spike thought to himself “is she going to tell me she hates me?!That she never wants to talk to me! or is it something even worse? Oh please Celestia don’t be something worse!”

“Spike I’ve heard some….things through gossip, and I’m sure Twilight has to…”Rarity said in a somewhat soothing tone, however Spike wasn’t falling for it. He dug his claws into the sides of the plush chair in nervousness and a little fear, for what she would say next is what he feared but didn’t know.
“Y-yes Rarity….what have you….heard?” Whatever she was going to say next was causing Spike to tremble, hopefully she wouldn’t notice but he was nervous beyond belief.

“Spike dear, I really care about you and I feel you must know this, there have been a few….well….problems in Saddle Arabia, others may not believe what I say, but I know you will, I think we are approaching a war there has been talk among the people….although I’m not certain …I have a very bad feeling about this and I thought I should tell you.” “Ha! That’s it for a second I was worried. Well now that I think about it…Twilight was talking about this earlier….well I’m sure its nothing.” Spike said relived

“Hmmm that’s odd, Celestia asked Twilight to read up on foreign affairs because of this, and she said something about them firing on a carriage from Canterlot…..well anyways thanks for uh telling me about this, I have to go clean up the library before you and the other elements come over today….so BYE!” That was weird why would she call me over to talk about something so…..well….dumb. I’d hate to admit this to myself but Rarity is getting a little weird, heh…. I guess I should talk to Twilight about this.
“Oh Spike…..if you only knew what I was trying to tell you…”Rarity said under her breath as Spike walked away.

Before I knew it I was back at the library cleaning, It seems like Twilight isn’t here….oh well I needed some time alone anyways. Well maybe she is here. “TWILIGHT?! YOU HOME?!” after a few seconds of waiting I decided to just go over to my basket and wait for her there. Wow I thought I cleaned this morning, it’s a mess in here. So much…..dust and dishes. I have to admit to myself, I’m a pretty good assistant, or at least when Twilight doesn’t feel like causing a world war in the library. “Hello? Spike are you home?” Wait that’s Twilights voice….huh I wonder where she went.”
“Yeah Twilight, I’m home I just finished cleaning up the place….hey Twilight? What’s in that bag?” Wait a second, I recognize that bag anywhere its from Sugar Cube Corner… but why?” Before I could think any further Twilight’s horn became wrapped in glowing magenta, pulling a single cupcake from the mysterious pink bag.

“It’s a Ruby Cupcake, specially made for you Spike, I know its your favorite and I just thought you’d like it.” This seems really odd, Twilight barely ever commits a random act of kindness…..so why would she just go and get me such an…..awesome….beautiful……oh forget it I don’t care I want that cupcake.
“Uh Twilight…..what’s this REALLY about?”
“Spike, remember how there have been some problems down in Saddle Arabia?”
“Yeah….”Why does everyone keep mentioning this to me?
“I just want you to know Spike, whatever happens, I love you and I always will, I don’t care what you do, just Spike remember we all love you, all of your friends. You may not know what I’m talking about…but just please, please never give up and remember how much I love you Spike…”She stopped talking as tears began to flow down her cheek, all I could offer her was a hug. It wasn’t much but its all I could think to give her without being weird, if it could be any weirder.

“Twilight I have no clue what you’re talking about, or why you’re crying, but just know I’ll always love you…you’re like my mother.”
“That’s why I’m….c-crying. I raised you Spike and you’ll never know what you mean to me……I..I….just don’t want to lose you….”
“Don’t worry…..I promise you won’t lose me.”

Author's Note:

Sorry guys but this is our first fanfiction and it may not be perfect,but please by any means, tell us all of your complaints and give us tips on what can be improved.

Comments

[APoeticHeart]

Well, being a huge Spike fan, you have me intrigued yet saddened for what is going on. This chapter feels a bit rushed, and I think it would be best if you maybe separated the parts in which the character speaks. Say if Twilight speaks one sentence, make a space then write what the other character says. Don't let their talking run in the same sentence. Other than that I am very interested to see what is happening and how it all involves Spike.

[terrycloth]

Well, the inconsistent spacing is a little distracting, but otherwise I don't see anything specific to complain about although so far there isn't much, just everypony acting all weird around spike.

[APoeticHeart]

2704235 I just read the summary. So, Spike is off to war, and Twilight and the others aren't even going to stop this from happening, and he doesn't even know it. Gosh, Celestia is being a major troll already.

[AwkwardTaco]

I have this dogma of providing explanation of why I dislike a story (which I did some thirty seconds ago).

I dislike war stories as a default setting. To clarify, I love Human war stories, seeing as they know war and how to wage it handsomely.

Ponies.... not so much. We're dealing with spear-wielding, magic-toting, equines under the rule of a benevolent/malevolent monarch in these kinds of stories. As improbable as this seems under such heavy canon found in this peculiar fandom (i.e. "friendship is Magic" as their way of life), we find that they are apparently fully prepared and suddenly thrusting themselves into battle.

Now that my opinion is out of the way, let me lay down facts that you might find to be more helpful:

1. Pacing. Dear Lord. Slow down! I feel as though this plot line has been advanced at FTL speed. I can't grasp the details, however lacking, in this piece. There is nothing that makes me visualize the scenarios that are set in place.

2. Block text. It's indented, alright, but very sparingly. Dialogue seems jumbled and is confusing to read.

3.Grammar: decent, but many fixable errors. Mostly dialogue commas and other such things need to be fixed.

Anyway, I see you've only recently joined. There are also apparently two of you. I suggest getting together and fixing this up and brainstorming immediately.

[DARKPHANTOM13]

So there going to send Spike to fight a war with no training, never even been in a fight before, and none of his friend going to voice any protest? While I am curious about the story, I can't help but face palm at the lack of logic.

[Max]

2704247 Is not matter of being a troll, SHE IS A QUEEN. She has to look after her kingdom and having a dragon on their side for the war isnt good?

Altough we don't even know if they are sending him witouth training, a baby dragon going to war? Don't think so, they will have to train him and wait for his grow spurt.

[DARKPHANTOM13]

2704952 Like I said I am curious about where this story goes and will give an honest chance. Though I have read stories where logic was thrown through a window so I won't complain too much.

[APoeticHeart]

2704989 I just want to see if the Mane Six will say anything to Spike about it or just leave him in the dark about it until it is too late and he finds out himself.

[Jman796]

$20 says he got drafted

[Path_of_cloud]

You are aware that a space goes after all punctuation, right? It's kind of a important grammar thing that will make most people smack their heads into a table.

[Dragon Blaze-X]

you have my attention

[JayGraphite]

time for...
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[Draconicus the Reaper]

I don't know why but I cant help but think that Spikes going to be the ultimate soldier