After Pinkie and Gilda get into a large fight during her visit, Pinkie decides enough is enough. She calls on Twilight, and finally convinces her to conduct one of her world famous rap battles that she hasn't performed since fillyhood so she can settle her problems with a certain feathered flaw. All Pinkie's hope rests in Twilight, and after the battle, Twilight feels more refreshed than ever. Are there any other ponies in town that are feeling sort of down?
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you realise theres a story just like this already
hey! this is pretty good! Sadly, there is already and Epic Rap Battles of MLP
Ooh, I like rap battles. Let's see...
>Gilda physically hurts Pinkie
Not sure if want...
Also, color tags don't carry across page breaks, so if you want the color to stay for the whole stanza you need to put the opening tag in front of every line.
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Yes, I do. But mine has different raps, done in a different style on a different story
Please vote if it's not too much trouble, I have the next chapter ready but I can't post it until the votes are in. Voting ends June 6th
Hm, the rap was not too bad, for my tastes.
I'll give the vote to Gilda. The last verse entirely...dayum.
Do you guys really have to go as far as to say I'm a teriible writer? That's I'm worthless and pathetic, that I'm immature and dumb? I don't want to fight all the time like I always end up doing on any story I write, so I'm deleting any mean comments. Please just stop!
I think this is great! It's just some bits don't feeli like they are right (like the first four lines of diamond tiara's rap) but maybe that's what you were going for. I dunno. But I like it! (And silver wins :D)
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Thanks for the compliment! For the beginning of Diamond's rap, I was kind of going for the theme that she can't really rap at first but gets the hang of it, and thinks she's too good to rap in the first place, so lost in her own voice that she loses track of what she wanted to say
2679521 ok yeah that's what I was thinking but I wasn't sure :) how bout...diamond dogs and rarity/spike?
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Actually, that's a great idea! I'll definitely do that sometime, I've been looking for a way to use the Diamond Dogs in a rap. Currently, I'm working on Scootaloo vs. Applebloom and Sweetie Belle
Pinkie Pie won
*Sigh* I've taken a look at your previous story and come back to this.
And quite frankly I am not a fan of you're attitude.
People are giving you advice to make it better and all you're doing is deleting comments and picking fights. That's why they're mean to YOU.
And I wouldn't be surprised if this comment was deleted either. Go on. Prove everyone right. Again.
Sure when I came here I wasn't as good. But eventually I got better. How? By accepting advice. By learning from my mistakes. And where am I now?
150+ followers strong.
I'm not here to boast, but I think you could seriously be better had you actually opened up and actually learned from your mistakes.
So it's up to you. Do you want to have bad stories that are easy to write but are universally hated? Or do you want to admit your mistakes and write good fics that people other then yourself will enjoy?
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I am not going to delete your comment, but only because it is advice WITHOUT insults. Whenever my stories get mean comments, somehow, a fight always starts. That's the reason I delete them before something starts. If you have any advice about my story, I'd love to hear it
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Also, I am not picking fights
2684221 Regardless of whether insults are present or not, advice is advice. I understand if the comment is all hate and no advice, but never overlook info just because there's a mean insult attached to it.
And as for fights, just leave the comments alone and ignore them. Never ever engage a mean comment.
Unless it is ridiculously stupid. Then maybe.
Now onto the story...
Well, for starters, there is already a Rap battle fic. Although you have changed some elements, the big picture in general is more or less the same. And for that, you WILL be accused of copying. Regardless of whether you've seen Epic Rap Battles of MLP before or not.
And also, the story, I know, you're kinda new, this is only your second fic, but it's kind of rushed. Go into detail about your surroundings, the background, everything you can think of really.
I see potential, but, you can further your skill if you just follow what other people say. Even if they are mean.
Kid, I can relate, believe me. Having people just insult your fic is bad, even worse when that user is very popular.
All said and done, I suggest you stop deleting comments, and do your best to improve. If you need tips, help, anything, fell free to leave a PM.
-RIPTID3
Pinkie Pie WINS
I wish there was a Gilda emoticon, just for the purpose of trolling here.
Well first off someone.... 2684650 pretty much said most of what was on my mind. And phrased it better then I'm sure I could even given time
. In my opinion (not that it should matter to anyone or anypony) is that at the least the CMC battle could use some work. Other then that I look forward to seeing more
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You fucking deleted the comments.
GO DIE IN A HOLE!
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What are you talking about? I stopped deleting comments a long time ago. You, my friend, are obviously a troll. Get your trollballs of my story, for I do not like trollballs
2731999
I'm not a troll.
Yo are a troll
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You annoy me, for I am not a troll, I am the person who's going to make your life online a living hell if you don't stop right now
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NOPE!
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You make absolutely not sense at all. So I will block you. Good day.
WOAH GUYS!!! SCOOTS HIT SB IN THE FACE WITH A DOOR YOU MADE FUN OF HER DEAD PARENTS!!!! TOOO FAAAAAAR!!!!!!!
i thank scootaloo won
Sir/madam, don't listen to the haters. I actually enjoyed your story and put your raps to music. I tweaked the lyrics slightly but most of it was original. Your a pretty good writer and though I understand constructive criticism, don't listen to the haters. Listen to the people that give you tips on how to improve.
About the battle. I think scootaloo won but I also think her friends went to far. Mentioning her parents crosses a line as does what AB says before leaving. It isn't Scootaloo's fault but AB makes it seem like it is. It was Sweetie's idea and therefore all her fault.
Dang, Gilda got the last word, but I still vote for Pinks.
I noticed you fed a para sprite known as Theater Critic. Totally agreeing with MonkeyKnight, I recommend avoiding them. Actually, it is better to delete a parasprite's comment than have it sit there getting likes and then they gain confidence without your feedback, and they will multiply.
Btw, Sweetie Belle hands down won this round of:
EPIC PONY RAP BATTLES OF HISTORY!!!!
Will read when I get the time. Always curious to see what someone else envisions for a rap-centered story.
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I think so too. Well, Apple Bloom was good too.
I enjoyed it.
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As do I.
Ouch that was harsh, gotta give this round to Gilda. Pinkie Pie's got to step up her lyrical repertoire. I'd like to see a Spike vs. Rarity though or a Rainbow Dash vs. Lightning Dust or Spitfire.
The rhymes got much better in this chapter, I have to agree Silver Spoon took this round.
Damn that escalated quickly, Applebloom dropped the bomb and Scootaloo just started spitting. Can't say who won this round, Scootaloo was blasting them then she tanked when she lost it, and Sweetie Bell's verse goes hard. Anyways I have an intense dislike for doors now.
I have to say Sweetie Belle, and Applebloom won. It was a close tie tho...And wear are the CMC's sisters in all of this? I'm pretty sure their sisters wouldn't want them saying stuff like this to each other...Do Luna vs. Celestia next. Or Applejack vs. Rainbow Dash!
Gilda wins!