((The idea from this story was taken from chapter 12 of Gravitys Rainboom fantastic story: MIA. I've talked with the author, and he allowed me to write this story, since I feel as though it will be somewhat similar.))
This story has been cancelled! You can discover the ending (last story on the page) HERE
They say that Spartans never die; that they're only missing in action. But can that really be true if you don't feel alive? If the very purpose of your existence is suddenly taken from you?
Noble Six detonated the rigged slip-space drive on the Covenant corvette as Jorge-052 simply floated back down to Reach, gripping her dogtags tightly.
To Reach, Jorge, and the UNSC, Spartan-B312 is gone; whether it be KIA or MIA.
But to Equestria, Noble Six is anything but dead...
Good so far. Breaking the language barrier would be nice.
2621035 All in due time.
Okay. Few questions. Screw questions. I love the style! It's raw and speaks of chaos, fast actions without outrunning the characters. I begin to like the taste of such stories.
Okay, maybe one question. Are the marines officially called Spartans, or is it her division or what? I didn't quiet catch that in my few attempts to understand Halo-fiction.
Okay, maybe two questions, What sis KIA supposed to mean?
Okay, maybe three questions. How does this storyverse handle the different colour-shemes of the worlds? That's the biggest problem I have with HiE.
O... How did you fuse punctuation with style? That's genius blasphemy!
2621045 1. Marines are called marines. Spartans are called Spartans. In Halo: Reach (the game in which Noble Six comes from), you fight alongside marines.
2. KIA is a military term meaning "Killed In Action", and is used when a soldier is confirmed to be deceased in a combat situation. In the Halo universe, Spartans are never listed as KIA in an effort to boost moral and feed the myth that Spartans never die, since they are genetically enhanced super soldiers.
3. It doesn't, really. I'm not planning to address it, but Six sees things a bit darker than the ponies see them, because the ponies have some mutation or what-not that literally brightens their vision.
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Good enough for me.
I remember reading something sort of like this.
Let's see where this goes.
2621337 I'm sorry, did you say something?
Those must be some pretty damn strong ropes to make a Spartan struggle to get out of them.
2621477 Magically reenforced!
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Great description
2621489 I pride myself on my descriptions. Thank you!
2621511 It's really hard to understand what you're saying. Maybe there's some sort of anti-rudeness filter on this story?
2621529
Are you our new FelixDawn?
2621537 Not quite sure who that is.
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FelixDawn. The guy who deletes comments with any kind of criticism. Everybody hates him. Don't be like him. Halo universe is incredibly overused, and the spartans are boring. Even worse than imperial space marines from w40k.
2621555 The only good criticism is constructive criticism, in which someone gives their honest opinions about what makes the story bad without insulting the writer or the content which they write.
So what if, to you, the Halo universe is overused? I have 28 people on this story alone who say otherwise. It's the same for Spartans.
The Halo stories take place in around the date 2550 so horse would only have been out of wide use for all of 600 some years. Not 2000.
2621608 Because fuck math!
But you're right.
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Nope. Any kind of feedback is good. In any form. Any sort of feedback is to be analyzed no matter how rude it may seem. That's what they've taught me at the college.
I don't like it. I'm annoyed every time I see a halo crossover on the main page, for reasons stated in my previous comment. And I'm going to tell the author about it.
Because millions of flies thirteen-year old halo fanboys can't be wrong.
I have my own opinion, different from theirs.
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"You're story sucks." is still feedback, and useless. They do not tell how the story "sucks" so that the author can try harder to make it better, or to better future stories.
Good for you!
It's still not useful criticism, though.
How is it wrong to begin with when it's an opinion? They're not saying that this story is the greatest Halo crossover fiction to ever be written of all time. They're saying that they like it, when they favorite it.
Much better than some of the excessively violent and OOC Halo crossover fare I've read so far, so far.
2621707 I'm on the Halo Wiki for this and, apparently, Noble Six is a bit out of character, because she's/he's apparently very social in-game, but that doesn't quite add up to their back story (being a lone wolf-assassin type of Spartan) for me, so in this story she'll be more antisocial.
2621655 Noted. You seem to be alone with the intensity and starkness of your opinion however, therefore you must understand the author need not change the story on your opinion alone if he disagrees.
