"After the deaths of the other Element Bearers Twilight falls into a slight depression. Luna, being a good friend attempts to help her through it. Will she be able to, and if she does what will happen next?"
Due to me being completely uncreative at the moment, I would like to thank AppleDashFan132 for the description. Sorry for the previous one. I got bored and just put the plot down so I could put up the story :3
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A few minor errors, but nothing big. A fine tale.
I... It.... What's the point? What's to read, you just spoiled the entire story right in the Description. I'll just have to come back to it in a few weeks when I forget about it, and remember not to reread the Desc...
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Yeah...I'm sorry but the random people kept telling me that I had to give a detailed description to put it up. Its because of things like that that I avoid reading the description. Sorry
Well, I have to say, you made a story that was fairly good, and given a little extending on details, could become a slight bit more. The premise was promising, and could make a smooth transition. My only downfall for this story is the emense rushing. You could take it so much farther. With more detail you could extend it, make it better. With more time you can develop the feelings between the two to a more reasonable amount. And given that even without these two elements you can still make it an enjoyable yet short read means you have a lot of potential for this. I look forward to future writings.
Great job!