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Darkswirl


Sometimes I like to pretend that I'm good at writing.

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Every MLP-FIM episode rewritten where magic exists, but technology is used more commonly. Teen for language.

Twilight Sparkle is Celestia's top student- although only because her father works for the Royal Intelligence Agency. She could really care less about being pushed into the spotlight, but when Princess Celestia sends Twilight to Ponyville in an attempt to get her to make some friends and break away from technology... Well, like with any story, things don't always go as planned.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 39 )

"I fear no pony. But that thing... It scares me." Twilight whimpered softly.

:rainbowlaugh: This, and the rest of the story, is brilliant!

One problem - pictures weren't all loading. I'll try later.

And... wait, no. It can't be. Am I really... firs...

Don't say it!

Wait, what the buck? Pinkie?

Yepperrooney!

What are you doing hijacking my comment?

Weeeeellll, you were going to say the word, and you know you're not supposed to, and if you did that would be soooooo not fun, and...

Pinkie.

...you'd be gone, and you might never see me again...

PINKIE!

Yes?

If it's attached to a relevant comment, it doesn't matter. Now could you please leave my comment alone?

Okie-Dokie-Loki!

Sorry about that, folks...

This story has a very "Letters From A Disgruntled Friendship Student" feeling on it only in this universe it seems possible that Twilight will make some real friends. Don't see what being a jerk has to do with tech-dicted (and being a huge nerd). And if Twilight has been online as much as the first part suggests I'm almost certain she had to make a few online friends....

I have to say blastdragon is right, i mean come on if she online all the time than she already made some frds already.

Oh and she find out they have dial-up 56K speed

2296445 Yes, this does have a very "Letters From A Disgruntled Friendship Student" feel to it. I think being a jerk comes from the fact that on the internet, you don't have have to worry about others feeling if you don't want to. Plus if something bad happens, you can yell "FUCK!!" then spend some time cooling off before making a response. Twi has gotten so used to that that she just starts going off at everyone when they annoy her. That's my theory anyway. Once she calms down and learns a little self-censoring, she should make friends just fine.

I like it. And your section breaks are hilarious.

This is...awesome. Pure awesome! :pinkiehappy:

MEET THE PYRO REFRENCE FTW!

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Oh the FUCKING irony...
what do I get when I click chapter 1?
A TRICYCLE WITH A ROCKET LAUNCHER!
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I wish... 404'd, biach :twilightangry2:

Spike should send Celestia a better present next time. Big piles of puke are so 90s.

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Fucking WIN!!! I regret that I only have one upvote to give.

Y'know, the Rainbow Dash issue of FiM's comic micro-series features television. The channel PNN gives live, sepia-toned video broadcasts.

Now what you've got here is some good potential. I shall watch and see where this goes. Don't disappoint. :pinkiehappy:

I wrote something like this once. I mean, it was rewriting each episode with more technology, but only because it was a human in Equestria crackfic.

I really like this story, but be careful. It's going to be a lot of work, especially now that we have 65 episodes. If you keep writing at your current rate, you've committed yourself to 300,000+ words. Not to mention more seasons.

Have fun!

The...Uh...The Magic of Gathering!"

I see what you did there.:twilightsmile:

That ending...

This is just brilliant, keep up the good work!

What the heck is with all the comments being downvoted just for complimenting?:twilightoops:

This entire scenario is complete GOLD! Need MOAR!

"I fear no pony. But that thing... It scares me." Twilight whimpered softly.

Me too Twilight... me too...

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I actually did, but I refreshed it a few times, then it worked

...I haven't laughed this hard in a long time. :rainbowlaugh:

Thank you! :yay:

I look forward to reading more of your work. Spelling, grammar, punctuation, and tone are all excellent. :twilightsmile:

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Absolutely brilliant. I look forward to more! :twilightsmile:

2824913 Later. I'm working on other projects and dealing with being sick and moving, at the moment.

when I first favourited this I quckly got sad that I realised it was dead.....but now. Now there's a huge fucking smile on my face

I just read the other chapter last night, and I thought, "shame it's dead...". I obviously have subconscious deadfic resurrection mindpowers. :pinkiehappy:

Not to be a pain or anything (:fluttershysad:), but when is more of this story planned?

5571454 I dunno! It's a lengthy process (although not usually as lengthy as it was between the first and second chapter), but I'll have you know I've already started on chapter three!

Oh I'm so happy to see this back. I hard to remember what this was when it updated, then reread chapter one. That second chapter was wonderful. It's not just "Twilight-is-an-angry-bitch," there's a lot more to her.

Keep up the great work! As long as it's not years, take your time on the next chapter!

5571486 i want twilight to use tech to save the day

Foxi are you a necromacer?

5605930 It's funny because Darkswirl is :D

I see this has been revived. I approve. :pinkiehappy:

5850945 I have a shit ton of catching up to do. Season five now. :applejackconfused:

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