I don't think moving quickly is a problem. There are six elements; if you conquer them one at a time and take your time about it it takes forever, especially with the rest of the plot moving forward too.

Be interesting to see more of Twilight; she seemed completely under Lilith's power, but you are implying she isn't fully gone until her friends are.

Only suggestion is that usually you want at least a few moments between the "cum and be mine" ultimatum and the actual cumming.

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Oh, you'll see more of her. Lots more.

the sex was a little too quick for my tastes, especially since fluttershy actually has a pretty strong will hidden in her. if this was rainbow dash i coudl understand it going fast, she's just all talk, but i feel like this should have gone longer......still it was pretty good. also, theres tones of things u can do without repeating urself. dont just focus on the tail...have her rub her hooves against her target's pussy, eat her out, use some toys or other objects, grind against her, use telekinesis to vibrate her pleasure centers, etc

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If Rainbow Dash were all talk she wouldn't be an element of harmony.

I like this very much.
I'll have to finish the rest tomorrow.