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Nobody ever knew how much Twilight Sparkle loves her mom, now that she's in Ponyville studying the magic of friendship and doesn't get to see her much. Mother's Day is nearing, but can Twilight make it up to her mom in time for the special occasion?
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Is there more?
2582023 No, sorry. Forgot to change the 'Incomplete' to Complete'.
Feels kinda cut short near the middle. There's a disconnect there
Completely out of character Twilight. Thumbs down on this one.
Dear Muffin,
I recently came across your story "I Love You, Mom" on Fimfiction.net, and I wanted to share some thoughts with you. Firstly, I appreciate your creative effort and dedication to writing within the My Little Pony universe. It's always exciting to see fans expressing their love for these characters through fanfiction.
However, after reading your story, I found myself quite perplexed. While I understand that fanfiction allows for creative liberties, I couldn't help but feel that the portrayal of Twilight Sparkle was quite out of character. Twilight is typically depicted as patient, understanding, and nurturing, especially towards Spike, whom she considers family.
In your story, Twilight's behavior, particularly her yelling at Spike, felt jarring and inconsistent with her established personality traits. It left me questioning the authenticity of her character within the narrative. Furthermore, the premise of the story seems to conflict with the established dynamics of Twilight and Spike's relationship, as they share a bond built on mutual respect and affection.
I encourage you to revisit the characterization of Twilight Sparkle and consider how you can stay true to her established traits while still exploring the themes you wish to convey in your story. By maintaining consistency with the characters, your narrative will likely resonate more strongly with readers who are invested in the My Little Pony universe.
Thank you for your dedication to writing and for sharing your work with the fandom. I look forward to seeing how you continue to develop as a writer.
Best regards, Artist.
PS, this paragraph does not make any sense whatsoever, it is just a wall of text. It makes no sense, please go back and rewrite it, or delete it if it does not fit.