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Scootaloo is worried about her wings. They're so small - what if there's something wrong with them? Worry turns into anxiety. What if she'll never be able to fly? That thought scares her more than anything.
Rainbow Dash isn't the most eloquent of ponies. Can she find the right words to cheer her honorary little sister up?
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Well then.
This was unbelievably amazing and has now joined the ranks of my favourite Dash/Scoots fics ever.
(Plus you also get bonus points for using the "flight is based on magic" headcanon, something I've subscribed to for a while. And it was nice to see Twilicorn too.)
Thanks for making my day today a little bit better than it was twenty minutes ago.
I just love a well-written Scoota-fic, and this is easily up in the Top 5.
Scootaloo with a happy home life, her relationship with Dash, the characters themselves being really well done, it hits everything perfectly.
Nice story. He he, flight isn't based on magic.... it's a matter of being a pegasus.
Determined to read again!
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all ponies are magical in some way, it's just that the magic is shown in different forms
Excellent piece, wonderful use of character and a well done story.
Nice to see a piece with Snowflake used to illustrate the 'small wing' fallacy, with Twilicorn and Flutters going the big wings reversal.
Good use of the subtle nature of pegasus magic with reference to cloud walking etc.
Oh and before I forget, "I am a leaf on the wind, watch me soar" - the late Hoban 'Wash' Washburn,
best Firefly reference ever! (okay I was honestly channeling Dash on that, but still bonus points all the same for the for the use of allusion that the series has made such wonderful use of)
Honestly this is the template for a what Season 4 'Flying Lessons' episode should be.
Keep soaring like that leaf on the wind.
For maximum effect, I recommend listen to this while reading.
This was an beautiful story, worthy to be a season 4 episode, the characterization(especially Twilight and Dash),was spot on, and I liked how you used Snowflake for something more than comic relief.
And Rainbow having a wing complex about Fluttershy wing being longer than hers
, brilliant.
Scootaloo and Dash approve this story
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What manner of witchcraft is this?
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Burn the witch!
Er, I mean... >__>
It's all Zecora's fault!
I don't know why but something seemed very Peter Pann to me... well more like hook with Robin Williams. also nice serenity reference.
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I love that movie.
Excellent. Loved every word.
Also, goes with my own belief, since first seeing Snowflake, that wing power has nothing to do with the wings themselves, but inherent magic. Same reason Rainbow leaves a trail and Lightning Dust does too.
Also, nice to see Scoots have loving parents instead of the usual orphan route.
Entire fic was well executed.
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Thanks. Though, the show does seem to suggest that wing power has something to do with physical strenght, hence why they actually had to train for the hurricane thing. That said, for Scootaloo to use her scooter the way she does, her wings must be absurdly powerful already. Between that and Snowflake, I don't buy that her wings being small or weak is the reason she doesn't fly.
Frankly, "pegasi magic" is the only explanation that makes sense to me.
I know fanfics often make Scootaloo an orphan, or have her come from a troubled home, and I guess that's fine if you're writing a story about those specific subjects. But for something like this, I think it would be kinda overkill to bust out the dead parents and child abuse. Sometimes it's just an ordinary kid having a bad day, you know?
2597463 I'll agree with this. Seems that wings don't necessarily generate lift, but they do generate thrust, measured in wingpower.
As far as the story goes, it's well written, fairly well paced, and the ponies are in character. Minor nitpicks with a few awkward sentences and repeated words, nothing worth talking about. Very solid, cute, feel-good oneshot. Thumbs up.
D'aaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwww.
Also, do you have any idea how relieved I am to see a Scootaloo story where she isn't homeless, abused or an orphan? Very rarely do I see stories like this... I guess I'm not looking hard enough.
Very nice.
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This was damn good.
Reminds me of what Douglas Adams wrote for The Guide:
"There is a knack to flying: You must throw yourself at the ground and miss." (or something along those lines)
~Skeeter The Lurker
This doesn't have a youtube dramatic reading! I can't read and play borderlands two at the same time. Which by the way just happens to be available on steam until Monday 10am pacific for currently less than $14... just saying. I guess that means I'll have to read tonight. I hope your story is worth it, here I go...
Amazing story. You perfectly captured the feeling of overwhelming fear that everyone faces at some point as a child.
This was the happiest story I've read in a long time about Scootaloo learning to fly. Loved it.