For the record I am ambivalent about the Halo series, and so far I have liked this story the most so far out of the (not many) Halo/MLP crossovers I've read.
The author could ask, if he really cares. That's what the good author would do.
Well, that's quite easy.
It's wrong. In my opinion.
I never said they were.
And I'm saying I don't like it, because Halo universe is one huge cliche, and because an average spartan has a personality of a doorknob. They're interesting to play with, but that's just it.
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Or the criticizer, who took the 'job' upon themselves by starting this.
But you implied it.
Aaaaand hostage time
Just wondering... Does Six just have the default equipment, or is it something else?
2621853 What do you mean? She has a standard DMR with twelve shots left, no secondary weapon, and zero grenades. Her armor configuration won't be too heavily expanded in the story.
2621861 Armor! That's what I was thinking of. Strange how one can forget even the simplest of words. Anyway, I was asking about the armor. I guess I'll just assume it's the default, then.
2621966 I'm at the mercy of the story when it comes to chapter length. Sometimes I just get a really good cliffhanger that I can't help but tackle, and for that I'm sorry.
I can, however, do my best to work on making the paragraphs bigger. Thanks for the tip!
yes omg this chapter was epic ... how are u gonna get over the language barrier? oh and first!!!!
2622058 I think it'll stay as a game of charades, actually.
To bad Dot didn't come with her. An AI would be extremely useful right about now.
2622109 Auntie Dot was never actually with any member of Noble Team. She was somewhere unknown, keeping contact with Noble Team through their radios and tracking them through satellites.
2622135 Which is why its sad that she couldn't come with. I mean you just transported a SPARTAN to another world via point blank Slipspace drive detonation, Dot coming with her wouldn't be that much of a stretch. Besides the armor Six is using couldn't hold her anyways. Didn't have the system to hold her that Chief's had.
2621716 I mainly meant for the ponies. I haven't played or looked into the Halo series enough to determine the personality of any of those characters, but if they all act as I've seen them written so far they could stand a little artistic license, I feel.
For this story you can suggest she was disoriented and acted in a more guarded fashion than normal, then have her try to be more social once she's gotten over her initial apprehension.
2622164 It would be quite a bit of a stretch, since Auntie Dot is actually anchored down somewhere.
It's kind of like just being on the phone with another person right before you activate the drive, and then having that person pulled through their phone and the rupture to be with you.
2622174 Slipspace drive to the face. And you think pulling an electronic data stream along is bit to much?
But before we get any further let me state one more time that even if she had come along Six would have no way to use her because the armor is wrong.
So really this whole argument is pointless.
2622196 Yeah, just two Halo fanboys arguing xD
But it's really not that too far-fetched, since the slip-space drive is meant to collapse the distance in space from point A to point B. It did what it was supposed to do.
2622217 Yes it makes travel shorter, however it is not instantaneous. A human frigate can travel only a few lightyears in one twenty four hour period in slipspace. A Covenant cruiser on the other hand gets something like a couple HUNDRED light years in the same time frame. A Forerunner keyship gets a thousand light years in that time, but they're asshats and so don't count.
So when it closed on her the best thing that could have happened is that she died from the explosion. The worst is that she is stuck in Slipspace and slowly asphyxiating.
2622272 Oh. I had no idea there was a time frame for slip-space travel. o-o
2622279 I have way to much free time on my hands.
Also That's why in the Spartan Ops Epilogue, The Infinity was able to make the jump so fast. It not only had Forerunner engines but the Slipspace abilities of Forerunner vessels. ONI has been very busy little people. Then they shot their foremost forerunner expert in the arm while simultaneously shooting themselves in the foot.
2622302 Hooray for Halsey!
Well, this is very interesting. I like how you are working with a real language barrier here, and I am especially liking how you managed to convey culture shock.despite that. This should make things very interesting in the future because Six is once again armed and the ponies have no way of knowing about the ammo restrictions (although this is a Spartan so silly things like no ammo are more of an inconvenience than anything else) so they will have to be very careful around her.
2622461 I thought you were going to bed? But thanks for the compliment
2622466 Well, I'm glad you had a chance to read the story, and I'm glad you liked it so far! Good night!
2621045 KIA stands for Killed In Action.