"There is an art to flying, or rather a knack. Its knack lies in learning to throw yourself at the ground and miss. Clearly, it is this second part, the missing, that provides the difficulties." - The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
wow.
You really captured the spirit of Scootaloo trying to learn how to fly, you made it very easy to empathise with the character in a way that very few writers have done, save by going down the orphan et al route (which is perfectly fine if you can make it work, but it's a welcome change when that doesn't happen) I would very much like to read more of what you've written. I also liked the way you added depth to Snowflake, rather than just using him as a comedic foil, which is what normally happens.
As said, top notch and I'd like to read more of your work.
Got here through a group story addition. It was a nice read.
Should be "none".
Also, Cheerilee is spelled with two 'e's, not one. Just a minor spelling error.
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Fixed! I didn't know about the non/none thing, actually. Learned something new today.
I don't normally favourite 1 chapter stories, but when I do, Its because they are exceptionally awesome
and this is one of those cases
Size doesn't matter?
Ya gotta be ki'dn me.
No but seriously... Think trough the concept before writin' it. Great story and all but.... the size part? And you diddn't make it better by the whole Fluttershy's wings are bigger the Rainbow Dash's and RD was embaressed and jealous 'bout it. That is just to much.
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I'm still not sure what you're even talking about. The "size part" is sort of the main theme of this story.
2758366 You will get it someday....
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I really don't think I will.
And if you insist on being coy rather than actually telling me what your issue with the story is, then frankly, I don't see why I should care.
2760728 yeah... just... you will understand someday. Untill you do that; ignore it.
This story was really fun. It's tales like these that remind me of why I like FiM in the first place; equal parts comedy, heart, and growth.
Rainbow Dash especially shines. Lauren Faust was reported to have said that Dash wouldn't make for a very good sister, but I like to think that she could grow into the role.
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Neko's trying to make an "adult" joke.
On a story about Scoots learning to fly. Halp.
D'aaaawwww, that was adorable.
Also, your Firefly/Serenity reference was noticed and appreciated.
ADORABLE!! <3
2595448 How dare you blame Zecora!
Nicely done, dude! Great development, good pacing, and no Scootabuse! I love the idea of earth pony genetics at play, that makes a lot of sense. Have an
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Huh, wing envy among the pegasi mares. I'm guessing you were thinking of something analogous to this at the time?
Be the Leaf Scootaloo! BE THE LEAF!
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That was awesome! And what kind of ponies Scoot's parents are made me think that might be why her wings might be the size they are. I like how Rainbow helped Scootaloo deal with her problem. And Snowflake... I had never really knew his name, so I just called him Binky. But anyway, I figured he would be a good example of "size doesn't matter".
And making Scoots go through all of these emotions, I thought that was well done.
Come on, Rainbow, it's one inch. There are probably tons of ponies with larger wings than you, but would never beat you in a race.
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Glad you liked the story.
I think maybe Rainbow's complex was less "My wings are too short!" and more "Fluttershy has longer wings than me!"
This was surprisingly great. I'm not much for one-shots but this certainly meet's my criteria for being an epic RD/Scoots read.
I award it four/five
I just adore Scootalove stories. This one is no exception.
/10
Huh. Scootaloo's subconscious has a pretty surprising grasp of Latin. Although it should practice matching case and gender a bit more: Parvae Alae Horribiles.
Hi there! You know, Fimfiction now have Bulk Biceps (ex-Snowflake) character tag! You can add it to your story!
This was a lovely story. Good job with the characters and their feelings about the situation!
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Thanks. It's a bit outdated but I still like it.
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Well, I had to have a look, given my own story's subject matter.
Have to say, I think yours is the better effort, with a lovely depth of feeling. The way you wrote both is just amazing.
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Well, I don't know about that. I mostly wrote this to voice my headcanon on Scootaloo and pegasi in general. Yours is definitely more original and I'd argue it's more poignant as well.
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Both characters, I meant to say.
But I loved that bit where Scootaloo is questioning whether or not her wings will get bigger, and Dashie is trying to comfort her ... in her own way.
I am a leaf on the wind. Watch how I soar.
This was really good. Everyone seemed in character, and a good explanation for how pegasi can fly. I enjoy stories where RD plays the older sister to Scoots.
Feels like it could be an episode, honestly.
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That's pretty much what I was going for. Glad you liked it.
that made my day
This is now one of my favorite fics of all time! The internal struggle... just beautiful and it felt like a real episode of the show.
/10